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Bro Dash 2410151

Joined March 2012
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    Twilight awakens from a slumber, and doesn't remember a thing of what happened before, what is happening, or even what her own name is. Called by her subject number, she assumes her name really is Twelve. Getting deeper into conversation with the robotic, AI's voice, she learns more of both her past, who she is now, and what is happening.

    As one of nineteen, she goes out to find the other subjects, while surviving an infestation of mutants that are as deadly as much as they seem harmless.

    Then comes another question she can't ansswer directly. Will she survive this new world? Will she even meet another "subject?"

    Is there even anyone left at all...?

    First Published
    20th Jun 2012
    Last Modified
    20th Jun 2012

    Comments ( 5 )

    #1 · 48w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Let me know of ANY errors regarding SPELLING!!!!!

    #2 · 48w, 12h ago · · ·
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    You misspelled telling in the sixth Paragraph, more in the seventh paragraph, more in paragraph fourteen, silver, something, the, and outside in the fifteenth, trying in sixteen, need in twenty-one, something in twenty-four, thing and moving in twenty-five, acting into and the in thirty-four, the in thirty-six, without in thirty-seven, shots in thirty-nine, below in forty, the more and struggling in forty-two, also in forty-two achieve should say achieved, and also a couple of times in your story you say atleast, which should be two seperate words at and least.  Those are the mistakes that I found in your spelling.  This is an interesting story and I will be keeping my eye on it.

    #3 · 48w, 10h ago · · ·
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    Awesome story.

    can't wait for the next chapter.

    #4 · 48w, 9h ago · · ·
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    >>778296

    One, what were the numbers representing, and could you make a list or something, cause I lost track of what was a word and what was dialogue after the third.

    Two, dude, I spell my atleasts like so. Got a problem, I will not hesitate to muzzle you.

    #5 · 48w, 2h ago · · ·
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    Gimme monehz for reading nice story!

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