Sometimes you just can't take it anymore, like when your parents are dead and the only other person you have falls deathly ill, and you have nobody that cares about you. Daniel was contemplating the thought of ending his own life, but, thanks to the kindness of a certain pegasus, he learns that you can be happy, no matter what the circumstances may be.
NOTICE: Equestria and Fluttershy are not included until chapter 2. Also, the rating is teen because of some sad events. (There is no sex or gore)
Credit for the coverart goes to steffy-beff on deviant art.
Note: This is my first ever fanfic, so forgive me if it isn't very good, I write only what I think others would enjoy. And I'm sorry about the spacing, and if some of it is incorrect. I am wondering if I should continue to write fics like this, or different types. Tell me what you think!
This is nothing compared to my other fic (The Forever Burning Embers of Love) so I recommend reading that if you want to see my true writing skills!)
I find this story to be rather bittersweet. I can tell that he's going to find something more than this sad life, but, at the same time, I want to see exactly why, which is what any good fanfiction should keep you doing. For your first, this really is very well written. A few errors here and there, obviously, which I'd be more than happy to fix for you if you'd like me to.
As for writing more:the policy I've always held is to write a fanfiction when it inspires you, not to please others. It feels so much more satisfying that way, and your work almost always ends up better.
"Oh dear, I don't know where your from, but your definitely not from anywhere here in Equestria."=>"Oh dear, I don't know where you're from, but you're definitely not from anywhere here in Equestria."
Thanks guys, and do you think that I should write a sequel to this or just start a new story?
Sequel please. This is a little short to just end the story I think. There is a lot more healing that could be done.
>>rome33 I would like to write a sequel but I don't have any idea what it would be about. I may have a few ideas, but I would want the sequel to be enjoyable and not feel like it was rushed. Thanks for the comments.
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I personally think you should start from scratch. The concept here is good, but the way you wrote it I do not think you could go anywhere with this without it feeling like you are doing it just for the sake of writing a sequel. Also, there are several major problems with this story that I think if you could do better with in your next story it would come out much better. If you want, I can give you an in depth review of what I thought. Please tell me if you want a critique of this story because I do not want to waste time writing one if you are not going to do anything with it.
I'm typically not not one for comment, but i'm with "behindcds" a sequel sounds like it would be a little forced. (but then again, i can't really judge, seeing as this is the only piece of writing i have seen from you) A great concept for a fanfic and i would like to see said concept expand into a greater story.
Just do what you feel like man.
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I just read your fic. While it's a bit like most HiE fics (The human has everyone around him die and has basically hit rock bottom), your writing style isn't half bad. I'm not sure I would have written the story in 1st Person, as it can be limiting. BUT...I enjoyed it overall. And sadly stories like your main character's aren't uncommon to Real Life. I must say I got interested once he awoke in Equestria and met Fluttershy, but then she is my favorite of the Main Six.
I would enjoy it if you did a squeal. Though I hardly see how it would seemed forced, like behindcds and Daxisle said. While your story was a bit bittersweet, it has potential!
And you left us hanging! Is Dan going to have fun hanging birdhouses with Fluttershy or not? Plus how's he going to adjust to life in Equestria? Will he ever discover how he got there? 
As you can see there is plenty of potential for a sequel. But like 771794 said, "Just do what you feel like man." If you want to leave this completed and work on another story, that would be fine as well. There are plenty of pony stories just waiting to be written! You have potential as writer, so no matter what, don't give up! That's my advice to you! 
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Thanks, even though I too believe this is good, I think my other fic outshines it by a lot!
And that was purely coincidence, at the time of writing this fic, I had never played Amnesia, so I wasn't making a reference or anything!
Anyway, thanks for taking the time to see my early work and how much it's improved,
-Ps3luver