Sail me to the Moon

Luna ponders her life, before and after she was banished to the moon.

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BarrenBaron

BarrenBaron #1 · Jun 15th, 2012 · · ·

that was awesome, also nice touch how she kinda-sorta went through the stages of acceptance, denial, acceptance, bargaining etc.

Might want to cut down on the commas though, sentences should only go on for three or four i think is the rule. But otherwise great story.

mrmayortheiv

mrmayortheiv #2 · Jun 29th, 2012 · · ·

Absolutely fantastic, the beginning kind of threw me off, the first person was just a little strong if that makes any sense, but the rest of it was really good especially the end

Seer

Seer #3 · Jul 27th, 2012 · · ·

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Thank-you for pointing that out. After reading the editors omnibus on EQ Daily I have learned a lot about correct comma and semicolon use and have since gone back to correct this story.

Between Lines

Between Lines #4 · Jul 27th, 2012 · · ·

I spotted a few spelling errors, but otherwise, I'm pleased I stopped by to read this. It was surprisingly powerful, and had a nice arc to it.

By the way, the title reminds me of Neon Genesis Evangelion.

Seer

Seer #5 · Jul 27th, 2012 · · ·

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Thank you, I'll try to go back and correct those.
It may be of interest to you to know that the title is actually named after a Radiohead song on Hail to the Theif.
The lyrics aren't related, I just really liked the title.

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