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    Rainbow Dash and Applejack have a little foal, and it's hungry
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  • E Twilight's first war... ish

    Princess Twilight has received a declaration of war
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    It's Rabbit Slayer's Day again, where ponies are eating candy eggs and fighting demonic invasions
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    After one of Pinkie's fameous parties, the girls decide to play one last party game
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  • T MLP Laboratories- Freak Show

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Blog Posts7

  • 74w, 2d
    author replies?

    How do you feel about authors replying to the comments on their posts, even when they have nothing better to say than "thanks" or something like that?

    It's kinda silly but I started being really, really sporadic in my replies ever since many years ago someone on a Youtube video of mine went "lol you reply to evry comment you have no life"

    2 comments · 68 views
  • 92w, 3d
    Season 3 Finale and Fanfiction

    Yeah, as far as I am concerned, an era of fanfiction ended with season 3. All my fics will be set either prior to season 4 or in alternative realities. Maybe the season 4 era will also be interesting, but certainly in a different way. For the forseeable future, my stories will need the old background.

    1 comments · 97 views
  • 105w, 2d
    In-depth commentary "Too many Pinkie Pies"

    Yep, I did it again. Sometimes, there is an episode that so deeply disturbs me that I have to write a few lines about it.

    Check it out if you dare, starting here:


    In any case, if you know any good commentaries on the show, especially concerning this episode, feel free to share!

    2 comments · 98 views
  • 122w, 11h
    MLP-Laboratories clone has appeared?

    Greetings one and all,

    I have just stumbled upon this: At first glance, the premise looks a lot like the one of my 'Laboratories'. We'll see how similar it actually is. It looks really cool so far. When I wrote my 'Laboratories', it was because I wanted to see this idea explored, and since no one was doing it, I had to do it myself. Had this been made a year earlier I might not have written 'MLP Laboratories' at all.

    Here's the thing, though. Call me a self-righetous prick but I'm going to watch this one really closely.

    1-If it's very similar to mine, I'll be like 'Congratulations, you started with the same idea but made more of it than I did. Good for you, good for the community'.

    2-If the similarities start getting suspicious, I might ask him whether he has ever read my fic by any chance. He'll say no, and I will believe him.

    3-If the similarities are getting too much to bear and he still insists he doesn't know me and won't reference me in any way, I will get pissed. And then I might get really, really childish. You see, I wouldn't mind anyone doing better than me or actually copying my ideas and build on them, but if that's the case, they really shouldn't hog the credit.

    We'll see. Until then, watch his show, it looks quite promising.

    4 comments · 132 views
  • 127w, 1d
    Introducing my very own analysis of the show (political and psychological)

    'My Little Pony- Friendship is Magic' has to be one of my favorite cartoons, and, indeed, TV-shows of all times. I won't go into any detail as to why and how I have become a brony and how much I love the brony community as well as the abundance of art and fiction it has produced. At this point I'd just like to say that it is the first time I'm happy to be a part of something this big and that I have a very strong desire to contribute to this rapidly expanding mythology.

    I have created a lot of fanfiction myself already. Which is rather strange since I have never written any fanfiction before. Something about this show leaves me strangely... unsatisfied in a very intriguing way. I feel the need to reflect on what I have seen, ponder on the different hints hidden inside and the conflicting signals it seems to be radiating occasionally - okay, constantly.

    People who are new to the series might not believe it, but MLP FiM is more than meets your awareness when you first watch it. I have a very strong feeling that what we have seen so far is merely the tip of the iceberg. In a sense, my fiction is an attempt to explore this mysterious world, to dig deeper into its secrets, to discover the things they are not showing us but that they are hinting at in a not-so-subtle way. I bet many bronies feel the same.

    To use a term widely used in psychology, MLP FiM belongs to the realm of the 'uncanny'. Something is always slightly off in a very fascinating and sometimes disturbing way. Maybe that's just the natural consequence of very talented and creative people producing a children's cartoon about little ponies.

    For the moment I am certainly not capable to deliver something like a complete analysis, far from it. These essays are supposed to give you a quick overview of some things I have been speculating about so far.

    Before we go any further, let me tell you something about the way I'm planning to go about this. Much of what I'm doing here is inspired by the work of Rob Ager, a brilliant movie analyst who would be ashamed to be referenced by someone like me. Since I don't see Ager doing an analysis of MLP FiM anytime soon (other than "...Gwrglwrgl psychedelic pony fascism brainwashing waste of time gwrglwrgl..."), I'll have to give it a go myself.

