This was a lot of fun to write. Let me know what you guys think, and which genre you want me to attempt to write next time I decide to take a break from Ponies Make War.

You are a writing god.

Sir can you write me some babies

I am Commander Sheperd and this is the greatest fucking thing ever written. I want to bear your children. I will find a way.

My god that was awesome. Send it to Equestria Daily.

Ok, time to read some ponnnnNNNNUOH MY GOD THAT IS LONG.

welp, better get started

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Hopefully you find it worth your time!

I love you!!! /)^3^(\

The Apple Vs. Carrot feud was amazingly epic!

All of my YES!! The end is what made it for me.

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Immense lulzity.

Holy crap that was SO AWESOME

This made my week.

That was, without a doubt, the funniest, most excellently written story I have read in a very long time. Words cannot express my love for this fic.

LOVED the Kanye West reference! I laughed at every turn of this story! Very nicely done!

Oh, um yay

Jk.THAT WAS ONE OF THE BEST COMEDIES I HAVE READ IN MY LIFE! AND I HAVE READ MAMNY HILARIOUS THINGS.

I want to say that this is one of the best things ever, but I don't want to limit myself to time and therefore space and universe.

So I'm forced to say this is one of the best things.

So painfully absurd... my smile muscles hurt. Aww man, that description of the slow-motion coffee cup fall. That was the highlight of the story. Still laughing. All of it was brilliant. I beseech you, whatever you may be, god or demon, I will pay in premium untainted human soul for something of this quality and comedic mastery again.

AestheticB, fantastic job, and here's to hoping lightning strikes twice  in the future.

Detective Pinkie is best Pinkie.

This was amazing, and I want a sequel.

The end made my night. Very well-written comedic story. :)

That may be the best fic I've ever read. Top five at the least.

Congratulations. You win fanfiction.

That is a five-star fanfic, right there.

Awesome.

“Ahm real happy for you, Carrot Top, and Ah’ma let you finish, but apples are the best food of all time. Y’all hear? Of all time.”

And that's when i lost it...

I f-in love ya

It started out fun enough, but when you came to the "who's on third?" thing with the Apple sisters I lost it. Not only was this fun in so many ways, it was also a surprisingly coherent story given the chaos that ensues through it.

HOLY FUCKING SHIT

5/5

OH MY CELESTIA THAT WAS AMAZING. Extremely well-written and effing hilarious. I haven't laughed so hard at a fanfic in my entire life! This made my morning. I'll be watching out for more of your work in the future. Fantastic job!

Wow...

This... was awesome

Make it an episode!!!

This story made my laugh like a bucking lunatic .

Where to begin? Okay, first of all, it is well written (which is always a plus )

The characterization of each and every pony is over the top, yet somehow still spot on. Pinkie Pie takes the cake, however, with her noir vibe and I imagine her detective voice is similar to that of Max Payne or Batman from The Dark Knight.

The jokes, oh my god, the jokes. Kanye West would be proud, I guess . And  Shakespearean-level of feuding families? In my MLP: FIM fanfic?  AWESOME!!!!! . And yes, the slow motion sequence at the end is pure comedy gold

All in all, a very good fanfic, one that I'll be reading over and over again in the future whenever I need a good laugh.

Oh, btw, English is not my first language, so I just hope you could understand what I'm trying to say

This fic...

It was amaz...

er...

well...

I mean, it was...

I’ve got nothin’.

Oh man, this was golden. Excellently written (I spotted a few misplaced italics, but nothing major), great plot, the characters were over-the-top while still holding to in-universe personalities, and the *humor*. I can't even pick out a favorite part. My god, it's full of win!

5/5 and free gold stars for life.

Im just in love with that moment where even discord would think "that's too much chaos"

Very good story

Dear Princess Celestia,

Today I learned that coffee is amazing. That, and all of my friends are lunatics. I recommend they all be sent into a mental institution, and that I be placed on a heavy prescription of medications to prevent me from burning down everything in sight.

