One friend of the pink-maned pony, Fluttershy, reflects on his life after he first met her.
I like it. The style works quite well for telling the story from the manticore's POV. Plus, it puts a nice bit of emotion behind the character.
>>777429777429 Thanks! That's exactly what my goal was. That and writing the story from the manticore's perspective, which meant no dialogue.
wait... Fluttershy is a guy in this story? Either that or your description needs a tad of a fix.
>>777973777973 Nope, and nope. The friend reflects on his own life, not Fluttershy's.
It's an interesting idea.
I think the transition from the flashback to Fluttershy being lost and him giving her safe harbor was a little sudden. I kind of lost my place.
What I would have advised would be to make a narrative, describing this hulking thing just walking around, him finding Fluttershy, setting up the contrast between them, her acting casually around him, him taking her back to the cave, then the flashback, then the morning comes.
i like it, the style is like massage to the eyes for me, I felt very relaxed and wanted more
just one question, who again is the friend?? the one who has wings, and fluttershy took care
>>18836541883654 The friend is the manticore from the season 1 opener.