Ooo ill definitely give this a shot

Yay an Octavia focused adventure fic :D

I have been looking for one ever since i saw her portrayed in part of an epic adventure scene.  I was darn near about to write one myself!

All I can think is Dr. Octopus.

Ohohohoho! Wasn't expecting this by a long shot! You amaze me yet again Sir Steampunk.

I'll give anything that focuses on Octavia a chance.

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I really wanna see more of Oct-Avia, heh. I just wonder what Vinyl Scratch will say about this...

Deus Ex, anyone?

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Oh my, this starts out gooooood!

Next chapter~

Well... this strangely has a lack of... panic and bewilderment. Shouldn't Octavia be really REALLY panicking right now? I mean, sure she lived with Vinyl for 6 years but to have giant mechanical arms attacked to you is something where most people or ponies would go: HOLY B***ING SHIT, WHAT THE BUCK IS THIS!?! SOMEPONY HELP ME, FOR THE LOVE OF CELESTIA!!!

She takes it like a boss but even the guards are somewhat faint towards it.

I can understand some form of professionalism should be in play for them (not panicking at the sight of these things and all) but... I'm not sure.

If this was a Spiderman movie, Dock Ock would have been experimented on by now and never let out again for the public to see.

Disregarding this all, I liked the chapter a lot. I was wondering if you would have Octavia be ponynapped for several days, with each day the ponynappers doing experiments on her but I find this to be a well enough actually; short and blunt.

Good show! Hope to see further chapter

>>772319772319

Well, i decided to play up what seemed like the fandom's given roles for everyone's favorite dj/cellist paring.

Octavia: deadpan extrodinaire, by now takes everything in stride

Vinyl: enough crazy theories to ruin a small country, and enough of a bank account and more than enough enthusiasm to pull off a good deal of them.

so yeah, this one is my 'screw this, I do what i want' fic because this will go from random to serious to anywhere in between depending on how i feel like taking it.

the only thing set in stone is that at some point 'tavi is going to be designated badass as she climbs the ouside of a tall building with a money bag clenched in a claw. not sure how i'm gonna do that but...

>>772454772454

Ah Ok, that's good.

Good luck with this further.

Woah amazing cover art. Haha, and the story...

Dat thumbs up button, Dat fav button.

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Lunar Justice

Doctor Octavius, I should have seen this one coming sooner or later. Octavia... I just hope, it doesn't end for her as it did with Octavius himself... *sighs deeply* The poor man... But, for what it is, it really got my interestes. You have done a very, very good job dear.

-Rarity.

Ok, I'm interested.

All what we need now is that Vynil suddenly develop the power to launch laser beams from the eyes and her sun glasses are the only thing that stop her from killing everypony, Twilight develop telepatic powers due to a magic accident produced by a sudden magic surge of her horn, Big Mackintosh more fur and muscle than usual while gaining incredible superpony agility, strenge and increasing his coeficient of inteligence, Pinkie keeping being Mare-Do-Well....And Rainbow Dash becoming Spider-Mare

Vinyl is now jealous

>>773994773994 I can see Twilight being the phoenix or Ironmare. Dash has to be a Quicksilver just because of her speed. But I can't think of what Fluttershy Rarity and Applejack will be. Or Spike or the CMC. Anyways I'm tracking this better then an AN\TPQ-37 radar (which I use and dam near nothing gets past, I pick up bullets from M16s and AK-47s from firefights!) great story and update soon.

>>772214772214

Dear, Princess Celestia

I never asked for friendship

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>>782721782721

sounds like some serious equiptment, military brony I take it?

>>783781783781

Eyup going to Kuwait in a couple months for my first deployment.

>>784626784626

Best of luck to you then, while I personally don't have much interest in military service I have a respect for those who have signed on.

>>784631784631

Thanks you just keep righting these great story they help with the home sickness. Oh if you want to do one hell of a mind f¥ck have a certain tan and pink pegasus be the Wolverine.

>>782721782721 Actually Twilight is the equivalent ofJean Grey, even her own story sounds identical to each other, both of them were found by their mentors when they lost control of their powers, their mentors saved them from literally explide themselves and then enrolled into their schools to learn to control their powers, besides the schools names sounds wayy too much like each other: Charlse Xavier Institue for Gifted Youths and Princess Celestia's School for Gifted Unicorns

Also we would need that Applejack is actually G1 Applejack thus making her the legendary Captain Equestria now living under protection of Princess Celestia's S.H.I.E.L.D.-like agency and the Apple family(Thus making Granny Smith her Great Great Great Great Great Great Great Great Great Great Great Great Great Great Great ......................... grand daughter), Pinkie being either deadpool or a Great Great Great Great Great Great Great Great Great Great Great Great Great Great Great ......................... grand daughter of Loki, Flutteshy being HULK Rarity becoming Rouge(Of all the bad things that could happen... This is THE WORST. POSSIBLE. THING!)

NEED MOAR! SO GOOD!

