Expert story, portrayed in a thoughtful manner, I hereby bestow upon this story five twilight smiles!

I hope you're up for that schedule. Just don't diminish quality for quantity. And well done so far.

>>761063761063

I agree. You may have trouble with that when the story starts to develop more depending on how long you are going to make it. If you can keep the quality good with a chapter a day, do it. If not give a couple days if you're unsure on a chapter. Very good story so far. Can't wait for more.

Really good chapter, I'm really enjoying how this one is starting. What I do not enjoy, however, is the french. The differences between my head translation and the given translation seems to suggest usage of some internet translation thing. At best it's kinda dated.

>>764577764577

Yeah, you're right, I did use a translator because I'm American and my french class was dropped. Google translator has it's ups and downs.

Clever pun with the landlords name there, I like it. Can't wait for more!

Great story so far. And I did notice the titles. Can't wait for more. Here are some small grammatical errors I caught while reading.

The unicorn pressed her upper bod close the the ground, lifting her flank in the air.

Body*

The unicorn lifted the land pony into the air, causing her to flail her arms and legs about.

Shouldn't it be EARTH pony??

“Getting in head of myself.

Ahead*

>>794941794941

I blame the late night typing.

Will fix when possible.  thank you! :D

EDIT: aaaaand done. x3

Dude, Roofus is awesome!

>>795037795037

Fun fact: Roofus is actually modled after my land lord, who gave my family our apartment for two months free.

>>795047795047 Awesome! I wish my landlord was that awesome.

hey jonnny-bell this story of yours is really awesome and i cant wait to read the next chapter keep on weighting noman01

>>795097795097

Thank you so much for reading!

It's comments like this that make me want to KEEP writing up the story.

you're all awesome.

(except that one down-voter. You sir/ma'am, can burn in a fire. )

i give a good

i like it so far

This is a different angle on this couple so... I like so make more please! Unless you're busy then take your time.

dawwwwwwwww

>>764775764775

ah yes the ever so infamous G.T.

lol

great chapter, I can't wait from more as I am really enjoying this story, its well written and fun to read.

Well done as a rewarded I shall gift you a Ditzy

Enjoy

Wow! I never expected this much positive feedback! You're all awesome, I really can't think of a way to thank you all. (Well, ok, I'm working on the next chapter as we...I..type..) Thanks everyone for reading, and I promise there will be more.

Looks very promising. I'm looking forward to seeing where this goes, and Tavi and Vinyl end up friends with! (Insert both Octavia and Vinyl Scratch emoticons...)

I like this story!

I'm liking this story a lot. Just noticed a few things like the Carousel/Rarity's boutique naming.

You give an original take on this ship which I like.

And I ed at the references.

I'm guessing you have watched epic wub time?

>>812579812579

Haha, as a matter of fact I have. and I use my favorite line from that too.

"Why do I even have this?" *Throw object in a fire*

I really like this story! Not much else to say.

awesome chapter johnny-bell i love this story and im looking forward to the next chapter

>>820676820676

That's what I thought.

Well I'm creeped out.

Here I am reading and listening to a random selection of music, you know. But as I'm reading the part where Vinyl sings One Trick Pony to herself, guess what song starts to play. Yeah. That's right. One. Trick. Pony.

I know the chances are pretty likely, it's a well know song but it still freaked me out.

Love the story so far by the way!

Awesome! I'm enjoying this fic quite a bit!

One thing, I noticed a little mistake.  "She then go tin the tub once it was to her liking, and called for her roommate."

I avidly await the next update. Well, after I go to sleep that is.

I like how you connect things like this! And thus: Please please please don't stop this fic ever!

>>842671842671

well crap. even if I double check it errors still slip through.

Thanks for catching that! Fixed.

>>842702842702

haha, with my imagination, this story could go on for AGES.

But, knowing how I like long stories anyway....

We'll just see what happens, aye?

>>842727842727 Long slice of life story? Excuse me one moment.... OK now watch.

>>842747842747

You, have officially made my night awesome.

Thank you.

>>842766842766 You are welcome! I like using Nostalgia Critic whenever I can!

>>842747842747 lol. Good find. Accurate too.

I'm keen to see this keep going. You are developing their relationship at a great pace and keeping it in with the tv series in a great way.

I love it so far!

one mistake though “Celestia wants me to play at the Grand Galloping Galla!”

>>843149843149

now it might be the fact that it's a little after midnight, and I can't see at the moment...

but where's the mistake in there?

>>843157843157

there is only supposed to be one l in gala

>>843594843594

Oh yes. Of course. Thank you and fixed.

Hey Johnny_Bell its noman01 for some reason i have made it a habit to comment on ever chapter well its probably because this story is

sooooo good well can't wait for the next chapter this one was great

Really good slice of life story along with nicely timed romance! Please continue!

i agree. it all pans out in good time instead of all right away.

