... Man, what the hell are you doing reading this comment? Go read the story!

I wrote the whole thing, edited the whole thing, and drew the picture. Yeah I know that's some quality art right there, you were just dying to know ain't that right? I make fun of a lot of people in this... Specifically I call out AbsoluteAnonymous, Mystic, shortskirtsandexplosions, Ariamaki, Cloperella, AegisShield, RobCakeran53... cloppers, everyone reading, and bronies in general. BUT YOU'LL LIKE IT! ... y'know hopefully. Notice I'm a brony, so the main character is making fun of me too. And if you haven't heard of any of the authors I named... just go. Go see them. You've been living under a rock for too long.

...I like it.

Hey man, this is great. The attention you paid to environmental slang and styles is above par. Overall a pretty enticing story, but try and pay more attention to continuity throughout. I got a tad lost in some sections. The only other thing that stands out is a shy lack of figurative language/imagery, an adjective in front can only take you so far. Through and through, the amount of effort and work you put into this is hard to ignore. You earned my thumbs up, thanks for the read.

Sad to say, this story breaks one of the site rules if I'm not mistaken;

Found under FAQ> Story Submission Rules

''Meta stories, defined broadly as any story that is about the site or its users.''

Then the one above that rule might apply too, but I'm not sure;

''Stories that are clearly written as an in-joke between a group of people with little relevance to those outside the group, colloquially known as "circle-jerking."''

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Cuz my dream girl is like… Sailor Moon… or Sakura Haruno, Rise Kujikawa, Pinkie Pie. Heck I think some anime guys are pretty hot. Like Kiba, The Count, Sanji.”

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>>13309721330972 This is not about the site nor it is about user's accounts on it.

The fact that author is referencing the site does not mean anything.

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Okay, I just want to say that this fiction surprised me. Heck, at the begining I thought it is a troll parody of MLD, but in the end it turned out to be incredibly entertaining and actually deep.

I salute you sir, you created a masterpiece.