Beau said hand instead of hoof earlier, when she asked Octavia to hold the cloth for her.

Still loving it.  Still wish the chapters were longer.

Awww... No Doc-Oct style beatdown.

I'll be waiting for Vynil to become CyClops, then we will have one badass fank-kicking crime fighting team!

Two things I want to say...

Take the time to do proofreading/spelling fixes etc. before you put it up. We won't mind the wait that much, and it shows that you care.

I like how you're pacing this! Some recovery, a little excitement, and some explanation of where she got her skills. I'm looking forward to seeing what this all builds up to.

I'm very interested as to where this will go. I've always like situations where a story has to deal with situations that are not regular, i.e., technology in a magical world, aliens, etc. I will be looking forward to see where this goes.

But two complaints: The first, and this is just my own personal preference, I'd like to get into Octavia's head a little more. Most of the dialog is just here stream of conscious narration and I was looking forward to more than that. But that's just my own references.

And two, the word you're looking for is Ma'am, not Mam.

While personally I think Blueblood is too much of a coward to fight anypony, it's good to see Octavia have a bit of a bite to her.

Jesus, I'm starting to say anypony instead of anyone now.

>>831482831482

I am going to get around to editing this sometime in the future, but in my defense it was past midnight when i posted this i think.

>>831723831723

Does this take place in the same universe as 'TVC'? Cause if it does, I can just imagine how Twi and Octy would be like!

>>831786831786

You know, i may just have to cross that over at some point.

>>831792831792

SWEETNESS!!!!!

(I'm Totally fucked up on Caramelicious)

Name doesn't lie, shit tastes like caramel!

>>831831831831

having a bob marley day then my friend?

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just remember what zecora said in stonershy.

>>831857831857

Was it 'Puff, puff, pass that shit'? Cause i would if I could, and its pretty nice too, had to have a lot because of my tolerance (according to my friends, it has something to do with my depression or something, but even when I started, after the stupid thing were you don't get high the first time, I was doin' dimebags of quality shit like it was nothing) but after that, its fuckin' awesome!

>>831908831908

well all I know is that when me and my bud's sit down to have a sesh everyone pitches, and everyone passes the peace pipe if you catch my drift.

When will next chapter be posted? If you have knowledge of it that is...

>>875869875869

I usually go with a 'when I finish it' attitude. at the moment, i got nothing done on it. I'll try writing later today, i was just taking a break from it after I snafu'd a little with the latest chapter of vampony.

If there are chapters getting produced atleast, I'm happy.

Now off to go and write a Rainbow Dash vampire fic.

Chance or very large success,

nil.

>>877255877255

If you want you can run it past me, while i'm not much of a proofreader i'll tell you if anything seems off.

Thx man!

Wow... I expected good work but this is great! Lots of potential! Love it.

The last update was in June... It's now the second week in July...

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Cause I need

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>>918777918777

haven't had the muse to write much on this, i'll see though.

>>920060920060 No worries, I understand. I can't finish my story for the life of me either.

>>921001921001 Don't I know it.

You introduce traits about Octavia that help explain her reaction in a situation just as the situation occurs, or following afterwards.  "The metal tentacles on my back don't scare me because Vinyl has put my life in jeopardy on numerous occasions."  "I can take on that fool Blueblood because I know a bit of zebra kung fu."  These are plausible, and the actual writing is competent and comprehensible, but it comes out of nowhere.  We learn about your version of Octavia at a rate meant for moving the plot along.  

DOCTOR OCATVIA BLARHGH

Yeah update. Now you have two other stories to work on. I can't wait to see that party scene. And what type of trouble these two will get by those arms.

Edit: FIRST!!! MAOR.

Brilliant! Me read later.

Heh. Vinyl in socks. Also, keep up the awesome!

Whoopie! it's been updated! Now, to read.

edit: THAT'S IT?!?! I was kinda hoping for more.

It"s nice to see you giving attention to multiple projects at once, considering how difficult this is to do.

>>10943961094396

this one is kinda my 'fuckit i write what i want' story. It's not meant to be too serious, and it doesn't even get edited, it's just for when i have an idea and wanna write it out. Plus I'm ridiculously tired today.

>>10946611094661 But this story's awesome.

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>>10949041094904 What he/she said.

Good chapter

>>10949041094904

It's not that i don't care about it, it's just that the others require effort, this one is a lot more lighthearted and despite me dropping some hinting at adult stuff, it has a more innocent feel to it. the others... well in one twilight personally witnessed a city dying from a cloud of acidic vapor and nanobot swarms that do things that the mere thought of would turn your blood to jell-o, the other she's a vampire, it seems like the shit's hit the fan but the fan hasn't even been turned on yet... so yeah this one is my 'for gits and shiggles' fic.

>>10956511095651 but I love "all" your stories. Or at least the ones I've read.

>>10949041094904

^This. I really love this one.

