My first fanfic so please be gentle but I would like some constructive criticism. I've been wanting to write a FoE fic for awhile now and I'm glad I finally did.

Approx 12,000 words on your first I have a good feeling about this

>>756053756053

Thanks! I already almost planned out how I'm going to write the next chapter and I have no idea how I'd make that short so it'll be a long one too

They say brevity is the soul of wit. While I don't doubt you mean well and obviously have much to share, division into easily digestible chunks is often the more desired action. Just as a general suggestions. It makes writing faster, neater, crisper and cuts down on the potential of turgid passages and purple prose.

>>756086756086 Shorter scenes? I can do that

>>756133756133

You're gonna go far, kid, as the saying goes.

>>756070756070

Very well written story (chapter)! No obvious grammatical errors that stand out and great work overall

Have yourself a Watch and a Fav

Oooh! Another FOE sidefic! I will read this, and I am sure it will be good. After all, I myself am writing one.

tl;dr I'll see to this later

>>756876756876

Your writing New Roam? I heard about that one from somewhere but I can't recall where. I think someone told me about it on deviantart.

I will wiat to see if this holds up to the literary greatness that is Fallout: Equestria

>>758392758392

Yes, I am. Hopefully it will be nearly as good as the original FOE, as I intend to make it pretty long. Good luck on your fic, as well.

Now, back to writing.

Looks promising. I approve

Hahah~! YES! You used Error Code, one of the names I suggested!

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whens the next chapter this was good?

>>765381765381

Yep I really started liking that name and it just stuck

>>767596767596

Thanks! Next chapter is about half way done

People always said I was good at coming up with names. Pretty much, since day one, I've always looked at my character, knew what I wanted them to do, but never had a name right on hand. But then, I've always been one to say:

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good chapter if I dont say so myself

>>855275855275

Thank you very much

Yo Sigma.  I didn't see you on the doc, so I came here.  I finished my read through and I've got about 5 pages of notes for you.  Hit me up for them if you see me, or if you want I can post the link here.

Who name's their child Error Code? (Unless their mother was an abusive drunk...)

That aside, I like where this is going. thumbs up.