“But I love that, and I love you.”  D'aaaaawwwwww!!! can't wait for the next chapter!

good chapter

Awesome

Longer chapters would be great too.

i imagined the whole dance and song routine in my mind while reading this. it was so heart warming and beautiful.

Vinyl trying to be fancy... I'm already laughing

Love the story Keep at it

Great chapter! I really enjoyed the dance scene.

You read the Vinyl Scratch Tapes didn't you?

>>10817581081758

Read and listened.

>>10829141082914 Me too I recognized the reference right off

Very nice story.:):

Keep it up!

all i could see was vinyl free falling flailing like a mad mare. lol

keep up the series,awesome so far!

And that vinyl scratch tapes reference is nice too.

5/5

Yay! Everyone's happy!

I cannot wait to see how Octavia reacts at the Gala when she sees Vinyl. I see some comforting happening after the stampede...

All in all, good chapter!

Keep at it!

Keep up the good work man love the story so far keep up the good work

More please.

cant wait to see how it plays out with vinyl and spitz.

MUST HAVE MOAR

oh great it probably would have been a good idea for vinyl to tell spits that she has a marefriend

W00t! Fav Octavia/Vinyl story updated!! yyaay! .....now write moar!

Dun, dun, dun! Spitfire has the hots for Vinyl! This could complicate things.

The Gala is gonna be big damn fiasco because I see Spitfire messing with Vinyl and Octavia sees it and goes crazy... Its just a feeling

Keep at it, you're doing great!

Wow, I post something then fall asleep for the night. Wake up to TWENTY TWO new notifications. I didn't realize the story was that loved.

I SHALL MAKE MORE AND UPDATE THE STORY MORE OFTEN. I PROMISE!

Please no drama...

>>13226371322637

mmmmmmm.......

no promises.

First things first.ahem..MIC!!!...okay im done and im really enjoying the story i shall continue

Gotta say was not expecting the whole vinyl/spitfire thing. Oh well a famous DJ once said that suprises happen.

Pore pore pore Octavia .

damn it pinkie u made octavia sad

>>13687521368752it is spelled "poor"

now that my grammar naziism is out of the way great chapter I love how you depicted the gala events froma another pony's perspective

Oh man... This story just keeps getting better and better.

God, poor Octy....

>>13687911368791

I think it's kind if like how we shout "MOAR!" when we know it's not spelt like that.

Speaking of which… MOAR!!!

Hmmm...Roofus, with a ponytail, giving free rent and help to 2 unknowns...I'm getting a Bill and Ted vibe all of a sudden.

>>14490251449025

Shhhhhhhhhhh.... no one's caught on to that yet.

you clever basterd i walked right off that cliff

You and me both, Shadownidhogg...Beautifully written, few spelling issues, but not bad enough to even keep track.

BTW, this chapter fits with the other ship fics rated teen. Doesn't need to be separated out.

>>14540191454019

Oh, i'm talking about the next "possible" chapter. Maybe a chapter 16.5, it tells what happens that night..... I'm thinking maybe, juuuust maybe i'll write that up, post it as a separate "story" when it's just actually a one-shot chapter. maybe. dunno yet.

Wow so many feels so far best fic like this Ive read in a long time so moar. Is required asap

MAKE CHAPTER 16.5!!!! That is if you dont mind I mean...

>>14582651458265

Did, i'm awaiting approval. :3

>>14582771458277

Oh well release it please

>>14583081458308

Again, awaiting approval from moderation. You'll know when it's up.

>>14583311458331

Oh from moderation... I feel like an idiot now.

I want to read Chapter 16.5.....

>>789657789657 had you not pointed it out it would have just gone over my head

“Is mayonnaise an instrument?”

Sweet Celestia! That was my favorite episode.

Best Spongebob reference ever.

Regarding, the chapter, this is a good setup. 5 other TaviScratch shipfics I enjoyed all involved Octavia needing something from Vinyl. Points for originality from the start.

A TaviScratch I did not know existed? PREPOSTEROUS!

Hmm... Let me say this... I like it

Also; I plan on making a TaviScratch of my own, and reading this chapter gave me a good idea for it :3

This was quite enjoyable. I shall be following it, not unlike a hawk hunting for a field mouse. But seriously this was pretty good.

Roofus

Image: http://www.whosawesome.com/

...unless there's some big twist later on.

Pink clouds?! Discord is back, and he's teaming up with Pinkie Pie! Equestria is doomed! Run for the hills, everypony!

I personally dislike using the "I love you" so early on :/ But oh well..

Amazing; this goes for both the story and the chapter. Simply divine. I don't think it fair that you have so few followers, likes and faves so I'm gonna promote your fic among my subscribers, if that's all right with you

Keep on rocking!