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This story is a sequel to Moon's shadow
Luna and Alex are in a happy relationship while "A Canterlot Wedding" is approaching, what could go wrong ;-)
This is a sequel. I strongly recommend reading "Moon's shadow" first.
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More chapters please !!!
7257573 Of course, I'm working on it, but this life-size Luna statue does not build itself ;-) Luna Statue
Will Luna share? Will there be a big fight? Maybe both! Only time will tell!
Loving the story, awaiting more.
7298217 I am on it. But I'm still not sure what the conflict will be. The hive and changelings, a love triangle, or "the crystal empire", that would be next in the timeline. Maybe everything together.
7298666 If it comes to love triangle, maybe a herd?
haven't read a good story with that in a while... specially with luna and chrissy.
7299000 Yeah, I though about the herd concept, it feels a bit like a "character don´t have to decide on one love interest, get both"...
like an to easy way, but I like the kind of things that can happen in a Luna/Chrysalis setup.
Nooooo! Not Alex
Oh Joy!
Little kiss on the cheek Eh.
Bad News Bears Anyone?... Anypony?..... Comeon Now....... Fine
Not a fan of the end of this chapter. Don't get me wrong I don't really have anything against shipping with Chrysalis (though I would prefer Celestia) but having spontaneous sex with someone else when your partner is mad at you is just asking for a breakup Polygamous society or not.
7314158 I am very aware of that, I was not sure if I should write it that way myself. When I started the chapter my plan was to just have them a nice chat at dinner while explaining more about her changeling ability. But while I write and the characters interact, things change... The little remark "I been here before on a mission" brought me to explain what happened... I thought "that is a good chance to show she is open to both genders".
Next I wanted to make the reader feel even more for her, so I wrote her regrets about what happened and how she thinks she is not worth somebody loving her. Once she cried and was emotional, I thought "I said she worked only 2 streets from here, in this state she probably want to at least see her again", so I let her ask for it.
Once they got to the shop I thought about how hard it would be for a changling to have shared love with someone but that pony would not recognize it at all.
I would not say all changlings feel the same but, the princesses and Queen life longer and seemed to be more evolved. Lavender would have moved on by now, so let's give her a girlfriend... But how does Chryssi feel about that... I guess she would be happy in a way for her being happy but at the same time it would eat her up that I wasn't her... she wanted to have that bound but without be able to show her true form she could never have it.
We end up in Alex room. In my mind it is nearly impossible for him to only feel friendship for her by now, he is very caring and her need for love makes him love her more. She feels... She tastes emotions, she can taste what he is hiding from himself at that point. She feels this the first time and would never let him go from this moment. He tried to resist but he loves her too and feels her need... He give in to that even if it isn't a smart idea from our point of few. My original plan was to get them closer a bit slower and Alex resist the first time but after some explaining we would end up at a similar spot.
The next chapter will start with regret towards what he did but at the same time to see Chrysalis truely happy for the first time... There will be explaining and it will be hard to do, but he loves both of them and... Well I don't want to write the whole chapter here... Let's just say I see it was a bad Idea at some level, but the characters... 'Wanted it at that time' I guess that must sound strange if you don't write the way I do. I try to make everything good next chapter after this huge fallout, I don't know how the characters react to it yet, but I want both Luna and Chrysalis to be happy and will do everything to reach it... and maybe an additional adventure part will come too, not sure.
Luna's argument was cute.
I guess with Luna's case is that she isn't hurt because he had sex with Chrysalis, but more in the way of not being informed of a potentional herd member. Being left out once again. Different cultures and all.
7317529 interesting, which part is special made you laugh? I cried as I wrote the flower shop scene in the last chapter and wrote this chapter as soon as possible because the situation was eating me up.
7318083 right, but having sex with Chryssi is still a break of trust, he should have gone the official route and then if she approves her, they can do whatever they want, Chryssi/Alex, Luna/Alex, Luna/Chryssi, Luna/Alex/Chryssi. But she is okay with him falling in love with another mare, that normal for her. Fun fact: if everything will went well she and Chryssi can have a great relationship for hundreds of years after Alex is already dead.
