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    Viper9172's Stories (4)

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    "Come one, come all! Come see what the amazing Murgo has for sale!" Murgo, the salesman that sold Sparrow the music box, called. After several years of travelling he returned to Albion with greed in mind. Sparrow had heard of Murgo's return and went to find him, hoping to scare, if not kill, him.

    "Murgo! I should skewer you right here, right now!" Sparrow boomed.

    "Whatever for?" Murgo was taken aback.

    "Years ago you sold me a music box, that box got my sister killed, and I've been waiting for you to return." Sparrow explains coldly.

    "It's not my fault! You used it!" Murgo had a point. "I didn't know what would happen, I just needed the gold."

    "-sigh- I suppose you're right." Sparrow turns to leave when Murgo gets an idea.

    "Wait! Would you test another item for me?" The merchant asks.

    "What is it?"

    "A magic picture box! You zap it with lightning and it makes moving pictures from the future!" Murgo says excitedly.

    "Okay, I can try I guess. Where is it?"

    "It's right," Murgo picks up the bulky square, "here!" Murgo places the box down gently and Sparrow takes a step back.

    "You might want to move." Sparrow starts charging a shock spell and people gather around. After a couple seconds the shock spell is fully charged. "If this kills me, I'll kill you." Sparrow whispers before launching the lightning bolt at the screen and watching it come to life. "Wow. It works, now, what is this?" Sparrow whips the screen with his sleeve and watches the bright letters appear. "My Little Pony? What is a my little pony?"

    "I don't know. Let's start the bid at fifty thousand gold!" Murgo exclaims to the crowd. Sparrow reaches out and puts a palm on the screen.

    "Murgo...it isn't solid. Murgo...?" Sparrow starts. A bright light surrounds Sparrow's hand and starts to pull him into the screen. "Murgo!" Sparrow, in his last seconds, pulls out his crossbow, the Rammer, "I gotta do this before I forget." Mutgo turns around just in time to see a flaming arrow fly into his face. "That's from Rose!"

    In a brighter flash of light, Sparrow was gone. Sparrow, hero of the Spire, ultimate good and pure being, loved by thousands, gone. The picture box was gone too. All that was left was Murgo's body with an arrow in it's skull.

    PART ONE: THE WHITE PONY

    "I wish Spike could be here to dig...stupid dirt." Rarity said quietly. Rarity was jewel-hunting without Spike because he had to work with Twilight today. She was using a simple digging spell that she had practiced some years back to dig the jewels up, it left her with a massive headache though. "Oh! That is a large bundle!" She spotted a large group of rare ice-emeralds half a mile underground.

    "It's so far down! This will take forrreeevvvveeerrr." Rarity whined.

    "FFFFFFFFFFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU- LOOK OUT BELOW!!!!" Something called from above. Rarity looked for the source of the shouting and spotted something falling from the sky.

    "That isn't a Pegasus..." She muttered.

    "MOVE!" It then shouted. Rarity snapped out of her trance in time to get out of the immediate area, as to not be smashed.

    "Shame, it's not going to survive. I don't have strong enough magic to catch it." Rarity gulped nervously.

    *OOOOOOOONNNNNNOOOOOOOOMMMMMMMAAATTTTOOOOPPPPOOOOEEEEIIIIAAAA*

    The thing crashed into the area where the Ice-emeralds lay buried and created a large crater.

    "Where the hell am I? Where is my sword?" The thing grumbled. Rarity looked to her left and saw a gruesome looking sword embedded firmly in a rock.

    'Is this thing friendly? Surely something so fabulous couldn't be evil.' Rarity thought after getting a good look at the thing. (Sparrow's outfit was that of the Knotwhole knight...helmet not included.)

    "Ah! There it is!" The thing exclaimed. It shook itself off for a second before walking to the large rock his blade was stabbed into. It grasped the blade (The Daichi) and pulled it slowly from it's stone prison.

    "Um, excuse me?" Rarity started. It placed the blade on it's back and turned around. Rarity was expecting gruesome, disgusting features from something of this stature, but no, what she saw was tantalizing.

    "Yes?" The creature responded. 'Sweet Celestia it's voice is like honey!' Rarity thought to herself. "You gunna stare all day, or say something?"

    "Oh, uh, hi? No, that's silly. Are you alright?" Rarity stutters. The creature laughs.

    "I'm fine, you?" It responds.

    "I'm fine, better than fine really. Oh!" Rarity looks back into the crater. "You dug up the Ice-emeralds! That would have taken me forever. Thank you, mister....?"

