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    • Even farther from home
      It seems us khajiit can never find peace. Not even in other worlds.

      27,380 words · 2,732 views · 348 likes · 21 dislikes
    • Half a man
      Demon possessed man breaks out of captivity and escapes to Equestria.
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    Time to switch the pov. Asterisks mean the pov has changed

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    "Um, Twilight?"

    "What is it Fluttershy?"

    "Are you sure I can't go back home?"

    "Look Fluttershy, I know you're scared, we all are."

    "Not me!" The cyan pegasus proudly exclaimed while punching an imaginary target in midair. Twilight couldn't help but roll her eyes at the over confident pegasus.

    "As I was saying, you know that Celestia sent me a letter telling all of us to investigate that newly opened crack of magic in the Everfree Forest. For all we know it could be Discord's doing or maybe even Chrysalis plotting her revenge." The timid pegasus's eyes only widened more in fear to the horrible possibility of their old foes seeking revenge for their humiliating defeats.

    "You really think it could be one of them?" Seeing how her explanation only deepened her friends fear she could only let out an exasperated sigh.

    "I'm sorry Fluttershy, but if it really is one of our old enemies, we have to stop them now so nopony will get hurt."

    "And if it is one of them vermin, you have us behind your back sugercube." The honest earth ponies words calmed the scared pegasus and put them all in higher spirits.

    "Oh and if it is Discord then their will be chocolate rain girls! Chocolate rain!" The over ecstatic pony chimed.

    "That would horrible darling! Last time that happened it took weeks to get all that chocolate off my coat."

    "Stop your whining Rarity. All the apples back on the farm still taste like chocolate!"

    "Oh that's not whining, This is whining!"

    Fwoosh

    "Eep!" was all that escaped Fluttershy's mouth before diving into a bush.

    "Fluttershy get out of there!"

    "But what was that sound Twilight?"

    "I don't know but it came from where the disturbance of magic is supposed to be, come on girls!"

    Crack

    AAUGH!

    The very ground shook under the groups hooves as they heard the thunderous sound and the pained scream of something.

    "Eep!"

    "What the hay was that?"

    "I don't know Applejack, but whatever it was, it sounds like something is hurt."

    "Then come on! We have to help", Rainbow Dash said before promptly leaving the group behind to find the source of the pained screams. With a new task at hand, the ponies trotted to the disturbance, unaware of the strange new creature they were to find.

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    "Have you found anything yet Pinkie?" Twilight asked in a worried tone.

    "Nope! Nothing so far Twi!" The hyper pony retorted.

    "Well keep looking."

    "Okey Dokey Lokey!" Pinkie said before going back to happily looking for clues

    "AAAHHHH!!"

    "Was that Rarity?" Rainbow questioned.

    "I think so, come on we have to find her!", Twilight said before setting off to where they last seen their friend. "Rarity,  what's the matter?"

    "I-I found a dead jaguar!"

    Hearing that an animal was in danger or possibly dead the yellow pegasus shed her fear and replaced it with concern.

    "Rarity are you sure it was dead?", Fluttershy asked the startled unicorn.

    "I don't know! All I saw was that it was drooling blood and one of its bones was sticking out of its body!"

    That was all Fluttershy needed to hear before leaving the group behind to search for the wounded animal.

    "What are we waiting for? We have to help too!" Applejack screamed to the fazed ponies.

    "Your right, Lets go!", Rainbow Dash said as they struggled the keep up with the butterscotch blur.

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    Its no wonder that Rarity thought the poor creature was dead. True to her word the feline was covered in blood coming from its mouth and open wounds. What amazed them however was the creatures appearance. Though its fur was stained with blood, it was such a beautiful midnight black that seemed to hypnotize you if you stared to long at it. Though it did heavily resemble a jaguar, its body structure seemed to suit it to walk on its hind legs opposed to all four. Last however were the creatures eyes, which were slit and a deep ice blue.

    Noticing that the creature was feline in origin, the pink pony couldn't help herself but cradle and pet it.

    "Aww, your just a hurt little kitten. Its okay we're here to help."

    "PINKIE, DON'T TOUCH IT!" Twilight yelled. However Pinkie was oblivious to her and continued to pet the wounded creature.

    "I shall call you Fluffy, and you will be my Fluffy."

    "Um, Pinkie could you please get away from Fluffy so Twilight can carry it to my cottage with her magic?"

    The timid pegasus's words surprised the others who only stared at her in astonishment.

    "What? This poor thing is hurt badly and I don't think we can get him to the hospital soon enough, if that's alright with you."

    "Fluttershy is right, we have to help whatever... this is, and fast." With that twilight enveloped the body in her purple aura and carried the broken thing back to Fluttershy's cottage."

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    'Huh? What is this light, has J'lae crossed to the other side? Such a shame, never got to try that new trick Brynjolf told me. J'lae thought he was daft when he said all that was needed was to put a bucket over the traders head and take whatever J'lae could carry. Wait, this is not the afterlife calling for me.... It's candle light! J'lae is back in Skyrim! But where?'

    As you surveyed your surroundings, you saw that you were in a bed. Not only any bed though, but a one fit for a High king. But that was not all you saw, there were also tables and a wardrobe decorating the room, whose walls seemed to be made entirely of wood. Almost as if it were carved from the inside of a tree.