7318196
If you make Alex die that is. He might become the dark emperor which holds his sanity and life which we all have been waiting for.
7318217 I guess Luna knows how to find some dark magic spells which can keep her lover around much longer then he should be... and with Luna and Chryssi by his side it should be easy enough to get Celestia out of the way.
... Book 3 "The Dark Empire"
I really wish I hadn't used my "Znegil" account for this story, I would love to add in some clop chapters in between... But "Znegil" is far to well know within my real-life friends and art-sites.... And I am the only one worldwide using it. I shouldn't even write this comment ;-)
7318116 It's just how cute Luna was being while yelling
I just see one of those mean looks that just looks cute if you had recorded it and
I like that bit of logic she doesn't mind so long as he loves her the same. In a world where herds are common enough I can see this not being a problem and she is being 100% reasonable.... oh and
that alone made me laugh. ( sorry for the brick wall of text )
7319467 Ok, I can see it now ;-)
Thanks for pointing things out, it is always fun to see how the readers react to different parts.
Another Chapter will be up in a few hours, I just have to proofread and format it.
I've been thinking, if you want a happy ending (as in all of them or maybe just him alone forever!
) You could explain that he actually DID die when the truck hit him, and doesn't actually need his blood to live, or something.
Cause i've also been imaging him in a fight, getting stabbed in the heart/throat, and then beating the ever-living-bleep out of the pony who did it.
P.S Discord could probably explain it.
7328857 Like Alex isn´t enough of a "mary sue" already ;-)
But sounds very cool.
Screw the rules I've got money!
7329010
Isnt that Trumps Slogan?
7329033
Seto Kiba from Yu-Gi-Oh Abridged series
7329045 ah
Good story!
But umm... you kinda might have misspelled something.
I think you mean trust.
Welp hope you continue the story it's good.
Ps it's near the bottom in case your having trouble finding it.
7330498 Thanks a lot, I'm always happy if someone finds an error for me since english isn't my first language.
7328857 and another thing, I wrote it somewhere in "Little Shockwaves", you can write your own spin-offs or retelling of the stories, normal or clop, and I would link them in a special chapter at the end, so anyone can find them.
No don't let Crissy die!
7340171 she already has holes in her anyway ;-)
Really?
How much is he worth?
7341347 wow, this "Prince" has a "price", sorry about that, it should have been Prince, it is correct now.
Thanks for showing me.
I probably would have reported Twilight to Celestia. Such hatred can be bad for the health
Fun fact:
this chapters name was "starting a herd" and should be about the proposal in the restaurant.
It had just the chapter name and the first sentence: "The next day Chrysalis had her first "changeling information" meeting with Twilight."
I tought it would go on like this: After she came back, she told me how... (3 or 4 sentenses what happened at the meeting with twilight) then on to the next day and restaurant.
But then Chrysalis demanded Alex should come with her and things developed...
so the whole chapter nearly did not happen ;-)
7349148 so I guess it was good for her to let it out
Any suggestions which mane or background characters they should meet while they are in Ponyville? I can't promise they will.
7351659 Keep up the good work! I Liked the prequel to this story so I hope this sequel is completed, also to have english as a second language you're not that bad of a writer.
7359226 thanks a lot for your kind words. I will finish this story for sure, but I am not sure how many chapters it will take. I expect it will take between two to four weeks.
'şahzadə' had changed to 'ÅŸahzadÉ™'... very stange... maybe something with android, I write my stories with my smartphone.
It is 'şahzadə' again.
... the '™' was kind of funny :-)
7328914 eh he is somewhat of sue but might as well go with it honestly compared to some this is not too bad and with a bit of suspension of disbelief I can just say that due to events they fell for each other quicker then normal and ponies are just quicker to get in relationships
7369490 okay, if someone asks me, I take your comment as my official statement :-)
damn... never get on her bad side...
7372531 And never forget the mighty 'purr of death', her finishing move ;-)
:0 Things are about to get interesting.
STD!? Welp, he is doomed. Jokes aside, this was a nice bonding chapter.