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    When a mysterious unconscious unicorn mare is found by the CMC, all of Equestria becomes threatened as unforeseen event unroll.
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  • 91w, 6d
    Brave to the Soul to be continued....

    I will be writing chapter eight...not like anyone will read it. As soon as I get my thing stright for an other story, I will be stating the writing. I hope it takes me less than two weeks to get it done when I start.

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  • 92w, 4d
    Brave to the Soul to be cancelled...in consideration.

    I tried working more on the story...i could post a half baked chapter for it...which i might, but wonder if anyone is even reading this.

    I am actualy working on a OC story, and hope it works out. I have put more thought into this story than my past ones...seeing as I work with the OC almost daily, and hope no one is mad that I am replacing my old story with it.

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  • 100w, 3d
    thinking of quiting

    My startup was fun, but my writing keeps slowing down to a halt. It not like I don't want to write any more, I just keep getting caught up in many thing., Such as games and my forums RP's.

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  • 105w, 34m
    throwing myself back into the fray

    After banging my head on the wall for some time, I have begain to force myself back into writing Brave...I have already as of now added and started writing moe of the new chapter. If things go as she should be, the new chapter should be out by next sat.

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  • 107w, 3d
    still having parent problems

    I have been able to have a place to write in private, but I get called away to often to get in the flow of writing still

    I only have about 300 words of the next chapter of Brave atm.

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Bo, a Brave Heart from the realm Harmonia, has entered a world unknown to her. With missing memories of what last happened to her, and no knowledge of how she got to were she is, puts herself on a quest to find out these question.she isn't the only new thing in the land of Equestria though.

Bo is from SNAFU's Sugar Bits.

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First Published
19th Jun 2012
Last Modified
19th Jan 2013

This is my first time at writing a story for the public, so please tell if I have done any mistakes, for i know i have.

i thunk it is to short at the moment and am curious as to see how it turns out:heart:

This is very good! I can't wait for the next chapter, For you're first public this is good! Take meh thumbs. :twilightsmile:

are you going to add more chapters?:rainbowhuh::twilightoops:

I see you're a bleedman fan, I'm a bleedman fan myself

OH, I like where this is going. :pinkiehappy:

:pinkiecrazy: You got my attentions my good sir please keep it up.

the next chapter will be up within the next week or so. I Will be trying to make the chapters longer too as well.

I haven't read it quite yet as i'm reading the sugar bits comcis right now but i hope you add more characters? :pinkiehappy:

I will be getting back to writing soon, I just found a site to read the Grim Tales:AfterBirth...i've been trying to find these forever.

anyone thats whats to know where i found them, there are in the bottem section of this page http://bleedmancomics.wikia.com/wiki/Grim_Tales_From_Down_Below

Oh boy.... bleedman + bronies. Hmmmm.:trixieshiftleft: Haven't desided.

...Okay, this was quite possibly the last thing I ever expected to encounter, ever.

I approve.

it is good so far:pinkiehappy:

Wait... is this...

It IS! :pinkiehappy:

I love Sugar Bits (as well as many of the SNAFU comics).

I just hope you update more often than your source material :twilightblush:

>>776523

I will be using Information thats probaly not in any of the web comic, though i do wish Bleedman did update more often.

As I've said before, check your capitalizations and such. Reading aloud should help you out, like the comb with the finest teeth.

Now for something new. The dialogue is not bad, BUT I don't know about the parts where Bo is talking to herself. It feels forced. Does someone really spell out what they are going to do out loud?

This doesn't look like much, but I'm kinda talking to you on skype at the moment of writing this, so bear with me. :twilightsmile:

uh, your gonna update some time soon right?:rainbowderp:

>>791545

i'm working on the 2nd chapter, but like i am trying to tell everyone, i'm a kinda slow writer....

about almost past the 2k work mark though.

So Bo meet's three of the elements. How will her meeting the rest go? Who is the intruder the changeling was talking about?

Man, Bo is not having that good of luck so far. RainBow Dash making fun of her name and Rarity makes comments about her clothes. If things don't get better for her then those ponies better watch out...she has some dangerous weapons in that bell of hers...:pinkiehappy:

Oh...man it seems that Bo wasn't the only one to be transported here...do the channgelings need to be afraid of a certain Big Bad Wolf?