    First of all, I am basing my reading on a somewhat shaky premise: That most of what I am seeing on screen is deliberate, rather than the consequence of lazy writing. I love this show, and I tend to assume these guys knew what they were doing. I realize that it does have its imperfections, but I also like to think of it as the product of several highly creative, thinking minds coming together to deliver a unique experience. The creators themselves might laugh at the things I'm saying here and claim that any hidden "message" was completely unintentional. However, as someone who is trying to create art myself, I have come to think that when you create something, there is an underlying reason to present it one way and not another, even when you aren't aware of it. To a certain point, the boundaries between deciphering a creator's agenda and amateur-psychoanalyzing them in a patronizing way can be fluctuating, and I apologize in advance for that.

    It is important to keep in mind at all times that this show is a story. It is not reality, but a tale about reality. Thus it does not necessarily follow the usual rules of causality, but has instead an inner coherence that might be difficult to decipher at times. In other words, a story works like a dream, the ends pretty much justify the means- if you need to have a giant monster pop out of nowhere to represent a character's inner fears, or make someone act completely out of character, go for it. The important part is that you deliver the message in the most efficient way. To understand a show like this, you can't take everything literally, or else you get stuck in the most superficial contradictions and apparent plot-holes. Ask yourself not only what you are shown, but what it means.

    -The setting

    There are different layers of the uncanny in this show. Some things are more easy to spot than others, but they all find their way into our brains and contribute to our perception of this work.

    There are the ponies themselves, for instance. They have a very unique anatomy and seem to have even less in common with actual horses than the 'little ponies' of previous generations.

    That's because they aren't actual horses. Maybe I'll discuss this in depth another time, but it is my strong perception that the little ponies are not just anthropomorphic animals, but a species of four-legged humanoids. In a slightly uncomfortable way, they are very, very human. They still have equine attributes, but less than humans have primate attributes.

    To use drastic terms, this is basically a show about naked people who are walking on all fours. Their intelligence and spirit, compared to their incarnations in previous generations of this show, also adds to that impression. They are, for all intends and purposes, people. Weird people... but that's like saying "a square with four corners".

    Thus we have the first piece of the puzzle. What makes MLP FiM so fascinating is its somewhat brutal and unconventional way of portraying the human condition. Despite all the cute colors and fluffiness, this show is not pretty in the conventional sense. It is monstrous, and in that, it is also shockingly honest. To get back to something I said a little earlier, it is the *naked* truth.

    The ponies are us. They are grotesque and disturbing, a blend of biology and civilization, dreams and ideas radiated by twisted bags of meat - just as we are. We are lifeforms who have emerged from the bogs of this world, loving and thinking, singing and dancing, constructing and destroying, laughing and crying, but just as organic and vulnerable  as all the other animals. Most shows simply don't bother to be quite as in-your-face about it as MLP FiM.

    This observation triggers a lot of questions. What exactly is the magical land of Equestria? How does magic work? Why are there three major "tribes" of ponies with vastly different attributes, and how do they coexist? What is their relationship with other intelligent lifeforms such as griffins and donkeys? How come cows are held in captivity while buffalos roam free and have their own civilization? How did Princess Celestia, the god-queen of Equestria, get to be in charge of raising the sun, and what does that even mean? Could it really be that all life on this planet is resting in the hooves of one powerful pony - does that prove that ponies really are the pinnacle of creation and all other lifeforms and nations are reduced to the rank of background-characters? And how come no one seems to be worried even the slightest about the very concept of having a god-queen?

    On the more individual level, how are the different characters interacting with one another? What is with this constant use of the concept of 'insanity' throughout the show? All major characters have proven to be somewhat mentally unstable at some point, indicating a general theme of exploration of the self and overcoming hidden traumas, but presented in such a brutal way that it looks eerily out of place in a little kid's show.

    There are so many contradictions, underlying conflicts and mysteries here that I'm getting all dizzy even introducing the subject. But the show is addressing all of this. It doesn't necessarily provide satisfying answers - how could it possibly do that? - but it is certainly exploring some very fascinating questions.

