I dont know why it makes those spaces.

>>789564789564 The spaces are a good thing. You really need to break up the paragraphs. You also need to fix up your grammar.

This is intriguing, quite so. Hmm hmm hmm. Fix the grammar and we may have an accord on a favourite towards your story.

Yes my Chairman

Love the story man especially since you put Clayton Carmine as a main character (best gears solider there ever is)

keep it up can't wait to read more

Clayton Carmine FTW

Like the name change. I was lurking around and saw a person named Clayton Carmine commented on my stories but I realized it was you, valor fan. Also, nice to see that you picked up a knack for writing a story. I'm going to read this now and if the grammer and such isn't too bad, I'll keep this as a read-it-later and track it. Good luck because for me, it's pretty hard to kill off ponies. It seems just wrong for some reason.

ya... is confused as to whats going on

This has a LOT of grammatical and punctuation errors. And the first part repeated itself. But the plot is good. All you need to do is tidy up the page.

Who the hell calls Clayton Carmine gay? I Garentee they are probably dead

most likely there will be lambet, locust and cogs, equestria will look like earth in the cog universe in no time