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Golden Flare


I love to create stories.

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The awaited day has come; the release date of Kingdom Hearts: Unchained χ for the Virtual Reality Headset, or VRH for short, and no one wants it more than Devin, who saved up his money for the game.

Devin was the social outcast of Canterlot High School, people turned a blind eye to him once they figured out he was a gamer, believing he didn't have anything better to do than watch a flickering video screen all day. When he noticed people began alienating him, he chose to live by a life lesson he learned from an old movie: "When the world turns its back on you, you turn your back on the world."

So that's what he did.

After he had gotten the game, he wanted to try it out right then and there, and once he did, he was amazed by the graphics and reality of the game.

But he and the other players will find out that this isn't all it's cracked up to be, as it is a game to the death...

Follow Devin and his potential new friends as they traverse the quests, defeat Raid Bosses, and try to survive the game to its completion.


A parody of Sword Art Online.

Tags, character and genre, will be updated as the story goes.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 14 )

Haven't read it yet, I'm about to, but I have to say before I start, that you absolutely must not make the same mistakes as SAO(For example, a reason as to why the head set can kill people), and I implore you to make sure you don't rush the pace of the character development.

got no idea youlike Sword Art Online, better don't follow everything of it, i mean i kinda interested in that anime, but i'm not much otaku

Couldn't really get into SAO, but I like Kingdom Hearts and I put a lot of time into unchained, so Ill give this a chance to impress me.

Golden this story has some juicy stuff man, keep it up!

So now after reading the first chapter, I got to say...It already feels rushed... Though the content is interesting, the way you structured it makes it feel like a puzzle that's missing a few pieces, Swiss Cheese holes and all. It's like you were more concerned about getting it out, rather than making sure it's completely good...

So as I said before, do your best to not rush anything and you should be good.

7580164 Sorry about that, I didn't have much to go on for the beginning, but I promise the next chapter will be longer and with more character development

7580172 this is part of the equestria saga?

7581510 You went for a skill based leveling system? Sweet as cherry pie.

OK, I'll read this story, but in the future, please describe what the characters and made-up heartless look like...

Comment posted by Sturleght Glommar deleted Mar 29th, 2017

7915058 Wretched Witch wasn't made up, it was from the actual game

Will this continue too?


Curious on what Spike might do if the Rainbooms were playing this too?

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