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Twilight Sparkle, in an attempt to make trips to Canterlot quicker, tries to create a magical doorway. However the doorway leads to the bedroom of a very surprised human on Earth. Expect some romance, light comedy, tears and coffee.
Finally, my internet connection is back up and running. It's been a long couple of days.
>>804157 - Yes, this will be covered in later chapters. There will be flashbacks which will fill in the empty spaces.
>>804208 - It's not over yet. Part of this was just testing the waters to see how well it was received. No point in writing a lot if there's no audience for it is there? 
>>805485 - A door swings both ways but who's to say that both ways lead to the same place? 
>>806137 - Dialogue is a little harder for me to do. It takes a lot of thought to try to speak like the characters in question and usually they wind up all sounding alike as I have a tendency to just write on the fly. But I'll see if I can include more in future chapters.
>>806483 - Point taken. I rushed the ending and that's never a good thing to do. Hopefully I'll have worked out more of the kinks in my writing muscles in the next chapters.
Next chapter should be up for posting in about a week or so or sooner if I can get past this current block.
Joe,
The issue was not a rushed ending. My amazement comes from the fact that the English language was used to produce "Man and pony came together as one". Now I've seen everything, all poetry and prose are fulfilled. It's time to pack it up.
Shakespeare could never have imagined.
"the memories of what happened last night came flooding back to him and admittedly for a moment, he felt a little weird. After all, he spent a good portion of last night having sex with a pony."
Joe,
I was hoping for more gems like this. You did not disappoint. This time I was drinking iced tea and somehow managed not to spew it everywhere.
Marvelous! Excellent chapter.
hmm... You know, a little drama caused by maybe one of her friends might be just what this story needs... I just hope for not too much discrimination from Ponyville's inhabitants, but it'll be interesting to see what you do in the future nonetheless.
That's what I get for trying to be subtle. I don't want to give anything away as I'm still working out the details but I have left some hints here and there. Although that might also be misdirection, or this comment could be. Time will tell. 
And thanks to all for the comments, I really appreciate it. It's been a long time since I wrote anything and I'm glad that I least I have an audience that likes what it is I'm saying.
>>880330 >>880346 That version of Lyra is from the story "Background Pony". I read the first chapter and decided that I wasn't going to read the rest until it was finished and I knew whether it would have a happy ending or not, since it was really well written and I'm a sissy about well-written sad stories.
Bingo. And considering I mentioned it at the beginning of the story, kudos for picking it up.
As for the mysterious watcher, there's no reason why it is there can't be more than one of them. 
Let's not forget AJ doesn't seem to trust Rick, RD is nowhere to be seen, Lyra is never remembered after a few moments and we haven't heard much from Spike now have we? 
But all shall be revealed in time. And once again, thanks to all for reading.
"...but nobody really wanted to hear about Fluttershy's rabbit."
The term yes and possibly the concept but I think it makes sense in the context given. A device that cools off a mare when she's in heat and I honestly didn't know what else to call it. But you never know, ideas like this is how the fandom grows. Look at Lyra, there are so many stories out there where she's interested in humans or of becoming human. It might not be cannon, but it's made it's way into enough stories that it could be considered correct in the fandom. So a society where mares outnumber stallions and there's the occasional heated moments, there's going to have to be a way for them to work through this especially if there's no other way to combat it.
I didn't want to describe it although judging from Fluttershy's reaction it does have... sexual connotations. But more on that later.
Well now i'm getting very curious about our mystery mare.
Also, i've noticed that the whole herd thing sounded very familiair *wink wink*
But i'm ok with that, after all most ideas on this site start and from that they grow and keep growing, thats one of the things that i love about this fandom we create so many assets to the Mlp universe and there are quite a lot that stick just as much as the series itself, like the whole human obsessed Lyra, in a LOT fic's that has Lyra she has a hobby called humans.
Anyway great chapter, keep it up this is GOLD.
Holy crap, that's a lot of responses for today's little addition. Glad to see people are still reading this, I'm hoping it's because you like it.
