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This story is a sequel to The Sour Sweet First Date


Gilda still harbors a grudge against Fluttershy for sucker punching her two months ago. When Fluttershy volunteers to help Applejack make a delivery to Crystal Prep, Gilda sees her chance to challenge her to a proper fistfight. Naturally, Fluttershy abhors violence… but Sour Sweet doesn’t.

(Contains violent action with some blood as well as strong language)

(My third featured story! - 4/24/16)

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So Flutters pulled a Sailor Moon.

In light of the upcoming episode, any chance for Trixie to cameo?

“… and that’s why Che Guevara was the greatest, most gorgeous man ever to live and why we should all follow his example of locking those who practice individualism up into forced-labor camps,” Starlight Glimmer beams as she concludes her essay recitation. She then pinches the opposite hems of her skirt and curtsies for the class. “Thank you! Any questions?”

Seems legit.

Now I can see Sunburst trying to make himself look as much like Che as possible.

What's this? A Sour Sweet story at almost 5 am. Isn't that just dandy.

Good to see Sour Sweet making progress, though some of those revelations could've been expressed in a better way than the narrator flat-out telling us. Still, this isn't really about Gilda... though that only makes the abuse angle feel more tacked on in its desperate attempt to add some depth and sympathy to her character.

Aside from that, a nice installment in this saga. (Also, apparently human Tree Hugger is well-connected and intelligent enough to attend Crystal Prep. Who knew?)

Yes, tell me he didn't belive she wouldn't go after Gilda after that?
Oh well, guess compared to the last two story suggesting this series was reaching it's end, this one seems to want to set up more for later.
Still, it dose seem like everything you can do, deveopent wise, with sour sweet, is coming to an end.
Also, in dioluge, just call her sour or sweet wen you can. We don't call rainbow Rainbow Dash all the time.
It's a structure narrative thing.

Yuuuuussss! Let's take this up the features! Sour Sweet's getting better, but that means the story is coming to an end? No, please not yet. The situation with her getting better and the story might be ending is SOUR SWEET!

You trust Sour Sweet not to do anything stupid.

'You' are an idiot, :derpytongue2:

And it's Soursweet FTW, Soursweet is AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME:trixieshiftleft:

And it's Soursweet FTW, Soursweet is AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME:trixieshiftleft:

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some of those revelations could've been expressed in a better way than the narrator flat-out telling us

I would have put it in through dialogue, however I felt the situation after the fight where Sour Sweet and Gilda were filled with shame over what happened and staring at each others' injuries would be so awkward that they wouldn't be in the mood to talk much other than an short apology.

Still, this isn't really about Gilda... though that only makes the abuse angle feel more tacked on in its desperate attempt to add some depth and sympathy to her character.

I think you're missing the overall point of misplacing anger which I attempted to make. They were both taking their frustrations out on each other for similar reasons. They weren't so different as they thought they were. It wasn't about a "desperate attempt" to add anything apart from the very idea of the story.

In light of the upcoming episode, any chance for Trixie to cameo?

I've been trying to come up with good plot reasons for Sour Sweet to hang around more Wondercolts, so we'll see.

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Yes, tell me he didn't belive she wouldn't go after Gilda after that?

He's been pretty naïve throughout the entire series.

Oh well, guess compared to the last two story suggesting this series was reaching it's end, this one seems to want to set up more for later.

I'm simply making these up as I go along.

Also, in dioluge, just call her sour or sweet wen you can. We don't call rainbow Rainbow Dash all the time.

She does indeed get called just "Sour" often. Besides, I prefer to write the full "Sour Sweet" a lot. It's a very meaningful name. We all have our yins and yangs, our sweetness and our sourness.

Violent but sweet nevertheless. Wonder what will happen next?

That's something that I'd hoped to see in the show after the Rainbow Power reveal but haven't - the Mane Six getting special powers specific to their Element. As an example, we see in this story, Fluttershy gaining the ability to make everyone feel kindly disposed to each other by releasing the Yellow Light of Kindness for a few moments. You get a favourite for being the first author that I've seen do that!

Is Sour Sweet healing a little or is it just that she's had more to focus her mind and help her keep it together of late?

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Is Sour Sweet healing a little or is it just that she's had more to focus her mind and help her keep it together of late?

There is no cure for schizophrenia, however with proper social support, medication, and therapy it's possible to get to a state where the symptoms are pretty much muted. You wouldn't even be able to tell that the person had ever been diagnosed with a mental condition of any kind in their lives.

Yes!!! My Sour Sweet fix! Still not enough need more Sour Sweet X second person!!! :raritystarry: :rainbowkiss: :applecry: :fluttercry: :derpytongue2: How could you say no to these faces! It must continue!!!

Huh, I binge-read this entire, like, 9-story long series that hasn't even hit a conclusion. Good for me.

Sorry, but I personally found the resolution to be a little anticlimactic. Good story otherwise.

A big smile begins to form on your face. “Sour, are you saying that you were displaying self-control?”
“I-is that what I was doing? Is this what it’s like to NOT insult people? Holy crap, it feels so weird!”

My usual reaction to a good Monday morning. :rainbowlaugh: I am not a morning person. Or a Monday person. Seriously, if it's Monday morning, and you're peppy, I want to hurt you x.x

Fluttershy’s body then began to illuminate and rise into the air. Her human ears retracted, popping up higher as pony ones. Wings sprouted from her back followed by a long pony tail generating out of her hair. Her magical aura was so bright, Sour Sweet and Gilda had to avert their eyes. It was as if the day had suddenly acquired a second sun. Fluttershy had never seen herself glow so brightly either.
Basking in this radiance, Sour Sweet and Gilda’s bodies tingled as some unseen force washed over them. They felt their frustrations and hate inexplicably begin to dissolve. They glanced over at each other. Their eyes lingered at the bruises and blood shed which they had inflected on one another. All of the negativity which they had had just moments before was then replaced with regret.

