2 bit bow job

lol it'sblow job

anyhow i like the premises and memeber to capitaliez those i's

Hm, not bad over all.  It follows the movie pretty well.  I need to know, though, have you read the book?

I like ponies

>>752610752610 Indeed you do sir.

>>752609752609 I have not had the pleasure of doing so, but maybe I should have before I wrote this.

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I liked it.  Definitely will be back for more

cant wait 4 more chapters

TELL ME WHERE IS THE LINK

I really like where this is going. More please!

This is the second Fight Club-My Little Pony mashup I've seen and so far I like it.

>>753170753170 Yeah I saw that one. He posted yesterday I think or the day before. It was good to. I would have never thought of using Spike though.

omg i hate your story ugh. FISH.

>>755224755224 HAHA I love you babe. Don't dislike it. I worked pretty hard on this one. T.T

you have attracted my interest, do not fail me.

edit: a tentative favorite, but you could really use an editor.

>>752605752605

ohai

I like this, write faster.

Not a bad start at all. Some small errors here and there that could easily be fixed by a proofreader beforehand, but otherwise, nicely done!

Still some small problems, but otherwise a neat way of telling a Fight Club-esque story. Not bad

>>816744816744 Thank you for the comments sir. I will get somebody to proofread these chapters and the next ones I do.

*Slow Clap*

I'm glad you told me to read this! It was very good, a couple of mistakes but very good.

>>833762833762Well thankyou for reading it. I am almost done with ch3., but I will have it proofread first.

Cliffhangers. Why does it always end, IN BUCKING CLIFFHANGERS

Otherwise, good work. Cant wait for chapter 4

Keep up the good work man!

Completely irrelivant, but, FIRST POST!

I loved Fight Club, it was a great movie. So far this is entertaining and I'm enjoying it but I have to ask how closely do you plan on following the movie? So far this has generally been a scene for scene retread of Fight Club, and as amusing as that is, I'd much rather you go somewhere a little more interesting than just copying the movie. I mean I could just watch the move again you know?

>>900056900056 Yeah I'm gonna mix it up soon. The beginning parts are just the same, but the next chapters will be a bit different.

>>900069900069

Cool. I look forward to it.

So I decided to go in a different direction with this, and now the plot line is different than the movie, but will have the same basic ideas. Thankyou for reading and please rate.

DJ P0N-3 is in the house!

Octavia as a music pirate? Interesting career path.

Also I'm glad to see you branching off from your source material a bit.

Not exactly a great chapter, but I understand this was mostly the set up. So good work and I'm looking forward to next chapter.

>>905654905654 Thankyou. This is the first story I have that people seem to find interesting. It's my experimental story you could say. I try to take plot line that I know so well and then mix it up a bit. These first few chapters were free handed, so they didn't take any real planning other than coming up with random diseases and her job. The next ones will take a lot more planning and time. I hope they will be to everyone's wishes.

woo!

This story is getting quite interesting. I like your writing and how you build your characters.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

>>908492908492>>908648908648 Thankyou for reading guys.

No problem. Was really worth the time! >>909901909901

Will the next  chapter be soon?

>>936138936138 Well I am not exactly sure when it will be out. I'm hoping I can get a new chapter out before the end of this week. I also have to get a new chapter out for my clop, so we shall see.

Are you ever going to update this?

>>24573522457352 Yeah, probably not... I'm just not into it as much as I used to be.