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RuinQueenofOblivion


Dashite forever!

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Okay, now that's a start. Not sure if I'll get invested in this story, given you and your lengthy update times but I'll keep an eye out.

9724295 I'll see what I can do about updating this more regularly.

I like the start of this one. Looking forward to more.

9727055 Glad you liked it, I am working on the next chapter.

Okay, firstly, the course scene. Reminded of a twisted version of Judy Hopp's course run in Zootopia's police academy. Gives me a good idea of just how much racism there actually is in the so-called perfect 'Steel Rangers' Then there was this.

"You have managed to overcome them and prove your worth. You are the future of the Steel Rangers each and every one of you. However, things are not that simple in Cascadia. There will always be ponies that try and take things from us, Raider ponies that have no soul or understanding of anything beyond the barrel of a gun. Settlers that believe that all they need is to get by, survival is more than just getting by in the Wasteland after all. And there is still Applejack's Rangers. Once more last night they brazenly attacked our forces here in Port Crescent. But they are not your mission this time, perhaps someday we will be able to take the fight to those heretics and prove that the way of Steel is superior."

"Hear, hear!" One of the other trainees said.

"Well said Elder!"

"Thank you, Trainees," Mandrake said as he waved his hoof for a moment. "The fact of the matter is that we must remain vigilant at all times. That is why you have all been chosen for this operation. We have uncovered intel pointing towards there being another port on the north side of Braybridge island. We had believed it to be cleared out, but it seems that it is now in use once more. We suspect that it belongs to one of the accursed Raider gangs that call Seaddle their home. Perhaps even they struck a deal with Applejack's Rangers and allowed them safe passage onto the Island. We are to retake the port for the Steel Rangers and ensure that it is never used against us again. High Paladin Knives will lead your mission along with more members of the contingent. I do not expect all of you to come back alive."

Legitimately got chills from this guy. As interesting as it is to see the perspective of what are technically some of the biggest bastards in the Wasteland outside the Enclave... I still don't have to like it and yet I do at the same time. You know?

"You know how the old families are," Rose sighed as she shook her head a little. "With everything that's been going on the Rangers have had to be less selective about who they let in. A lot of the old families aren't happy about that, especially with the inclusion of Unicorns into the Knights."

"There are going to be more?" I asked.

"They're talking about it at least, but right now you're the only one," Rose shrugged. "It's more a desperation play really. With Applejack's Rangers scooping up our members every so often, Mandrake has to make some hard decisions."

Yep, definitely Zootopia. Replace the token bunny with the token Unicorn and you're golden.

"No, they weren't, he was distracting you while his buddy was preparing to kill you," Kale said and nodded to a weapon by the second stallion's side where a knife was laying. "You didn't properly check your targets, Trainee. You're lucky to be alive."

"But he..." I started to say.

...Oh, I am going to feel sorry for her when she finds out the truth. Great chapter Ruin.

9735257 Admittedly, any parallels to Zootopia are coincidental as I still have not seen that movie. But still, interesting parallel.

9735283
You poor soul. Really great film about racism and the like.

9735291 Oh I want to see it, but I haven't made the time.

Nice start to a story. Looking forward to more.

9767402 I’m working on it.

Honestly I should have rebooted this fic already, not sure why it didn’t occur to me before

And through the force, my chains shall... Sorry, wrong franchise. Still, Nova and Finn can relate. Also, was that ghostly bacon haired mare who I think I was...?

Fitting insert song by the way.

10003688 Heh, so true they definitely can.

And no that wasn't who you think it was, that's sort of a preview for something yet to come in the story. It'll make sense when we get to it.

I will be honest Rach, this chapter felt like filler. Like, it really did. I'm sorry, but it did. It just wasn't all that interesting.

I liked this chapter overall. While some may see it as filler, to me you are laying the foundation for more of the story to come. Now she is out in the Wastelands, she is starting to make allies and maybe friends. She has an encounter that suggest future hostilities that she could become enmeshed with. Yep the first two chapters showed who she was and how she got to this point, this says there are possibilities and possible consequences to be had.

Liked the update. Still on my read list. As for it being seen as filler; not all chapters have be action, some exist to fill in story or bridge the story. Keep up the good work! 😁

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