Rainbow Dash never got that Sonic Rainboom to work. She never met five other ponies destined for the same great purpose she had. She never even heard of the Elements of Harmony.
All she remembers these days are the sudden appearance of the Crystal Empire and the constant war that rages between it and Equestria.
As King Sombra grows in power, twisting the Crystal Empire's innate magic for his own dark purposes, the Equestrian forces find themselves in a war quickly shifting in the enemy's favor. Against the encroaching tide of oppressive tyranny and darkness, even the stoutest of Equestria's heroes have begun to tire.
Second Lt. Rainbow Dash, Wonderbolt division of the EUP guard, has been sent to Canterlot, where a special weapon is said to be developed, a weapon that could save Equestria and put an end to the war.
Instead of a mystical sword or a massive cannon, Rainbow Dash returns to the battle front with a small baby dragon in her care.
Desperate times call for desperate measures.
Limited gore (i.e. blood, violent death) in later chapters
Written for the Fifth SpikeDash Competition: Alternate Universes.
This story looks relly good hope to see more chapters soon ^_^
This is pretty good so far, can't wait to see more!
Oh shit.
Welp! I just got my ass kicked and out written.
Well, might as well give it a read.
I'm still trying to process the ending and it's been twenty minutes
Amazing job.
Well... this was heartbreaking...
having Spitfire die in the begining shows how serious this is.
Moon Dancer is a mare, so it should be Doctrix Moon Dancer.
Although the the dragon-killing device having belonged to Shining Armor is a rouse to get Spike to wear it, I suspect that Shining Armor really gave his life for Equestria in this alternate timeline.
The hole in the doughnut is not for decoration:
If donuts would be spherical, they could only be as large as doughnut-holes before one would have to choose between a cooked center or a burnt crust. Notice that the cross-section of the torus of the is about that of a doughnut-hole. By making the donuts as toruses, one can make the donuts 5 to 10 times more massive without having to choose between cooking the center or burning the outside. The original doughnut was what we would call a doughnut-hole which is why they are called doughnuts because they were nuts-shaped pieces of deep-fried dough.
An alternate approach to making donuts bigger is to make them longer and wider, but no more than a maximum thickness. This is the approach used for making barred rolled filled twisted donuts (a typical filled doughnut such as a jelly-doughnut would be half as thick without the filling injected into them). Regardless of the shape, one must cook donuts about a minute and a half on each side before flipping them (total cook-time is about 3 minutes).
So that's the ending?
I feel kind of....I don't know. I think I'm left feeling kind of disappointed. This isn't tragedy, but the end implies something I don't understand.
I have a huge ethical problem with how they are treating poor Spike. This collar which can insta-kill him at a whim will almost certainly be plot relevant later on and I'm not keen on Spike dying. After all, he IS a living thing with thoughts and emotions just like ponies. I have difficulty believing such cruelty could exist in Celestia's kingdom unless it was somehow done without her knowledge. In any case, I'm always up for a well written story taking place in a darker/edgier version of the shop's official canon. Write on, my friend, write on! (:
Despite the plot moving a bit slowly, I am still finding the story quite engaging. One of the strong things about this story is I can't really say for sure how it will end. This is a good thing as predictable stories are often boring ones. I have this terrible feeling that Spike will die in the end either from prejudice on the side of Equestria's forces or Sombra's forces will get lucky and get in a killing blow while Spike is in his more vulnerable 'baby' form. Another interesting aspect is how the story deals with how Spike is perceived by the Equestrian armed forces. It has thus far made for some interesting drama. I look forward to seeing how this story plays out.
This story deserves way more love. i was working on some fan art. Maybe ill finish it one day...
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really great story. I prefer happy endings but in real life they really don't work that way. shame this story didn't get that much attention.
Great story. Sad, Spike fell like that, but good story all the same.
This is one of the best pieces of fanfiction that I've ever read, and it's most certainly the best Rainbow Dash & Spike fanfics that I've ever read. Well done.
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Thanks for the comment and the fave. Glad you enjoyed it.
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I love it but I hate you cause of it.
Absolutely loved this story, but the end, just... oof