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Fluttershy[mlp:fim] 1050

Joined June 2012
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    Fluttershy has been having terrible headaches tat are making her go insane. She can not get rid of them. Can she find a way to ver come her insanity before she hurts herself but worst of all....her friends.

    First Published
    24th Jun 2012
    Last Modified
    24th Jun 2012

    Comments ( 5 )

    #1 · 48w, 4h ago · · ·
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    it took me forever! And i hope you like it! :yay:

    #2 · 47w, 6d ago · · ·
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    You need to space out your paragraph. It hurts to read that monster of a paragraph.

    #3 · 47w, 6d ago · · ·
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    I agree with Chaos. Your formatting needs a bit of editing. Spaced out paragraphs for dialogue and new ideas is important. Other than that this can become quite interesting.

    #4 · 47w, 6d ago · · ·
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    okay i will try that next time thank you for lettng me know:yay:

    #5 · 2w, 4d ago · · ·
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    You need to carry on

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