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Portable Dingus


Just your friendly neighborhood dingus. Lulz.

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Jeff was always the most plain, and average of guys; never in all his years did he ever do better than okay. He got straight C's in school, and even passed his exit examination in high school with the bare minimum requirements. He was the mid-popular guy, never switching between unliked, and loved. Destined forever to be another bare face in the crowd.

After moving out of his parents house—a trailer with just enough cleanliness to pass a federal health inspection—he went out to Walmart to stock up on goods.

Reaching into the back of the freezer in order to grab the freshest milk, he fell in and found himself in the middle of a small, quaint town filled with talking ponies.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 8 )

Good story looking forward to the next chaptet

Favorited and Tracking. Let the good times roll.

Really liking this!!

Interesting, though there are a few spots were there should be a comma instead of a period.
This...

Sticking to the plan they thought up moments before, the two began to flee the scene. Leaving behind the prayers they said internally.

should be

Sticking to the plan they thought up moments before, the two began to flee the scene, leaving behind the prayers they said internally.

Also, here:

He saw a bottle laying on the ground beside him, so he decided to pick it up and scoop the little hydra in it. Sealing the creature inside with the cap.

It should be:

He saw a bottle laying on the ground beside him, so he decided to pick it up and scoop the little hydra in it, sealing the creature inside with the cap.

6933389 Ninja'd. I was just about to point that out.

lol not sure why but at the end of this chapter I couldn't help but picture the scene at the end of Evil Dead 2. " Hail he who has come from the sky to deliver us from evil."

Sent to Equestria through a walmart fridge?
No fair. I worked at Walmart for a little over 4 years, and I got stuck here!

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