Generous Rarity and Honest Applejack are both in a loving, but secret relationship for the past two years with the intent of keeping it a secret for as long as they see fit. Twilight Sparkle meanwhile is head over hoofs for one of the two, causing seeds of lust to be planted in her and once they sprout bad things will happen to good ponies both relevant and irrelevant.
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You need to fix a few grammatical errors with the (')'s and stuff, but a must track!
Great start! I see much potential in this, therefore I will track it ![]()
Although I am usually against the idea of Alicorns (other than the two princess) I think that there is potential in this so I will stick with it.
uh-oh... i see a lot of potential here
but i hope you don't deliver on applejack's and Rarities ideas of what their friends will think...
Immortal octavia.. i'm okay with this
Ocatvia is immortal
Your arguments are now invalid.
It's a rather nice story, I wish to see where this goes ![]()
everypony here read these fics seeking a story that really pass emotion, this one truly promises, jealousy is a truly strong emotion
lrya...straight...i can deal with that...
what i can't is how you constantly elude telling us who twilight has fallen for!
or
? so many choices! and such riches a plenty!
really liking this! keep it up!
I think it's Applejack Twilight is all in for.... Don't ask why, I just do.![]()
My votes for Rarity, just for the soul fact that the only interaction that's been mentioned between Twilight and the two, is that Twilight taught Rarity how to teleport... yep... ![]()
I can only assume that Twilight is gonna go off the deep end in the next chapter (Curse you dark tag! I see you, looming over the love and happiness!)
To the story:
Pretty interesting story so far, unique little concept you've got going on here
. It does have potential, like all the others said, and I am intrigued as to how Twilight will take the bad news (Presumably not well... I sense depression and hermit mode coming on
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Yes! I so pegged it as Rarity ![]()
I can see the rage that Twilight holds within herself after she sees the two together, but not her rudeness before. Unless her lust for Rarity morphs into obsession and this obsession consumes every waking moment of her day (and possibly her dreams). So if that is the case then I can see the rage at the annoyances, but personally it still seems a little odd to me still. Eh, i'll get over it. ![]()
soooo.. those flames where real super saiyan like? or just
symbolized anger?? ![]()
I'm very interested in how you will play out Mac's rivalry with Bon Bon... all's fair in love and war...
Funny, I was thinking of Star Wars music before that link came up. And now, for some fitting lyrics
"She will be mine or SHE WILL BURN!" can you guess where that's from?
Anyway, this rules.
OH MY FAUST!
shh no spoilers
Oh, um . . . I CAN'T BELIEVE THAT THING HAPPENED WITH THAT PONY, THAT HAPPENED WITH THAT OTHER PONY THAT MAY OR NOT HAVE HAPPENED!
Is that ok?
lol this is going to get dark isent it lol ..... i love the dark ^^ ![]()
"Gold Sky the Alicorn who sees and loves Rarity as a Big Sister".. But he's 2 hundred years old!! how can he see
as a big sister???![]()
soooo... will Rarity tell Celestia? or Twillight really tough that Rarity would just forget that the next day and tell nopony? ![]()
Why are you doing this to YAY?!? YAY doesn't deserve it!?
great chapter! keep it up!
damn nigga also it would be nice if u pair dash with fluttershy just saying
Twilight! Get that evilness out of you!
hey i get that she did't want to kill Twilight but when you think about it she did't really had to kiss her now did she
The whole 'Lyra being straight' thing is gonna be needed to get use to, but great story so far.![]()







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