hmm interesting... you really don't read very many stories about Vinyl's younger years. so that's an automatic plus. I can tell that this needs a bit of editing work when it comes to the grammar and such. if you don't already have an editor, I'd suggest you get one. if you can't find one, then let me know and I can help with it. but again, I'm really liking how it's going.

>>13092111309211 Thank's alot, I previously have been helping KMCA and Techogre on finding grammatical errors and giving ideas this is basically a one off for me

>>13092241309224

aah cool. but like I said, if you can't find anyone else let me know. reason why I say that is because by the time you ask around, you may find someone that you want to do this more than you want me to do it, and also it'll give me some time to finish up the other 2 projects I have going on right now. trying not to make myself too harried.

I will keep that in mind thanks.

Not bad so far.

>>13092241309224 Nice premise, here's to hoping for more

>>13200221320022 Thank's I am currently working on the next chapter actually!

>>13200321320032 I'm willing to lend a hand if you want it, payback and all that

Nah, it's okay you have enough on your hands I think I can handle this, and just because I'm doing this doesn't mean I am stopping helping you just let me know if you need help and I will be there.

Also you forgot Vinyl on your character list... might want to fix that. (oh god how bad is Jumper for that right now? Pot meet kettle)

*cringes* Rarity's mom works at a boutique? No way she works front of house with her garish fashion sense.

>>13282011328201 model for outfit's helping hoof that kinda work (should of explained it better will do alot of explaining in the next few chapters! :3) Rarity could go with her because she likes fashion

Vinyl interacting with Derpy... Priceless.

liking it so far.

>>13368211336821 I thought you might like it, we may be seeing alot more form her

yay update :D moar plz

Also gotta love derpy

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Derpy_Hooves.png

>>13916271391627 Derpy seems to be the main attraction really, there will be more antics from her in further chapters.

>>13916691391669 yippee

So far so good, but the only problem I have is that Cherrilee should be the same age as Applejack, Pinkie, and  fillies. If she was this old, she should have looked a bit like Granny Smith in the present.

Those sort of things bother me a bit....

>>14491331449133 To be honest I agree with you on that, I was trying to get her to the age of a teen.

Because in the show I see her as likely to be 40 years old....and the Mane 6 to be round there 20's!

Thanks for your point f view it will help a lot in further stories!