A brutal battle against a savage beast nearly cost Princess Luna her life. But little did she know that this would change her life, and all of Equestria, in ways that nopony could imagine.
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Rated Teen for limited violence early on.
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I'd like to thank my two editors: TheMajorTechie and Rijo Striker. Rijo is a new author like me, providing good recommendations to improve my work. A special thanks to TheMajorTechie, my great friend, who has provided a lot of insight to really improve this massive story.
Chapters (14)
Ayyyyyyyyyyyyy it's here!
At the least, Luna should offer the Apples a tax break, or a royal compensation for the damages done to the trees, and perhaps a group of Earth Pony mages to help restore that part of the orchard.
It is very rare that I find a fic that intrigues me like this. Good job!
7214083 Well, maybe something will happen....
7214116 All in a combined effort of Dreadnought and I, their editor.
Well, not much to go on yet, but it's worth a track and a thumbs-up.
7214338 Don't worry. From what I've pre-read, it's only gonna get better from here.
10 likes?! Wow... Apparently I'm a better editor than a writer... My most popular has I think 9 likes and 3 dislikes...
Wow, over a hundred views in less than 48 hours. Though I wrote this story as a creative outlet, I am pleased to see that readers are enjoying my work.
Dreadnought
Amazing... simply amazing. Keep up the good work!
I can see Mac doing just that, too. Nicely written.
Poor Luna. Meeting somepony who speaks more directly than she does.
Will there be more violence, besides that?
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I haven't made up my mind how much violence to include, but I am planning a companion story that has quite a bit of action, adventure, mystery, and violence. Hoping to publish it sometime this summer. In the meantime, I'm focusing on the chapters of this story, and the collaboration I'm working on with TheMajorTechie and Forestshadows.
Dreadnought
I crave this mineral
Well, we know that's not it, or he probably would have accepted one of the other many attempts to reward him.
All this talk of his humbleness must make Luna glad that it's already been agreed upon that she'll pay for the dinner. Last thing she needs are his nopes again when she's trying to pay the tab.
7252363 Indeed.
Huh… y'know, this isn't terrible.
~ Chapter: 13
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Thanks???
Dreadnought
7252787 Oh, sorry, I should have elaborated: I honestly expected… well, crap. It was set up like a cliché first story, but it honestly suprised me. Good writing and good story. Actually, really good writing. Professional, and well put together.
Sorry, I was being quite pretentious when I made that first comment.
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Thanks for the explanation. Without vocal inflections or body language, it can be hard to understand what people mean from just the text.
Dreadnought
Excellent as always
200 hundred views! I'm glad people are enjoying my work.
Dreadnought
Not go out to dinner with a beautiful alicorn princess obviously. If Applejack wants a quick 10,000 bits somepony should start a We Saved the World...Again Charity for the Mane 6.
As usual, another great chapter.
-editor's note
Aw, I was hoping Mac would become immortal by some princess love spell or Luna with the alicorn amulet. Still a great chapter though!
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Thanks for the feedback.
Dreadnought
I thought Luna was sending the bill to the Canterlot Castle so Celestia could pay for it or something.
And oh boy, can't wait for this gossip to fly.
Since I've yet to read the rest is Applejack now have wings?
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We can't expect royals to carry around cash (or bits) can we? In all my life I've never heard of QE II pulling out her checkbook!
Dreadnought
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You don't know how many times I reread this prior to publishing. No, Applejack is still an earth pony. Although I did read an outstanding story where Applejack was turned into a pegasus. It was called New Perspectives. I've been encouraging the author to complete it.
Dreadnought
Well, there was that Sisterhooves Social thing, but Orchard Blossom is probably more of a "fourth date" kind of story.
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Don't worry. Orchard Bloosom will not be forgotten.
Dreadnought
You won't be needing Apple Bloom for that.
I wonder how Twilight would take the news from Apple Bloom that she's not a pony anymore either.
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Very badly, I suppose.
-Techie, A.K.A. The editor for this story.
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I figured since you have unicorns, pegasi, and alicorns, they would refer to earth ponies simply as ponies. It also sounded a lot more natural to call earth ponies simply ponies.
Dreadnought
I've only just read the second chapter and the quality of writing is spectacular! I can't believe this doesn't have more views than it has. Keep up the good work my friend!
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Thanks for the comments. I always like to hear what readers really think.
BTW, if you're only on chapter 2, I can't wait to hear your thoughts on the following chapters.
Dreadnought
7233561 your profile pic makes me really wanna play dow
7304987 DOW III is coming out soon! Here's hoping its as good.
Okay, yeah, didn't see that coming at all. I guess it doesn't matter which one is which, both of them had Luna on the mind in the moment.
Knowing Mac though, this is probably more of a nightmare dream caused by his family's rambling earlier since he'd never treat a mare like that. Let alone a princess. Or Mac thinks he's looking at dream Luna.
dawwwwwwww
What happens in Dreamland doesn't stay in Dreamland I suppose. Especially when you kiss the mayor of Dreamland.
According to Luna, in my heart I'm Luke Skywalker.
YES.
He could have felt worse I guess. He could have stepped on her hooves while dancing.
See, this is the problem with Luna. Having a magical key to everyone's thoughts is just CREEPY.
Still, she is best Stalker Princess.
Dreams are apparently worse than two sets parents that try to push their kids together because the parents know they like each other, no matter much the kids deny it. The dreamworld is doing Mac's and Luna's parents proud. Kinda.
Great job man, and congrats on Part 1. I'm mega digging this series so far :D