Your Faithful Student,

Twilight Sparkle

That was really great. I was expecting Celestia to be the one to catch the coffee at the end, though.

i loved this!! You need to wright about what fluttershy did! Even tho it would take away some of the humor on that part, i just think it would be epic!

Celestia has been dethroned.  With this story, you now rule all of Equestria.

I humbly bow myself down to the superior writer.

That was the most constructive waste of time every. Congrats on a great story.

And then Twilight was sent to the moon

normally i hate it when writers take a break like this, but i must say. this is very, very good

now i find myself wishing that the other writers i follow would write a comedy everynow and then.

thank you.

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No, I don't know's on third, who's on first!

This is great. I mean, MY GODS, the pacing of this story is excellent, both in the way that individual scenes are set and how it all fits together into one climactic trainwreck. The evolution from various subtle amusements to outright hilarity is most effective.

By the way, that scene of Applejack going "To me! To me!"... Is that a reference to something? I am vaguely reminded of a similar scene in A Song of Ice and Fire, but I'm not sure whether I'm misremembering.

I liked this a lot.  Applejack's parts were especially good.  Dramatic battle scenes with fruit and pastries make me giggle.

Wooooo

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At least it was not Magic Kindergarten .

>>4209342093

Your smile muscles hurt? That's good to hear, I wrote this fic mainly to cause others physical pain. I feel I should mention that there is no such thing as an untainted human soul, and that I suppose I can make lightning strike again wherever I tell it to. Right now, I'm thinking Canterlot.

That said, don't expect something along the lines of Applejack's Axiom or Pinkamena's Corollary for another month and a half at least. This fic was the result of me writing down every funny idea I had for the mane six in a notepad over the course of about three weeks before I ever started writing. Then I took the bits that I felt would fit best together and pounded this out in about a week.

>>4236142361

First thanks for the extremely flattering praise. Second, I feel I should say that your comment is perfectly understandable. Everything about it says that you have a strong grasp of the English language.

>>4294942949

I loved writing this story; It let me do things I could never get away with in Ponies Make War, where comedic relief has to be sparse, I can't exaggerate characters so much, and every event must follow logically from the next.

>>4355543555

When I wrote this I very much intended to start off, well, [Normal] or [Slice of Life] in a way that mimicked the actual show. I figured slowly jacking up the comedy would let me do some ridiculous things without breaking the suspense of disbelief. Thus, the fic slowly descends into audacious preposterousness, much like this sentence.

While I wasn't aiming for a direct reference with the "To me!" like I did with batman and Kanye, Song of Ice and Fire is still bang on. I was definitely thinking of the secene in Dance where Asha Greyjoy is ambushed in the forest by some of (Either Stannis's or Bolton's men, I can't remember.)

I think I will forever worship you as the god of fanfics.

-Minty

Uh, yeah- you need replace Meriweather Williams.

I didn't catch the Kanye reference. Can someone point it out to me?

This is just wonderful! What a fun hour-long special episode this would make!! If there's a way to submit story ideas/scripts, find it and do it!

Nice fic, one of the best I've ever read, and was that a powerthirst reference that RD made about the birds? Very nice.

My God! It's full of stars!

^-^ /][\^-^

Brohoof

SO LONG!!

Very funny, a great read xD

Bow down before the King of Comedy.

Bravo. Bravo.

Dash really got it handed to her.  

Hee hee! Oh you silly willy filly!

Oh wow. 5440 total views? damn, thats 5440 people who had their day made.

Wow.

That is all.

This. I just. Wow.

I'm really loving the fic I've encountered in this fandom, but this just takes it to a whole 'nother level. The characters are SO spot-on, but Up To Eleven in the best ways. And we need a food-fight like this in an episode!

Looking forward to whatever you write next.

Thank you for that, Laughed my flank off the whole time

Brilliant! this is a story that makes my day.

I have never... NEVER!!! laughed as hard and so many times at a story in my life!!! Oh Celestia.... Pure genius!

