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A mysterious device falls into the hands of Twilight Sparkle. She attempts to unravel its secrets, but Rainbow Dash and Pinkie Pie are more intent on using it to have fun.
Author's note: this fanfic was a submission for a contest between me and some friends. I will most likely write a sequel from all the positive feedback I've gotten. Thanks, guys!
I love portal, and this was a fairly interesting idea. But I have one suggestion, that would make it a bit easier to read. 
For example, but spaces between when a new character speak. Like this:
"Now, careful Derpy!" Rainbow Dash exclaimed. "You don't want to do any more damage then you've already done."
"I just don't know what went wrong!" Derpy said, hopping up and down on the storm cloud.
"Yeah... Its a mystery."
But other then that, I think it was pretty good. Keep it up, I'll definitely be reading!
Huh....seems like this could be given more back ground, as to why something made by humans just appeared, as to if one of the humans lost their device gun and it ended up with the ponies. I'm hoping to see Rainbow and Pinkie could on a crazy quest...maybe with Derpy. 
And be bad ass as they try to escape.
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