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Pretty good start, and no Thunderlane to boot. This looks promising indeed.
No Appearances by Thunderlane? Instalike.
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Figured I'd give him a break. A pony can only rape so much before the gun needs reloading.
7331033 About time we got less of that guy.
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new uses for gardening tools,
Ok, now I just have to get on this roller-coaster because I'm curious. Most of the gardening tools I know of are dangerous to have anywhere near the nether regions of the body...
NSFW coverart removed.
7331373 That cover art was not NSFW.
shameless lesbian clop yesss I-
lucky stallions stumbling upon lesbian activity, .....do they get involved?
Also what art were you using cause it's apparently nsfw
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Sorry about that.
Thought it would be safe enough.
Nothing but good times ahead here... Eeyup.
TFW people/ponies downvote a mod for following the bucking rules.
My body is willing, but tired.
I shall read this tomorrow... Er, later today.
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Was using a somewhat crudely censored version of a commission I had had done for the prequel.
Frankly, I don't see the point.
The hook of the first story was the weird need for a little special friend to help raise mare's tails without requiring them to do it themselves. An odd, but intriguing idea for a saucy story, and one that has just enough plausibility to make it not seem completely ridiculous on concept alone. That's why I don't like Fleur in these two stories.
Fleur may be the mentor, but Sweetie Belle is the every-man, the audience parallel. Fleur was the one enlightening an ignorant person about the ways of the biz. So when that time came where Fleur started showing romantic interest towards Sweetie, I pretty much skimmed over the entire thing. A lover is not the same as a teacher. For one, there was no basis for a relationship. Nudity, the plugs, helping others; this was all portrayed straight-faced and completely natural, not something to be considered romantic or sensual. Sensual for as as the readers, sure, and by extension Sweetie as her role as the audience surrogate could as well, but it was Fleur, not Sweetie, who was the instigator.
This shift from kinky/sensual tricks of the trade that wasn't supposed to be sexual in-universe--but sexual for the audience--was a bad move because, again, there is no basis of a relationship for the two. Now there is an entire story with a foundation built upon another premise that also has no foundation.
I'm giving the story one more chance, but this relationship between Sweetie and Fleur bores me.
Well, I'm afraid I'm dropping it. I gave it another shot, but I don't see anything to this relationship. I'm not even sure if it's romantic or not. Yeah, sex stuff happens and sex is awesome, but I don't see an actual hook to this anymore. If it's just weird lesbian sex stuff, fine, but that's not what got me into this to begin with. What did is gone, I don't see any reason to stay. Sorry.
I'm somewhat supportive of 7338401 's point. The first story was more than just the sex between Sweetie and Fleur, and I hope that this story is more than just seeing what strange new thing we can put up Sweetie's pooper.
My one actual suggestion would be to make Sweetie more active in these sessions. Sure, she does "things," but the sex so far has all been things being done to her.
Awwww...
I know Sweetie would love to have him wetting his wick in her honey pot and filling it up with cream before going to through her back door.
You TEASE
Ooooohhhhhhhhh shit. Oh shit. I think I know where this is going, you sly cockney bastard, you. Cat fight. Obviously.
Loved the chapter, man!
Commence read.
Didn't know there was a sequel.
There seems to be a typo in the second sentence "Along they way they met up with..."
This dead?
Please tell me there will be more of this intriguing story??
Please tell me this is not dead