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Adventure's in Kanto

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A normal day in Equestria until The main six disappeared.
taken human form the six friends mus find a way to reach
each other, or will something else reach them..

Rated T For Cursing, and other

Chapters (2)

How it all Begins · 26th Jun 2012 · 407 words
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A Start in Pallet Town · 31st Aug 2012 · 942 words
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FoxxehSquirrel

FoxxehSquirrel #1 · Aug 31st, 2012 · 1 · · A Start in Pallet Town ·

The concept sure is . . . different, from anything I've read.

Just needs some more work on grammar and structure, especially with some dialogue. You have lines from different characters in the same paragraph, and it feels a bit sloppy.

I'll still try to read and make sense of it.

Colbalt White

Colbalt White #2 · Sep 1st, 2012 · 1 · · A Start in Pallet Town ·

hmm good story but there are some grammar issues and some of the dialog was confusing maybe you should ask someone to proofread this story for you overall not a bad story

eeveeextreme

eeveeextreme #3 · Sep 6th, 2012 · 1 · · A Start in Pallet Town ·

Interesting Idea (plus I'm I fan of Pokemon and MLP) But the chapter could be a bit longer, as well as the story needs to slow down. It is escalating a bit to quickly in my opinion

Storm Striker

Storm Striker #4 · Jan 3rd, 2013 · 2 · · A Start in Pallet Town ·

I'm sorry for not continuing my story I had other problems and had to finish some projects back at school,
I am now continuing my story in a new way! I will start today hope it will be better.....
And I forgot my password !!!