I don't usually read this kind of stories, but i like this one... It's actually turning a little scary, Anyways Good story.

I'm looking foward to the next chapter.

>>778236778236 Thanks ^^ Glad you enjoyed.

Unfortunately, FiMFiction doesn't have an "Action" category (Perhaps I will try to suggest it), but Dark seemed to be the next best thing for it. (I mean come on, the mother of all Grimdark fics is the main villain )

Next chapter might take a while, I need to think about where I want to take this story. With the current direction, I might not even be able to properly introduce the main villains, the whole reason I started this series, until book 3, at least without shoe-horning them in

wait, does this mean there's a Derpy grimdark? Why was I never told about this?!?!?

Hmmm.... so much promise here.... must read more.

wait, I'm not sure what happened. It was an awesome story and all, but I thought it was supposed to involve some anti-derpy. But she was only briefly there. Then the real Derpy was apparently back again with a new element and the audience helped win the day or something.(yes I know it has more 'books' coming)

Poor Prism Flare

*woosh*

Krushnazag: holy crap what was that?

Reader 2: Idk, I think it was the story.

Krushnazag: sweet decals though

Loved Pinkie though, *squee* she's so awesome

>>779499779499 I never said grimdark. Read my earlier comment.

>>782518782518 Anti-Derp was a parody on Anti-Christ. Book1 was originally going to be it's own story about the Derpy incident, but I decided to incorporate it into my main series as a prequel. I actually felt good about the pacing of this one. I didn't want the badies to run rampant for too long, I mean look what they've done over the course of -one- chapter. And don't worry, "Evil" Derpy will be making another appearance within the next 3 chapters, along with several other key characters who haven't so far. Hnnnhnnn hnnnnnnn

>>783141783141 Oh, well with how you said, "heavily inspired by the evil versions of the MLP characters" and then you had Pinkamena and evil Celestia and all that, I assumed you were using the grimdark versions (I've been finding lots of new grimdarks lately that apparently everypony knew about but me, like Cheerilee's Garden and all those) My mistake (though a Derpy grimdark would be amazing)

Yeah, I can see why you wouldn't want any of them out too long. But one thing you say here supports my opinion (though in the end it is entirely how you feel about the story that matters, not what i think). "I mean look what they've done over the course of -one- chapter." That's what I mean. This 5,747 word chunk had a 'mirror baby' born, evil Derpy murder some people and open a portal that lead to the destruction of Ponyville and ended with regular Derpy coming back after Evil Derpy's defeat. That's a lot for such a relativaly short bit of story. Though you're right, the pacing is good for how you have it, ratio-wise, that is. Everything fits together perfectly in terms of length. The problem is, they all fit together perfectly in a space that is much too small for what could happen. Like I said though, in the end, all that matters is whether or not it came out how you wanted and you seem to like it, so good job.

Anyways, keep up the story, I do so like it very much.

>>783325783325 If I may ask, can you send me a PM or something, or at least give me a list of all these grimdark fics (At least the popular ones anyway, such as the aforementioned Cheerilee's Garden)? I mean stories like Cupcakes and Rainbow Factory were heavy inspiration for the story (And I will be the first to admit that this is kind of a love letter to all those great stories), and it would be nice to be able to have a wider knowledge base on the grimdark fandom.

Yeah, it is a little content heavy. And I really have opened up an explosive can of worms with this one. So many paths I could take it, but I guess that's a good thing in a way given that I'm planning on making it a prolonged series.

Since this was the prequel, it will slow down after this. Book 2 could potentially even be 4 chapters.

I'm glad you're enjoying it, I enjoyed writing it, and being a tribute to my favorite part of the fandom means I hope I'm doing it justice.

>>783439783439 YEAH FOR GRIMDARKS!!!! Yeah, I'll see about getting you a list. I gotta go now though, so I'll send it tomorrow.