You are a literary GOD!

Poor coffee... at least it wasn't hurt.

Thank you is not a strong enough sentiment.. You need to be immortalized!

Forever!

Giant Angry birds, FTW!

Wow, this story was absolutely amazing. I can now see why it's ratings are as high as they are.

You shoudl submit this to Faust. Maybe she'd authorize this being made into an episode.

"First base."

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Oh really, ADwD? My mind actually went to Tyrion at the Battle of Blackwater. Still, I choose to take this to mean that I'm highly perceptive.

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FUCK YEAH

This needs to be animated NOW or you will make Applebloom cry

Well, it took me three days on on-and-off reading, but that was pretty good. Very funny.

Take my five stars and LOVE THEM

Gosh that was long But amazing. It was one of the only fanfics that I found extremely long, but read awesome job

It is with great pleasure that I present you with this Internet Commendation Medal for interneting above and beyond the call of duty.  Congratulations.

Mein Gott, some one turn this into an eposide. Or better yet a film.

The Kaiser commands.

This is the funniest fanfiction I've ever read, and possibly the funniest anything.

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And believe it or not, it gave me the patience to have a half-hour conversation with a friend from church about setting up the Powerpoint presentation for tomorrow, a process that would have taken less time than the conversation about how to do it.

This is one of the single greatest things I've ever read :D

This is pure genius. I salute you, sir.

You see this post? Good! cause this is a post about THE GREATEST comedy fic ever written! whats that? "Was it really that great," you ask? well now that you mention FUCK YES THAT WAS THE GREATEST COMEDY FIC EVER WRITTEN!!! WTF IS WRONG WITH YOU? THIS BITCH HAS GOT FLUTTERSHY AND HER BADASSERY, TWILIGHT AND HER HILARIOUS PASSIVE-AGRESSIVENESS, PINKIE BEING MOTHA' FUCKIN' PINKIE, RD BEING TRAUMATIZED, AJ AND CARROT TOP GOING CRAZY AS SHIT, and is that all? NO! THERES ALL KINDS OF SHIZNIT GOIN ON IN THIS BITCH ALL TO ACCUMULATE TO CELESTIA WONDERIN' WHAT THE FUCK HAPPENED AND SPARKLE NOT GIVING ONE SHIT! CAUSE OF ALL THE THINGS, THIS IS THE. BEST. POSSIBLE. THING!

any way this was great. amazing work sir.

[this story is] THE! BEST! POSSIBLE! THING!

“Ahm real happy for you, Carrot Top, and Ah’ma let you finish, but apples are the best food of all time. Y’all hear? Of all time.”

BEST. LINE. EVER.

I got nothing.

This...this was pretty awesome. And hilarious.

It did get a bit side tracked, and Twilight didn't exactly lose her mind, but I like it.

Now I'm going to get some sleep before I pull a Twilight who didn't sleep (Which would make an interesting episode, though they already did  on similar with Applejack)

ALL OF MY STARS. ALL OF THEM. JUST TAKE THEM.

Usually longer fics tend to sort of lose some of the "zazz" or direction or humour or what have you, but each paragraph was funnier than the last in this one. I hope to see more work like this in the future. Cheers.

This story is best and you should feel best.

...WOW.

Sleep is for the weak, I intend to start and finnish this story now 23:40 a saturday night.

That was absolutely hilarious

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Dickective Pinkeh, on da case.

This definably tops my list of funniest fan fics I have read. The only other story I thought came even close to how funny this story is was Muffins which was a parody of the "Infamous" Cupcakes.

Still cant decide which is funnier Detective Pinkie P.I. or caffeine deprived twilight

This was bucking awesome.

I died laffing. Im dead now. :rainbowlaugh

god, this is so, SO funny. Solid humor right there. i... i think its the best comedy fic i've read!

A lot of fun to write? It was a lot of fun to read!!!!!!!!!

My stars... Have six of them!

