(Crossover with a Universal horror film loosely based off a story by Edgar Allen Poe.)
The girls are enjoying a break from school. Along the way, they meet Dr. Vitus Werdegast, a psychiatrist traveling to see an old friend, Hjalmar Poelzig. When their bus crashes and Sunset Shimmer is injured, they find themselves subject to the dubious hospitality of Poelzig, and discover that Werdegast seeks not friendship, but vengeance against Poelzig. Poelzig is revealed to be the leader of a satanic cult, and plans to sacrifice the girls in a ritual.
Chapters (6)
If Vitus Werdegast and Hjalmar Poelzig were voiced, what would they sound like? Also, are those real names?
7250441 Werdegast = Bela Lugosi, Poelzig = Boris Karloff. These are the names of the characters. Remember this is a crossover fic.
I think you mean a Devil Worship cult, Satanist just believe Satan is good while Devil worshipers Are Evil. haven't read this story sense am afraid one of the main characters is going to die. Is one of the main characters going to die?
7250802 I don't want to spoil anything but don't worry about the girls.
7250853 Alright. I'll read this when am not about to go to bed if I don't forget.
This is a good story and it is going well so far. I love Edgar Allan Poe. And I'm excited to see how this story goes along with his.
You use a good amount of descriptive words - not so many that it is overwhelming, but enough that I feel the place is real.
Some slight criticism: Fluttershy's reaction in this chapter to an animal being killed was completely out of character. Also slow down the plot a little. It feels as though you are rushing to get somewhere without letting us adjust to each setting. Another thing, consider your setting a bit more - a heated argument would be loud - so did the girls overhear what happened? Because realistically in that setting the would have.
I do live your story and look forward to reading more.
7256212 I've made a few adjustments to the chapter. Please let me know what you think. Thank you for your comment.
Fantastic! You're doing a great job with the characters from the movie and the girls reactions.
It has been a while since I saw the movie but I can still hear Lugosi and Karloffs voices and i'm eagerly waiting for more:)
I'm so hooked after reading this chapter.
Truly captivating!
You're so brilliant in your storytelling.
All right, Equine. ;)
This chapter is much better than the last. I like it a lot. I'm excited for the next chapter.
More!