going to read later. sounds interesting

just saying if you  favorite it please also like

I liked it TRACKING Looking forward to more.

>>798084798084 thanks its be a lot of work chapter 2 should be up soon

Amazing! 10/10

This story sounds good, I will have read it later.

cant wait for the next chapter when is it?

This is really good! Pretty dark for being associated with MLP, but still really good! I can't wait to see how the rest of the story plays out!

>>808826808826 soon I'm going to post one every week so the next one should be out on the 30th

>>808863808863

well can you expect anything less from a by-product of yours truely? (seriously, add a sinister emotcon fimfiction....)

>>812459812459

Why not ?

>>812510812510 Becauce he said so and thanks for checking out the story

cool story bra needs more dismemberment

Sorry if you catch some of the mistakes I made editing Chapter 2.  Hopefully it's good enough for you guys!

>>844772844772>>842311842311 it looks good trust me anyway yes it could be broken down into smaller paragraphs, thanks for pointing that out DarkStar911, also remember its a first time fic for me and a first time editing job for Calcos and mistakes will be made but if we go back and fix and learn form them we can make something truly special out of this

>>847786847786 yay whats weird is if you give me a good story and then a version of the story that includes sex and/or gore i would pick the mature one or wouldnt we all lololol im bored

>>848502848502 Your talking about the original darkness aren't you

>>850517850517 what? no i haven't even read the original one you said you deleted the so called terrible mess

>>852917852917 sorry I guess I miss understood that

>>853610853610 i was just sayin if you wanted to read a book and there was a version without sex and gore or a version with sex and gore i would take the further  

and most people would do the same

>>853938853938 yes agreed good sir

>>854349854349 clapping fest

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>>854423854423 I know

it kinda reminds me of alf a little bit

Friendly Dragons? And how is it Night swirl can use magic.

cant wait for the next chapter liked this one

>>941986941986 thanks I put a lot of work into clearing things up with the dragons

>>941986941986

Also, don't forget to give us a thumbs-up.  That would be greatly appreciated!

I really like what you did with the Dragons. So Asher is half Alicorn and half Dragon.......THATS SOOOO COOL

>>943711943711 well he's half pony half dragon but you pretty close also This was the most experimental chapter in the whole story, I was so nervous that I might have screwed things up lastly Thanks for enjoying the chapter it took more work then I thought it would

sweet hes gotta eat meat now thats a challenger, me myself I love deer meat especially when I hunt it myself with my shotgun it tastes so fresh with none of those preservatives cant wait for the next

wow Awesome orgin for Spike Cant wait for more (ps got my laptop)

>>10275671027567 thats great Lost mine that why I've been gone but I'm back

Well, much later than it should be, I finally got around to reading this.

At first, this seemed to fall into the trap of "too much fanon, not enough canon", but thankfully the canon characters started appearing, and even before then it still felt like Equestria. I must admit, I'm loving the story line, and I very much intend to keep reading. Keep it up!

>>12671901267190 Finished reading up 'till now! Your story is quite wonderful! It has a lot of potential and is pretty well written. The relationship between Asher and Cloud Walker is a great one. I have always been a big fan of brotherly love in fics. But yes, keep progressing in your writing and continue this wonderful story!  I hope you enjoy Feral, and if you want, I will give a shout out for you next chapter!

asher can't seem to be able to stay concious for mare than a chapter!

can't wait for the next one

>>14851361485136 lol thanks

Ok so all in all i honestly love this series but in all seriousness you really have got to work on your grammar because in many spots such as here

“I’m ok with, and...”

For some reason, we couldn’t help, but to think about Rainbow.

P.S. please don't take this the wrong way I'm simply giving constructive criticism

thanks for your time

sincerely,

North

>>15657511565751 It's fine, what really bothers me is that I do have editor so by the sounds of things I need to have talk with them, I do need to now are these grammar mistakes commonly found thought out this series or what?

>>15684781568478

well i've seen a few mistakes in almost every chapter but hell even flimflam has those regardless of bunsen's editing it was just alot more noticeable in this chapter is all but all in all this is a kick ass series its actually getting to be as good as for the ones we love

P.S. sorry about the late response

>>15744071574407 np and flim says hi

>>15744071574407 np and flim says hi>>15744071574407 and he thinks your a bro

>>15744681574468

cool tell flim i said hi and thx for the compliment ^-^

Wonderful as always!