    'What? No creature lives in a tree besides the.... Oh no. The Thalmor...'

    The very name of those damned high elves left a sour taste in your mouth.

    ' It seems they have finally caught me and are taking me prisoner. Divines, why did J'lae have to steal all there armor and make them walk naked?'

    Before you could scold yourself for such a crime, you noticed a blur of pink in your peripheral vision. Trying to sit up, a pain shot into your body that only forced you back down. With a closer look, you noticed your torso and right leg were heavily bandaged. That's when the memory of your not so graceful landing reminded you that this place is not Skyrim.

    Out of nowhere a pink pony wearing a huge grin appeared mere inches from your face, smelling heavily of sweets.

    "Hello mister Fluffy! My name is Pinkie Pie and this is your Glad you're still alive party!"

    '......Fluffy?'

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    That's all for now and a big thanks to Sounds Right for proof reading.

    Comments ( 30 )

    #1 · 49w, 21h ago · · ·
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    MORE MORE MORE!!!!!!

    Btw Sounds Right did a average job proof-reading. I noticed several Grammar Errors. For one, all I's should have been capitalized. Second you used the wrong there a couple times. By I's I mean in first person, if a person was saying

    "So I walked into a bar." Get it?

    #2 · 49w, 21h ago · · ·
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    Oops :twilightblush: though i reviewed the message and only saw the one "there" error :trixieshiftleft:

    #3 · 49w, 21h ago · · ·
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    >>739920 Ok sorry! I was just trying to help. But I didn't see that many errors, but when I referred to the There errors I mean in the first chapter too.

    #4 · 49w, 21h ago · · ·
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    and its quite hard to see the "I" errors when in Italic ex I i

    #5 · 49w, 21h ago · · ·
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    Though i need to ask, did the thoughts before the end seem a little bumpy? :applejackunsure: Because they felt bumpy.

    #6 · 49w, 21h ago · · ·
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    But i needed to know how i did so thanks. :pinkiehappy: >>739897

    #7 · 49w, 20h ago · · ·
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    U still has error :ajbemused:

    #8 · 49w, 20h ago · · ·
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    >>740111 Really Where?

    #9 · 49w, 14h ago · · ·
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    Dis is getting interesting... I noticed fewer grammar errors than in the last chapter, so it's an improvement!

    I was like LOL when they called him Fluffy.

    But... This still needs longer chapters.

    Anyway, good job.:pinkiesmile:

    #10 · 49w, 11h ago · · ·
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    :rainbowlaugh:

    #11 · 49w, 8h ago · · ·
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    >>740173

    Some of the 'I's are not capitalized, I saw a few times where you used 'your' instead of 'you're' I think there was one 'were' that should have been 'we're.' I also saw a few times where you indented too much.

    #12 · 49w, 8h ago · · ·
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    If u guys want i can update every 2 or 3 days instead of daily to make the chapters longer and have better grammer:twilightsmile:

    #13 · 49w, 4h ago · · ·
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    ALWAYS!:pinkiehappy:

    #14 · 49w, 3h ago · · ·
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    need more chapters :pinkiehappy:

    #15 · 48w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>742273

    As a "Quality over Quantity" kind of guy, I agree with the 2-3 day update pace.  

    So far so good.  From what I've seen so far its looking to be one of the better Skyrim-FiM crossovers.  

    #16 · 48w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>744496 Thank you!:pinkiehappy:

    #17 · 48w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Jeez, I've been reading so many sad stories that I use this as my comic relief. It also helps quite a lot that I play Skyrim as a khajiit. Great so far.

    #18 · 48w, 5d ago · · ·
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    moar plz:fluttershysad:

    #19 · 48w, 2d ago · · ·
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    "my name is Pinkies Pie"

    I think she has an extra "S", maybe for a Letter emergency?

    #20 · 48w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>767835 Celestia damn my crappy keyboard...

    #21 · 48w, 1d ago · · ·
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    #22 · 47w, 6d ago · · ·
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    I shall name you Fluffy and you will be my fluffy no pinkie MINE

    #23 · 47w, 6d ago · · ·
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    That is not whining. This is whining! :raritydespair:

    *Sigh* :facehoof:

    #24 · 47w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Goddamit!  I cant find a long enough Elder Scrolls mix to listen to while reading.  :facehoof:

    #25 · 43w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Looks pretty good so far.:moustache:

    #26 · 43w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Ha, the bucket cheat thing:rainbowlaugh:

    #27 · 42w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>739920

    "glad your still alive party."

    *You're

    I'm a huge grammar Nazi, I'm sorry...

    #28 · 42w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I thought he was daft when he said all I needed to do was put a bucket over the traders head and take whatever I could carry.

    Ah... the old bucket trick. too bad NPCs have the ability to see right through.

    #29 · 42w, 1d ago · · ·
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    "Hello mister Fluffy! My name is Pinkiepie and this is you're Glad your still alive party!"

    Pie

    your

    you're

    HAIIIIIIIIIIIIL GRAMMAR :twilightblush:

    #30 · 39w, 4d ago · · ·
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    im not fluffy!!!! :rainbowlaugh:

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