Great Wickering Stallions, Fluttershy just went KiNuclear (Kindness-Nuclear)
Also, that would be an amazing thing to draw, dang...
What's scary is that Fluttershy did not put kindness into their hearts. She forced them to realize that they had cast kindness aside. Can you imagine if Flutters went darkside? She could leech all the kindness from the world... Yikes.
This is yet another brilliant story! I cannot believe how you can keep doing this! ^-^ There's a reason you continue to stay on my Best Authors list ^-^

I bet when second person saw the selfie he just went mental.

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>inb4 a scene of Second Person rushing with first aid kits to flutters house

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That's something that I'd hoped to see in the show after the Rainbow Power reveal but haven't - the Mane Six getting special powers specific to their Element.

I'm not a fan of that development, but it's not a deal breaker for me.

I have a suggestion; you should write a story where Cinch finds a "suitable" replacement but all of her students object because they consider Sweet Apple Acres' apples to be superior.

So... Is there gonna be another one?

7158942 Yeah. As long as I can keep coming up with ideas, it's a continuing series.

Check your mental privilege

Heh, win.

RIP me, or whatever the real guys name is haha. Gosh, I really want to see/read about the sheer amount of panic going through him when he sees that picture. If my girlfriend sent me a picture like that I'd freak out hardcore XD .

Though to be honest, he's probably like... yep, I saw this one coming *facepalm*. I mean the signs were very clear, only someone who was really naive would have missed that.

Omg that last line was the best. :rainbowlaugh: Another great story! You are so great at writing these!

Poor second person. He will be missed.




Until the next story, that is!

A chapter of Sour Sweet when she doesn't go ballistic puts me on edge for some reason. Like the eye of a storm.

"A text? I wonder what she wants t- OH MY GOD! THE DUCK LIPS JUST MAKE IT WORSE!" Please don't let it end without Second's reaction to the text!

Hey, any notes on how soon the next one will be out? no pressure, simply curious (And i want to stay on top of it so that my Best Authors page stays updated :twilightsmile:)

7196648 Don't be surprised to receive a notification within the next 24 hours :raritywink:

XD so funny:rainbowlaugh: thats something id do....but i would have done more damage. (if i get mad i usually fight someone untill they r down for at least 18 min. if they keep getting up i keep hitting and kicking):derpytongue2:

Sour Sweet melts in your arms and returns the hug, snuggling her face into your shoulder.

“No public displays of affection in the halls.”

The two of you immediately part at the sharp tone to find yourselves under the disapproving gaze of Principle Cinch.

"Hey, Madame Cinch? I found this weird invisible mechanical device on my hand this morning. It appears to work by crank, and I just don't understa- Oh! That's what it is! I-I'm so sorry!"
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Good thing I wasn't there!... Or that this doesn't have an exact representation of me. If this was me, then Gilda would never seen Sour Sweet with Fluttershy. And Fluttershy would look kind huge since four hours ago. And then it would turn out to be me, but dressed as Fluttershy to throw her off. Why? Because if anyone dares constantly mock one of my friends, they have an involuntary "talk" with me... That means that I almost knock their jaws off and have them apologize. If they don't apologize... In Gilda's case, I try to break her so she reveals what her life problems are. If she's just a scumbag, then I hospitalize her, bring her to the hospital, take video of the mental ward, then show her the videos of what she'll turn my love into. If she mocks Sour Sweet again, I stop the flow of pain meds so she knows what to expect out of every next time that she mocks my Sour Sweetness... Pain. Administered by me.
My gal's got a condition that I'm trying my damnedest to help her through, and you be an anchor on her progress?... Then you face how defensive of my gal I can be.

Geez man how many sequels for this do you have?

7262329 There's 12 in the series so far with more on the way :rainbowwild:

7262371 That.......is a lot of sequels. Probably the most I've ever seen. :pinkiegasp:

Flutters should go on a trip to each continent of the world. World peace would be achieved in about a week (whether they liked it or not).

“Hey, wait!” Sour Sweet said as she fished her cellphone out of her pocket.

Fluttershy watched in confusion as the phone was held up. Sour Sweet cocked an eyebrow and made one of those obnoxious duck faces she had seen Rarity do way too many times. The look drastically clashed with the black eye and blood.

The picture was snapped.

“What are you doing, Sour?”

Sour Sweet smirked. “Sending a very special selfie to my boyfriend. I just suddenly felt the urge to give him a heart attack, you know? #GuesswhatIdid?”

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ELSEWHERE…

"A text? I wonder what she wants t- OH MY GOD! THE DUCK LIPS JUST MAKE IT WORSE!!!"

Immediately, the boy snatched every bit of first aid supplies which he could find and carry, and hightailed it over to Fluttershy’s house to help clean his girlfriend up.

THE END

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“… and that’s why Che Guevara was the greatest, most gorgeous man ever to live and why we should all follow his example of locking those who practice individualism up into forced-labor camps,” Starlight Glimmer beams as she concludes her essay recitation. She then pinches the opposite hems of her skirt and curtsies for the class.

Ok where did i put that tome that holds an army of murder sex daemons

7492056 I got it! Allow me: *ahem* Korath menou, dlex vahrnas zu'in, Sorathol voss trelok! Zehna rool, Zehna rool, Zehna rool! Gloranathos Na'ar!

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