Dude, I can't wait to see Tavi go all "I am Doctor Octopus, and if you screw with my girl, I screw you over...With mah arms!" (read in Arnold Schwarzenegger accent).

Also,

"Vinyl hoof pumped the air. "Yes! One got past the 'Tavi test! I'm picturing lots of lasers..." "

WIN!!!!!

>>10982321098232

you have no idea how tempting it is to read out some of these comments in the voices and accents i picture them in, then youtube it for your enjoyment.

>>831373831373

Thank you! Steamy, please be a dear and listen to us. I want to not see hardened guards constantly referring to random mares as 'mom'.

>>11686401168640

gotta freakin love the english language... yeeeesh....

makes a writer's job so much more annoying.

Well..

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lemme tell you, this story is just EMITTINGSwag . as in:

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Yeah, That much Swag.

>>12199841219984

i think you may have botched an image tag in there.

>>12385831238583 Correct. but that pic is still Swaggy as all hell.

>>12403231240323

I'll save y'all some time and post a link to the image here, the wallpaper is too big for the comments section.

SWAG

>>771655771655

Well, that WOULD be the point.

An interesting story, and I am reading with great interest.

This is addicting.

Hmmm... wait a second... doc oc..... oh I get it now!

I'm guessing the 'bread' instead of 'bed' in the author's note was a joke?

>>12911801291180You mean Doctor Octi-gonapus

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I'MA FIRIN MY LASER! BLAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA..............

>>14033181403318Took you long enough!

Keep up the good work man, this is a good story, even if it is for shits and giggles

I can't wait for the next update, I will always be watching from the shadows

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Also first!

And new chapter!

Nice to see an update on this story.

Can't wait for more!

What, really? The judge can just pardon her like that? How does he have that authority? How can he get away with that? How can he do it so quickly? It hasn't even been a day. This is ridiculous.

>>17794921779492

a court system run by the nobles who also run the military.

...How did you make that box? The author's notes one.

>>17796301779630

it's a new feature.

>>17796321779632

Cooool. I'm slowly liking this update more and more. Could still fix the grey, though.

Final-fuckin'-lee!

nice update, althought I am still wondering if any-more ponies will become more Marvel characters emulators:

Vynil would be Cy-clops (althought Derpy becoming Cyclops would be awesome as well, she would be shooting energy beams from her eyes at diferent directions and enemies at the same time!)

Zecora would be Storm

Spitfire would be Rouge (She has never been seen without her full-bodysuit in canon ever)

Twilight would be Marvel Mare (Jean Grey equivalent)

Applebloom wouldbe Black Cat

Sweetie Belle would be Shadowcat

Scootaloo as jubilee (either that or The Silver Surfrer)

Big Mac would be Wolverine

Applejack would be Captain Equestria

Fluttershy could be SHE-HULK

Rarity would be Black Widow, with Spike as Hawkeye

Rainbow Dash being secretly being related to Thor and being the goddess of the Rainbow while Pinkie being related to Loki(althought using her powers for good and parties...) and fighting evil and boredoom under the name of PINKIEPOOL

Shining Armor becoming IRON-MANE, and Cadance as WAR-MACHINE

Princess Celestia would be training them under the guise of Profesor C along with Luna who would be Nightmagneto

Will Lyra be Spider-Mane, and also will Bon-Bon be a Spider-Mare as well?

will it be there an Agent Coltson and Colonel Nick Fury from S.H.I.E.L.D.?

will it be a Fantastic Four (The Doctor as Mr.Fantastic, Derpy as The Invisible Mare, Snowflake as The Thing, and Dinky as The Pony Torch)?

Will Octavia accidentally become Spider-Mane Arch-Villian or an ally?

Why sos short man? This chapter is so short

Dang. Stupid legal files.

Yes!

If you're taking suggestions...

One way you could up the word count for the latest chapter would be to have Vinyl read out the formal wording of the pardon; this would both add words to the chapter, and the likely broad, non-specific, "Get out of jail free" nature of the way it was worded would underline the corruption in the system, that failed to either protect Octavia or punish the wrongdoer, which, (judging from the story description) is part of the reason she'll choose to take justice into the hands she lacked just days ago.

Short, but sweet and sad.  I like it.  I eagerly anticipate Octavia's encounter with the next pony that gets augmented.  

>>17804791780479 WOAH! HOLD IT! The Doctor would not be affected by the radiation. He woulda died and regenerated. So there. Also. Pony Link is best pony.

>>18533251853325 Hmmm, you're probably right, then again Mr. Fantastic could be that doctor of Ponyville hospital though, that or Caramel

>>18534401853440 Agreed.

>>18534511853451 indeed. BTW: Merry Cristmass

This is pretty amazing dude lol all of your stories are but this is a twist ive literally never seen ummmmm more please???

You're not dead!

Now we just need to kill blueblood till he's dead!

>>23706902370690

meh, whatever, up to you man, this one is the only one i don't put through an editor because it's a just for fun one.

>>23706902370690

Also thanks for pointing that out so i could fix it.