There's been a lot of talk about "stealing" from Xenophilia. I will admit that I read that story and it's definitely one of my favourites. However, I didn't intentionally "steal" anything. At best, I borrowed a couple ideas.
Re-reading it and going back and re-reading Xenophilia I can see where people would think that I've taken an idea or two. The Cakes being monogamous, the idea of the herd and the cooler. Beyond that, I don't see it although if somebody wants to show me where else I've done this I'd appreciate it. But within the context, these ideas work. In a world where females outnumber males 10 : 1 or whatever the amount would be, you simply can't have a society built on monogamous relationships. You'd have polyamorous relationships and more than your fair share of fillyfoolers. Yes, none of this is canon but then it is a kids show so they can't really put that in there.
I will however try to pay more attention from here on in on what I'm writing. Maybe instead of writing on the fly as I do, actually build an outline before just winging it.
Again, thanks for reading.
Another chapter done.
Good thing I have a tendency to write bits and pieces in advance then go back to work on the ideas to flesh them out later. There's still a couple more chapters to be written, not sure of the exact number but I still need to finish off a few things before I can put this baby to bed.
..................someponies bound to get a major beatdown for this, for one thing doing this during such an occasion in front of several of the most important/powerful individuals in the kingdom.......>.>......twi is basically a walking nuke when she goes firemare in rage mode.....
>>932785 Love, while beautiful and powerful, can also give way to passions. And at times passion can be destructive, twisting love into something dark and dangerous. Unrequited love is a common aid of this longing passion, sending those who desire the one they love into dangerous fronts even into the "If I can't have you, no one can."
Emotions are powerful magics, capable of destroying empires and founding nations. They can great bonds that will last into the time immortal, or deaths in the thousands. It is why we must always becareful of our emotions and control them and not let them control us.
Rainbow!!
TRIXIE!!!!
wait... fillyfriend?? Don't tell me...
Okay, some minor edits made for spacing and for some reason the spellcheck did not flag "RD" as an invalid word. 
Guess it's my fault for thinking it's too much time to type out "Rainbow Dash" every time and stick with the quicker RD with the intention of editing it later.
And just to mention, or maybe I should have been more clear Rainbow Dash did not stab Rick intentionally. That was an accident and had Rick not gotten in the way that flying dagger of glass would have gotten Twilight instead. 
And finally. Yes, you read right. Trixie called Twilight her "fillyfriend". There will be an explanation later.
I suspect the main reason there's been rumblings of "stealing" is not the general sociological details such as the polygamy and whatnot (I agree that those are very well done ideas and were I to write a fanfic some of those would likely be lurking in the background) as it is the more specific details of characters and scenes. We have a human winding up romancing both Twilight Sparkle and Rainbow Dash and the scene where one of them excitedly realizes the implications of differing chromosome count while in heat. These similarities are noticeably beyond just the basic ideas about pony society.
That said, don't be discouraged. People were reading and enjoying this story before this inadvertent "crossover" and I'm sure most will continue on from here. Just keep writing your own story. We've already read Xenophilia. :)
Ahh now i said it that the word is found in the Dutch language and in the German language. (i thought you were German)
I can't speak nor read German.
Dutch and German are two languages with some similarities they still are two complete diffrent languages.
Justice has been served... a fate worse than death I say
As for our other victim... I hope she recovers
Ah good. A backstory for Trixie and Twilight's relationship. I was really starting to question the idea of not having a backstory (for some reason I thought that's what was up). Nice chapter though.
SN: Twilight seem a little OOC to me here, but nothing I can't ignore. After all, we don't really have any idea how she'd really react if she ever got in a situation like that.
Noooooo! Rainbow Dash! Please say she gets better! 
And what about the Great and Powerful Biatch? You said she was an empty vessel and her mind was destroyed by dark magic. What's to stop some evil entity from possessing her? How awesome / terrible would that be?
4 moustaches and a Rainbow Dash: 
Kinda reminds me of this^
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