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After meeting Twilight in Equestria and making her his marefriend, Max faces one last problem, how will his parents react to the idea of their possible future daughter-in-law being an... animal.




inspired by this dead thread at this group
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Sex tag and Teen for... well you'll figure it out.

Also, please excuse some grammatical errors you encounter, I don't think I had the pleasure of going over this story more than one time. Time seems to be slipping away from me every passing moment ( but then again, who can escape the boundaries of time anyways?)

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Nice plot, nice pacing, and over all a good story. :twilightsmile:

I must admit, that wasn't half bad. Brought the feels. Love to see the wedding part

7052068 Hate to say it, but I think it's done.

I know I'm in the minority here, but I can't support human on pony romance. Especially when there's a sex tag. Sorry.

7052197 Yeah and no magic light show to convince them. But knowing Pinkie, she would bring slides.

7052294 Its fine, everyone has their own philosophies :)

7052395 Lol, I can imagine that XD

7052437 Okay, thanks for understanding.

Imagine how his sis will react when she hears this because she missed it

Sometime ago, I was sent to Equestria by some magical force and was forced to interact with ponies for my survival. During my time there, I met Twilight and began spending time with her, of course, just as friends. However, both of us just suddenly realized that we started enjoying each other's company more and more until one day, Heart's and Hooves' day came and we simultaneously confessed to each other. We've been together ever since.

I rarely actually see something like this in a longer romance story, or rarely a long sequel after something like this.

Well that was pretty funny, and nice. I admit I can´t really say what exactly Twilights personality is since I´m sort of used to think that she would be to shy for something like what she wanted to do in the end of the story in exctly their house, but maybe it is something involving her instincts. I mean I saw at least one story, where Rainbow wanted to have sex, because every Pony could smell that he belongs to her, now I just assume this is something similar and Twilight really wants to sort of own his room.

Whatever I hope there is more, maybe even in a form of something longer. I admit some one-shots are nice, but I´m not a one-shot fan.

If you make anything like a Sequel to this story, I would absolutely love it if they maybe would actually troll his sister, and Twilight would act like an animyl, her parent´s like they would accept it, and stuff like that. It sounds anyway like his sister maybe had annoyed him in the past.

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I rarely actually see something like this in a longer romance story, or rarely a long sequel after something like this.

That actually made me rethink about all the HiE romances I've read and you're kinda right. I myself can't remember that kind of simple plot as well.

But anyways, if you're okay with human x pony romance that actually explores farther than when the relationship is formed, then I suggest this when you have the time.

7053108 Thank you I will try it.

7053127 I second that.

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As a side note... how did the other humans reacted to her? He is willing to show her Manhattan after all, so probably others saw her as well.

Well, I guess showing Twilight around Man(e)hattan is a whole different story for a whole different day.

But I guess in this story, no other humans other than Max's parents had seen her (or I'd like to think of it that way) otherwise never would the adjective known as "peaceful" ever be used to describe any particular aspect of their lives.

Max, you probably should have laid out the fact that Twilight is sentient and sapient before blurting that she's your girlfriend.

Well? Surely you can't end it there! It has room to expand! Please!

7055243 I'm glad you liked it :twilightsmile:

But if you're interested and are serious in looking for human x pony romance, I suggest this story right here

I'd like to believe that it rests on of the high-end HiE human x pony romance fics that expand more on background, setting, character, and relationships.

I think people in this fandom sometimes forget that unicorns have a long and established history in fiction as being intelligent, speaking creatures. A history that far predates MLP. The Last Unicorn was written in the 80s, and had a talking unicorn. The Narnia Chronicles written in the 50s had talking unicorns. The Oz books, almost 100 years old now, had a talking unicorn.

Even if the MLP phenomenon had never happened, I think the totally average person, upon meeting a unicorn, would be more surprised by the fact of the meeting itself than the idea that a unicorn could speak.

7109275 You're including way too many factors. Theres also that fact that you can get sucked in to Equestria, go back, colorful horses, etc. but in a short fic, most of that is usually accounted for. You focus on what needs to be focused, if you address too much problems or inconsistencies by trying to weave the perfect "reality" without any loose ends, then it would take away the whole point of the story.

In this fic in particular, the fact that their son was willing to love a horse probably mattered more than the existence of unicorns itself. Besides, didn't Max already tell them about his life in Equestria before he came home? Then I bet that would've been the time that this unicorn thing surprised them., but by the time they actually met Twilight, they simply looked at her as some sort of "magical" animal pet.

Alot of fics including really great ones throw away those kinds of issues, why? Because it's not essential to the story. For example, in a fic called "Scootadate" by Shortskirtsandexplosions, the ponies played laser tag- a gun based game . But guns didn't even exist at that timeframe.

It's not about forgetting, its about knowing the right stuff to put into your fic. Sure the Parents being surprised by the existence of unicorns would've been something, but then, I believe more people would prefer to actually observe the interactions about "love between animal and human" being addressed instead.

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"—but that doesn't mean that my capacity to have feelings for Max are any less different from anyone is this world."

That kinda says the opposite of what it should, I think.

Well in the parents defense they didn't really know the unicorn could actually talk, to them it seemed like their son was in love with a horse that couldn't even speak. Perhaps Twilight and Max should have actually had the common courtesy of making sure his parents know that Twilight wasn't just another speechless horse before dropping the bombshell that he was dating it. Kind of a dick move actually.

*stands up and starts clapping and cheering*

is this a side story to something because i feel like it is *EDIT* and if not then im going to make a story for it... if thats ok with you author

7368750 Well, it is highly related to Heaven's Gift (MC just has a different name) and Eating Twilight Sparkle (a spin-off clopfic).

But I'm totally fine with you making a story, go ahead :twilightsmile:

Interesting... :twilightsmile:

one thing I think was rude was the sister/daughter who was on her phone and having earbuds in her ears instead of joining in on everything, but overall really great fic, hopefully there's more to come at some point

This story is just plain great. The only complaint I have is that it felt like you had Kate wearing headphones just for plot convenience. Other than that, I loved very bit of this story. Would love a sequel or prequel

9/10.

*le gasp
How dare you call Twilight an animal!?

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