>>796368

well i don't want to spoil to much, but Bo might be the only one from Sugar bits in the story... been debating to my self about it.

>>796574

Ah, well that makes it more interesting...and honestly, seeing Bo go against the wolf again may not be the best idea anyway (it didn't end that well for her last time...)

>>796738

i couldn't use the BBW anyways, it's attached to Red Riding Hood...and she is still in Ever After.

You are making a great work here :pinkiehappy:

I should be able to make longer chapters as the story starts running smoother, i should be able to have a new chapter up at least every week end.:ajsmug: this is just a guess though.:derpyderp1:

I know that I said i can maybe post a chapter every week, but ater some thought, i have come to say i will post them them when ever i have fully completed a chapter. I don't want to rush on a story, becuase that would only make it a bad on.

now bear in mind, i was having a bit of a problem think on how things should go in the story. i know most Sugar Bits fans will probably not like how i'm portraying Bo, but hey there is not much said about her in the comic.

I hope this chapter goes OK.

Good chapter, what is that dark being at the end?

>>853199

it's never good to reavel information before it's fully out, but ITS A MONSTER THAT WILL EAT YOUR SANITY.

>>853099 i'm a fan of sugar bits now and i say how you portray her is ok with me :raritywink:

its getting gooooood :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

>>853241 Has the creature appeared in the actually story already?

>>853707

Yes and no...i removed the the one part were i had said somthing about it in the end of chapter two before i changed it, but it was nothing mayjor. though you could think of the dream if you are kinda lost.

As dark shadow pulled the candy lance out of Bo’s body it spoke in a deep cracking feminine voice. “You are done for little lamb.”

“AWAKEN NOW BO!!”

Am I the only one the shouted this out in a mad scientests sort of voice? SAid by someone unisex ay? I am currios to how that sounds, I have NO IDEA what this cross over is about. For people like me could there be, I dunno, some things explained? The thing with the rams head seemed a bit sudden and the character speaking outloud to themself is a little... OFF PUDDING (I have always wanted to say that) I'm not sure if I can tell you what needs to be improved or not without knowing of where this is coming from. Otherwise, the writting is solid and is much better then my first story (Really I had to edit it the next day because of the ENORMOUS amount of spelling mistakes. To me, this is amazing for a first story):yay:

Also, screw spell check Ima two lazey

>>858073

everything is spelled right, i over read a few times to make sure, and i left a link to were Bo is from and the backstory on her if any one is to confused in the description...but i started the story the way it is for plot purposes.

Bo has a bell that can summon different types of things, most are ram themed....after what you said, i think it is best that i explain the bell a touch in the first chapter so that it isn't as confusing.

...Hmhmhm.  I was hoping he was going to show up!  And it looks like wasn't disappointed!  Now the question is; how well will you write him?:trixieshiftleft:

>>873603

huh? you are confusing me? if your talking about the shadow thing...it isn't the BBW...but it is the same thing as it. the BBG is tied to red riding hood so he is unusable.

Sorry, but didn't one of the first episodes show that sheep could talk in Equestria, just like cows and donkeys?

>>879028

I had thought about it, but wasn't sure if sheep were part of the other animals that could speak.

This is one crossover I wasn't expecting to happen. :rainbowderp:

Bravo!

Can't wait til she meets the rest of the gang.

>>883906

I really liked the Sugar Bits comic, and with my new fandom of MLP, i thought this could be a nice crossover.

Thought it would be kinda interesting to see where it leads me too.

The story is a bit on hold, as MapleStory has drawn me back in for a bit :applejackconfused: :facehoof: . will try to work on chapter 4... I do have a part of it done so far, and should have it out by next week most likely. :ajsmug:

With all big distraction about gone and a Helpful Proof reader (JohnPerry) I am getting back to righting my story.:twilightblush:

I still have a feeling that not many people care too much about it....:pinkiecrazy:

I feel a bit rushed on how i ended this chapter:facehoof:, might go and fix it later.:derpytongue2:

pretty good, i like it.

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