    So we have obtained the general 'grille de lecture' for the show. It's a show about creatures like us, and it's presented in a way that does not hesitate to ask very uncomfortable questions in very uncomfortable ways. In fact, it would probably be downright unbearable to watch if it wouldn't insist on other things as well- love and beauty, for instance. Adventure. Exploration. Humor, of course. Lots of it, some of it very dark, much of it light-hearted and kind. That does not contradict the original premise, but instead reinforces it. The ponies are weird and uncanny, but we love them, just as we love our own world and the people and creatures in it - because that IS the reality of our world. MLP FiM is simply replacing the more arbitrary elements of our world- geography, human anatomy, technology and historical timeline - while focussing on something more essential, revealing to us the abstract, underlying principles that are making it complex, mysterious... and beautiful.

    First up: The Fascism of the Foal-Free Press ( )

    Second: Conformity and Racism in Ponyville

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  • ...

Disclaimer: guys, this is a wild and bumpy ride, and if there was only one word that didn't apply here, it would be 'coherent'. I put things in there through random association, not logic. The grimdark is not meant to be taken seriously (but then again, grimdark never is, can you say 'Warhammer 40.000'). That being said, the few parts talking about (Trigger Warning) rape and racism are not supposed to be taken lightly, and if that's how it feels, feel free to ask me to take these particular story arcs down. Also trigger warning for possible body dysphoria as a mare is implied to have temporarily grown a penis at one point.


Did they really think they lived in a magical cartoon world? Where they controllled the weather? Where they had created and maintained an advanced civilization all by themselves, despite the fact they didn't even have thumbs?

They did believe that. At least for a while.

But one by one, they are waking up to a much harsher, much more disturbing reality.

Pityful, spliced creatures, they will try to fight their way out of a nightmarish place ruled by cold and sadistic entities.

Then again, who is to say what is real and what isn't. Perhaps this is nothing but a nightmare. A very long, painful nightmare. Perhaps the truth is something different altogether. So many mysteries, so many paradoxes, so many horrors. Only one thing is sure.

Friendship is magic.

First Published
24th Nov 2011
Last Modified
29th Jun 2012
#1 · 157w, 1h ago · · · Iiiiiiih ·

Scary. I once had a dream similar to this.

I do look forward to your next installment.

One question though, why would her throat be bleeding from screaming?

#2 · 157w, 56m ago · · · Iiiiiiih ·

Nice to see you've posted this from Await further updates

#3 · 157w, 14m ago · · · Iiiiiiih ·

Cool story bro, I like it.

#4 · 156w, 6d ago · · · Iiiiiiih ·

>>39079  good question. To be honest, I just believe I read that somewhere, but never checked if it's even possible from a medical point of view. Maybe I'll remove that.

#5 · 156w, 6d ago · · · Worms ·

The world is what?

#6 · 156w, 6d ago · · · Worms ·

>>39702 They were told it's name was "Equestria".

Dun dun dunnnnn~

Keep it up!

This is extremely confusing.

Ima track it anyways

When she said rage against the machine, I went to youtube and started playing Killing in the Name. Good times.

#10 · 156w, 3d ago · · · Spectrum ·


That wasn't meant to be a question.

reads like it

sound like it

but isn't

#11 · 156w, 1d ago · · · Spectrum ·

>>42820 What it was meant to be is going to stay your personal secret, I presume.


think about it.


Dun dun dun~ :applejackunsure: :rainbowderp:

Loving the story and frequent updates! Keep it up!

Wish the story hadn't taken the brown shirt turn. Oh well; in for a penny - in for a pound. :facehoof:

Viva la resistance! :twilightangry2:

Wow. This is incredible. I eagerly look forward to more. Also, was that a covert Ren & Stimpy reference I spotted?

>>46065 Maybe. All I can say is that one of the many lessons I learned from that show was "Don't wizz- on the Electric Fence!"

Holy tit fuck

pinkie pie was turned into a cupcake??? :pinkiegasp: (thats what im gettin)

hm if everythin's a lie i wonder whats w/ :trollestia:

this sound BUCKIN AWESOME :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

>>51197 I got to admit... I've never seen someone interpret it like this, but now that I think of it... :rainbowderp: OMG PINKIE WHAT HAVE I DONE...

Bronyvistus=pony hitler

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO RAINBOW DASH :fluttercry::fluttershysad::raritycry::raritydespair:

>>51323 She'll be fine... Remember, she's the best.

