Sonic rainbooms are not fully understood by pony kind. Little research has been done upon this rare phenomenon or the effects that they can have on the user. Researchers theorize that under different climatic conditions the effects can differ drastically. Currently only one pony has the ability to fully perform such a feat but where will it lead her?
Only you can find out.
Not really very dark but it is probably worth the tag
Will be updated sometime in the future. Notes are all written, just need the actual text.
Chapters (4)
hoh my gawd this is awesome
I like this
OOOHHH! looking awesome!
Not bad! Have to say that I want to read more of it!
I always nit pick certain details when it comes to having military personnel in a story, so don't take this the wrong way. I do this to freaking Hollywood movies and such as well, so don't feel too bad. This is just me passing along information. I'll leave an actual review/comment on the most recently posted chapter.
Over: a radio proword that ends a radio transmission and means that the sender is awaiting a response. Out: a radio proword that ends a radio transmission and means that the sender is not awaiting a response, usually used by the superior of the two on the radio. Break: a radio proword that means the sender is not done transmitting, but needs to pause for some reason or marking the next line for a MEDIEVAC request. Wait: a radio proword that means the sender is done transmitting, but the sender is not yet finished talking, usually used when new information is being reported to the sender. Over and out: a made up Hollywood radio proword that is not grounded in the actual military, using this just shows that you do not know proper military radio etiquette. For more on military radio etiquette, I recommend FM 3-21.75 chapter 11.4. This gives you all you need to know about basic military radio etiquette (and as I was told in training, "keeps you from sounding like a jack*** over the radio.")
(Source: Soldier in the US Army)
Another quick note, There is no such rank as "Flight Lieutenant", only Second and First Lieutenant [O-1 and O-2 respectively] in the USAF. Still reading through it.
(Source: Uncle in the USAF as a Technical Sergeant)
One quick comment: RD just made the situation a whole lot worse
Attacking an American soldier or Marine is a bad idea. The mission went from professional, to personal with that one act.
From time to time there are some very minor spelling and grammar mistakes (ie use-able is supposed to be usable), usually it's the military grammar so that's not as big a deal. Good work. Overall this story is shaping up to be quite the interesting ride. Can't wait to see what's going to happen next.
One last nit pick. The weapons that guards have are wrong. The US military has long since moved beyond the old M16A2 and is now using the M16A4 or the M4A1. M16A2 went out of use just before Desert Storm, if I remember correctly (this I'm unsure about, but I know it was phased out by the late 1990's at latest). Also, all branches, save the USMC (from what I've been told), use the M9 Beretta pistol. I'm fairly confident that the Beretta 92F is the civilian version of the M9, but there are differences (AR15/M16 type differences, which are mostly minor). Again, this is a nit pick, because I'm a soldier and just want to pass the info and experiences I have on to those who might find uses for it. Usually these are extremely minor overall, but add a more realistic aspect to the story.
This story . . . desperately needs a rewrite. It needs one because the idea that anyone, never mind a colonel, could mistake a multi-colored pegasus for a member of a Earth terrorist group is so ludicrously absurd that it breaks suspension of disbelief like a sledgehammer to a wine glass. The idea that someone could escape a base while banging around the sound amplifiers known as air vents is also absurd, as are several plot points. I say again, this needs a rewrite.
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Thanks for all this. I'll look over it when I have time and the last chapter is still getting edited for grammatical errors. All this info does help and, as you said, makes it more believable. I'll also change the flight Lieutenant as I thought that it would be the same as the RAF.
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Some things like this will be ironed out and made more believable later on. Thanks for the advice on things like that. A multi-coloured talking pegasus is also absurd.
♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪
43700 that rank is a RAF rank GO uk
I believe this story is dead.
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Nope, just haven't had much time to work on it, which I'm sorry to say. Will start on it as soon as I can.
Sorry about the delay
I've just started reading this, and all I have to say is I eagerly await a new chapter haha.
Moar pls!
I assume this isn't getting updated.
Wish this story was still alive. Doesn't seem like it though.
jut wondering is this got relations to bravo two zero or is it a callsign in the fic?
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Yeah got it from the book. Thought it sounded appropriate and was a reference to it.
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fair enough...it does sound pretty good i will read more later
well a very intersting Story, Keep going