(Let's see if this works...)

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Well, if it didn't: That was SUPERB. Bravo. Well done.

Sadistically funny. Laughing out loud here.

That Kanye West Line.. My god...

This is 5 stars.

You hadda figure twilight would eventually acclimate to the uncontrolled chaos her life has become....

To name this the funniest My Little Pony Friendship is Magic Fanfic I have ever read, that I can do. To call this funniest fanfic I have ever read, well this fanfic has a quite a bit of competition then but I would still find it easy to declare this as one of the top five funniest fanfics I have ever read. To top it off, it's also superbly written.

From my opening paragraph you now know that I consider this fanfic to be funny but why do I consider it funny? Well, when you have every single scene with something to find funny about, and with humour skipping to and fro from witty detail, to insanity situations, to parodies, and many more, there ends up being at least something, somewhere for someone to find funny regardless of the reader. I happen to love comedy and as such was able to laugh out loud to nearly all the moments of humour. The best thing about the humour though is how well it goes alongside the story. The humour never derails the plot, it allows the story to be told while making one laugh, and in allowing the story to be told it allows the characterisation to be accurate and the details and description to flourish. The story is original and while a little simple, has been written with plenty of surprises. Characters feel like themselves, and in general, the story feels like it could have been part of the show (or at the very least it is easy to imagine some of the scenes occurring in an episode, such as the Apple and Carrot war where they use food for weaponry). Vocabulary is pretty good, and while detail and description could have been stronger it did occur often enough so I could picture every moment with little to no difficulty.

While the first time of reading this I found myself laughing so hard and so much that I could only spot a single error up for criticism, now that I have re-read and restrained my laughter (except towards the end, when the slow motion starts I am immediately overcome by joy) I have been able to form an idea of what I can suggest to improve on. In this fanfic there are quite a few occurrences of a missing word in the midst of a sentence, or a sentence outside of speech that has been phrased incorrect grammatically. These are minor though as often or not my brain would work out what the missing word was, however there is one error that has quite an effect. It’s the start of a new paragraph in one of the Pinkie Pie scenes which goes as follows '“I felt that', and then abruptly stops and moves onto the next paragraph. This is the one mistake I was able to clearly notice upon my first time of reading, and one I suggest you either improve or avoid making in future. Other than these though it is hard to find fault with the writing, as while greater vocabulary and more description of the scenery would have been appreciated, what I got was satisfactory, or made up for by other areas. Personally I would have liked to have seen Rarity more involved with the plot (though she and all the characters fitted in wonderfully in each scene they appeared in), have an additional Pinkie Pie PI scene, and see a little more of Rainbow Dash trying to act like Fluttershy (I will smile larger than my face if this happens in the cartoon at any point) but these are all personal wants, and might even damage the fanfic if applied incorrectly.

I truly love this fanfic, my lungs hate it for all the damage that has been dealt to if from my unrelenting roars of laughter, but I loved reading this fanfic. It is proof that great humour can be implemented into a story without weakening the writing, and that the genre of comedy can be supported by simply magnificent writing. Astonishing job, keep up the wonderful work!

wait. I. This. LOVE! Wat? SQUEE!

Just consider my mind blown away by this epic piece of well written, extremely funny ART!

I said to myself "man this is gonna be good." Just after reading that last line "Twilight Sparkle must focus on obtaining the one thing that can set everything right: the all-powerful, awe-inspiring magic of caffeine.".

I can safely say I'm glad I was right.

Now I have a really crazy idea for a fanfic: pinkie pie discovers red-bull... DEAR GOD.

I know so many people love the Kanye reference, but this part is what really got me

“Fluttershy,” Twilight said with a burning intensity. “If you give me that coffee I will-”

What she said next made the pegasus blush furiously.

“Um, I don’t... I mean... I like you, Twilight, but, you can just, um, have the coffee? We don’t need to... I don’t want...”

For a few seconds my mind was like ... then I died of laughter.  RIP me