So Rainbow Dash is the pony equivalent of Jewish?  Interesting....  :rainbowhuh:

Applejack as Hitler Youth/Nazi though... as a southern girl, I can believe it (KKK), but as the element of Honesty, I would think she would see right through that bull.  :ajbemused:

But people change under drastic circumstances.

But no matter what, you did amazingly.

>>52022 thanks. This means a lot to me.

Wow, wasn't expecting to have the meme barrier broken... twice.

Still, loving the story. :twilightsmile:

Endless YouTube videos. Every junkie's weakness.

I guess the grimdarl has simply gone so high, we've hit an overflow error and have looped into delightfully absurd. Not complaining, mind you, just making an observation. I look forward to more!:pinkiehappy:

Dont, mess with fluttershy.   Nuff said.  


#30 · 149w, 5d ago · · · Recoil ·

I supose that you really liked Portal?

Well, at least you managed to make use of the same elements without making it sound like a straight copy

I think that you derrailed a bit since the last few chapters and simply threw all logic straight out of the window, but still keeping a nice chain of events (that's good) and I'm curious to know what twilight is going to do

Someone should definitely make a fan art of the re-stiched Twilght

#31 · 149w, 5d ago · · · Recoil ·

Had I not read Freak Show, this would have been very confusing.

Looking forward to more.

#32 · 149w, 5d ago · · · Recoil ·

>>128976 I try to stay close to the 'pop culture reference'/'fan art' side and away from the 'plagiat' side though I admit sometimes it's a tight walk

#33 · 147w, 4d ago · · · Recoil ·

I admit, I was struggling to avoid reading Celestia's dialogue in GLaDOS's voice this chapter. And I mean that in a good way.

I can't wait to see when Twilight sends herself. :pinkiehappy:

#34 · 145w, 20h ago · · · Recoil ·

Yeah, I skipped a few chapters. I gotta be honest, this story just creeps me out. It's too weird, to unhappy for me to consider.

Good writing though, I wouldn't change anything, though I'd never read this story again. It's just too much.

#35 · 145w, 7h ago · · · Recoil ·

>>222521 Thanks for sharing your thoughts, your aproval means a lot to me especially since it goes against your personal preferences

God this is paranoia-inducing. :pinkiecrazy:

Fuck this is grimdark.:pinkiesick::pinkiecrazy::facehoof:

#38 · 141w, 3d ago · · · Worms ·

I am not enjoying reading this, but I keep reading anyway. Is something wrong with me? :pinkiecrazy:

I just realized this is basically (in a fashion) the Matrix with ponies and a comprehensible plot. Too bad Pinkie didn't give Spike a choice between a red and a blue cupcake.

And Pinkie still talks to the audience...

Damn, it's like a good survival-horror game! And it was intended to be so, it seems!

I take it Rainbow Dash kicked a chair across a room in a fit of rage and realized that NOPONY could tell her what she can and cannot collect from her body and throw at others?

I'm pretty sure this is scarier than Silent Hill. :pinkiesick:

#44 · 140w, 3d ago · · · Recoil ·

Cupcakes was nothing. Rainbow Factory was nothing. :pinkiesick::pinkiesick:

#45 · 137w, 4d ago · · · The arena ·

Hopefully this alternate universe will be better, but I'm not banking on it.

This is one of the most mind bendingly terrifying stories I have ever read. :pinkiecrazy: And you are awesome for writing it! :twilightblush:

And of course, finding out what these "ponies" actually are (via the companion piece Freak Show) makes it even more terrifying.

Also is Celestia some sort of central AI like GLADOS (Portal) or SHODAN (System Shock)?

Finally, will we get to see the "real world" (the world outside the lab complex)?

NYAH fluttershy!  

wait.. oh.. AWESOME!   YAY that is epic XD  :yay::yay::yay:

leave it to pinkie

:flutterrage: eat me!

:pinkiegasp::pinkiecrazy: ok ^_^

>>420374 Very glad you like it. To answer your questions: Yes and maybe :twilightsmile:

Because when you say "screw destiny," you've got expect things that no one could've foreseen. Including Gooeyshy. :yay:

Delightfully disturbing. I look forward to more. Oh, and can Fluttershy shapeshift now? She seems to be in pony shape only out of habit.

#50 · 129w, 3d ago · · · Fruchtbar ·

Now there's a wonderful image...

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