    "Sparrow. And you are?" Sparrow checks his sword for damage.

    "Oh, my name is Rarity. How did you survive that fall?"

    "It's kinda hard to explain." Sparrow takes out his crossbow and makes sure it isn't splintered. "Anyways, I've survived way worse." Sparrow laughs.

    "I've never seen clothing that could withstand a fall from that high unscathed, what is it made out of?" Rarity sits on her haunches.

    "Special metals and cloth, they change depending on your disposition, red and black if you're evil and corrupted, and it looks like this when you're good and pure." Sparrow waved the cape, pure white. "Where exactly...am I?"

    "What do you mean? Equestria of course!" Rarity stands back up. "Anyways, I should be heading back to Ponyville, it's getting late." Rarity walk down into the crater and picks up the emeralds with her magic and walks back up. "Well, um, if you don't have anywhere else to go, you could stay with me, if you want." Rarity was feeling extremely nervous for some reason, whether it was because this...Sparrow, was very attractive, or that he was intimidating.

    "Well, considering I just fell out of the sky...I don't think I have much of a choice." Sparrow laughs again.

    "Alright then. It's this way." Rarity starts on the path to (Friendship...sorry I had to) Ponyville with Sparrow in tow.

    'Honestly, I'm not surprised Murgo's machine back-fired. Good thing I got him before I was taken. This...Rarity, looks like a giant marshmallow, an adorable marshmallow. Nice of her to offer me a place to stay without even knowing me, it's rather generous. Of course I can just thank the several bewitchment augmentations I have in this suit for that as well.' Sparrow thought. 'Worse things have happened I guess.'

    Comments ( 16 )

    #1 · 47w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Please note that my fics ALWAYS start out shitty

    #2 · 47w, 4d ago · · ·
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    not the best of starts but it couls be worse:trixieshiftleft:

    i'll keep an eye on it. don't disapoint.:trixieshiftright::pinkiehappy:

    #3 · 47w, 4d ago · · ·
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    "considering I just feel out of the sky"

    #5 · 47w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Always wanted to shoot Murgo in the face, but I never got around to actually doing it.

    #6 · 47w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>794353 Fuck! Thank you

    #7 · 47w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I do not like the start. Everything seems so sudden, so downvote for now but I will still follow. I will change the vote if you please me (the story, not sexually).

    #8 · 47w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>802774 The fuck? :rainbowlaugh: Why would I please you sexually? Anyways, ALL my fics start shitty...ALL OF THEM

    #9 · 47w, 3d ago · · ·
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    It's actually pretty good. what i recommend to start of a story is, try to describe the initial background of where the story begins. Where is it? What is it like? What's happening?

    after that, introduce the character that will become part of the main story and maybe give a little back story about him/her before you move along.

    sometimes when you start off a story with a dialog, you tend to lose some of the readers because they won't understand what's going on.

    like for example: what was in the box that killed sparrow's sister? what's the story behind that?

    though explaining some of the fillers can be a bit boring, it can give more detailed idea about the character, or the situation behind it.

    then again, this is just some positive opinions. I do like the story, so keep at it :pinkiesmile:

    #10 · 47w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>802838 The thing about it though, it is a video game crossover, you kinda need to know the game before you read. Ex: I don't read Diablo crossovers because I don't know shit about Diablo.

    #11 · 47w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>802854

    explaining it anyway will still help those who haven't played it. You don't necessarily need to explain the game, just explain the character. Your intentions for the fic i have no clue, but if you want to attract readers of all kinds, you need to keep that in mind. Or at least provide a small wiki link on the description about fable 2, up to you really :twilightsheepish:

    I don't know anything about fable 2, and yet I was still interested in the fic. I would be even more interested with a little more back story behind it too.

    but again, up to you. I don't tell you how to write :pinkiehappy:

    #12 · 47w, 22h ago · · ·
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    If anyone gets onto you for making Sparrow good; I got your back.

    #13 · 46w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>815275 Same here. If people don't like your decisions then they should read something else or make their own stories. But this story is awesome! Keep it up Viper! :raritywink:

    #14 · 42w, 5h ago · · ·
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    it should be Black and red looks cooler

    #15 · 8w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>802838 I've played Fable before [Sparrow's Sister used the box to wish to live in the castle [They got to the castle but the King Killed her and tried to Kill Sparrow as well

    #16 · 8w, 5d ago · · ·
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    this got me to get out my copy of fable and do a new playthrough

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