An Unlikely Friend

One friend of the pink-maned pony, Fluttershy, reflects on his life after he first met her.

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miniapplejack

miniapplejack #1 · Jun 20th, 2012 · · ·

I like it. The style works quite well for telling the story from the manticore's POV. Plus, it puts a nice bit of emotion behind the character.

RainbowsAreMagic

RainbowsAreMagic #2 · Jun 20th, 2012 · · ·

777429 Thanks! That's exactly what my goal was. That and writing the story from the manticore's perspective, which meant no dialogue.

RainbowsAreMagic

RainbowsAreMagic #3 · Jun 20th, 2012 · · ·

777973 Nope, and nope. The friend reflects on his own life, not Fluttershy's.

Immaneuel Kanter

Immaneuel Kanter #4 · Jul 6th, 2012 · · ·

It's an interesting idea.

I think the transition from the flashback to Fluttershy being lost and him giving her safe harbor was a little sudden. I kind of lost my place.

What I would have advised would be to make a narrative, describing this hulking thing just walking around, him finding Fluttershy, setting up the contrast between them, her acting casually around him, him taking her back to the cave, then the flashback, then the morning comes.

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