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    The Wizard of Words's Stories (11)

    • The Best Has Yet To Come
      Twilight remembers all the best times in her life, and when she thinks its the end, Dash disagrees.

      9,036 words · 3,433 views · 387 likes · 10 dislikes
    • The Research of Wing Spell Development and Mechanics
      Twilight finally perfects the Wing Casting spell, perfecting it down to the most trivial detail. Her friends are more than thrilled to hear and experience the fruits of her labor. All of her friends, except for Rainbow Dash.
      28,879 words · 4,434 views · 583 likes · 18 dislikes
    • Progress
      It's easy to lose sight of how far you've come when all you can see are the mistakes of the past. What happens when Twilight finds herself trapped, knowing that for every thing she's done right, she's done something else wrong?
      22,363 words · 1,864 views · 209 likes · 4 dislikes
    • Spell
      Looking back, it should have been obvious. All those brief moments they spent together, the close encounters, it was like they were dancing around the subject. And it all began with something so very small.
      13,831 words · 3,763 views · 424 likes · 14 dislikes
    • The Gift of the Magi
      11,673 words · 2,267 views · 214 likes · 8 dislikes
    • My Night Will Last Forever
      4,328 words · 1,316 views · 103 likes · 3 dislikes
    • One Last Game Book 2: Temple of Chaos
      45,533 words · 601 views · 71 likes · 2 dislikes
    • One Last Game Book 1: The Gathering
      151,057 words · 1,736 views · 133 likes · 8 dislikes
    • I'll Love You Forever
      14,131 words · 3,372 views · 329 likes · 27 dislikes
    • Breaking The Norm
      25,117 words · 1,273 views · 136 likes · 10 dislikes

    There is nothing more controlled or more harmonious than a cycle. Predictable, constant, and endless. For the one who embodies chaos, Discord hates cycles more than anything in all of existence. Being trapped in a cycle is the worst kind of torture for him.

    Knowing that he created one is beyond even his comprehension.

    Discord has had enough. Now, he will change the rules of engagement. He will alter reality in ways unheard of. He will end all the harmony of not only Equestria, but of the galaxy and beyond. He will end it all.

    And he'll do so with One Last Game.

    Prior to Season 3.

    Cover art by me.

    First Published
    14th Aug 2012
    Last Modified
    3rd Feb 2013

    Comments ( 210 )

    #1 · Chapter 3 · 40w, 4d ago · 3 · ·
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    :applejackconfused:

    #2 · Chapter 3 · 40w, 3d ago · · 1 ·
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    This story is epic, what kind of crossovers will we see next? DC, Marvel, maybe something from another video game like Sly Cooper. Will we see any romance in this story? Will you pair any of the of the girl's with crossover characters?

    #3 · Chapter 3 · 40w, 3d ago · 1 · ·
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    >>1085871

    Let's see what I can answer without spoiling anything...

    Guarenteed crossovers are from anime, games, books, cartoons, and movie. A lot basically... While, yes, there will be some romance, it will NOT be between any of the crossover characters and ponies. Seriously, as much tolerance as I have for all kinds of romance... something about pairing humans and ponies is... odd.

    #4 · Chapter 1 · 40w, 3d ago · 1 · ·
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    Don't you hate it when you try to think of a good comment, but you can't because nothing comes to mind?  That happens to me.  A lot.

    #5 · Chapter 2 · 40w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Epic.

    #6 · Chapter 2 · 40w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Holy shit this is my new favourite story. it was epic beyond comprehension and I began literally spasming during the fight scenes because of the shear levels of epic. Seriously, Kratos in Equestria. Fuck.

    #7 · Chapter 3 · 40w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Kratos is going to be trouble again.

    #8 · Chapter 3 · 40w, 3d ago · 1 · 1 ·
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    Well, I'ma watch this very closely.

    #9 · Chapter 3 · 40w, 2d ago · 1 · ·
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    Link fighting Kratos in Equestria....with Discord summoning various monsters and warriors...god this is a epic crossover if I've ever seen one!

    Makes me wonder...whats going to come next?

    #10 · Chapter 3 · 40w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Didn't even read it yet, just looked at the cover and was like

    " Is that Link....And Batman? HOLY SH*T This Is Going To be Epic"

    #11 · Chapter 3 · 40w, 2d ago · 1 · ·
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    >>1093279

    So did you like it?

    >>1090151

    A lot. How's that?

    >>1087092

    Hooray!

    >>1086832

    Maaaaaaybe.:pinkiehappy:

    #12 · Chapter 3 · 40w, 1d ago · · 1 ·
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    >>1093279

    I see....

    One Night-fury, the god-dam Batman (Discord's screwed), Link, Kratos plus one assassin, presumably Altair

    ....

    ....

    Best fic ever....

    #13 · Chapter 4 · 40w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Hmm, Fawkes. Interesting choice, but a good one.

    AND GANDALF!!!! :twilightsmile::pinkiehappy::ajsmug::heart::yay:

    You sir are going into my favourites.

    #14 · Chapter 4 · 40w, 1d ago · 1 · ·
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    So Twilight summons Gandalf awesome choice. Who else will appear and will the mane six, Princesses, and Discord be the only ones to summon crossover characters or will some background characters play a part as well later on? Like these characters for example Lyra, Trixie, Gilda, Fancy Pants, or even the CMC.

    #15 · Chapter 4 · 40w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1094682

    It is really well made. Good job and cant wait for the next chapter.:twilightsmile:

    #16 · Chapter 4 · 40w, 1d ago · 1 · ·
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    >>1101483

    I don't want to spoil much, but I can say that there are PLENTY of more characters to come.

    The background ponies and CMC will DEFINITELY make appearances, maybe even connect with these mysterious warriors. :pinkiecrazy:

    >>1101525

    I'm glad you enjoyed it!

    >>1101405

    Yes, I thought Fawkes deserved some time in the spotlight. Bethesda spent SO much time building him, more than any other character in Fallout 3, and I thought using him over some OC Lone Wanderer was a better idea.

    And yes, Gandalf. Honestly, who else is even CLOSE to comparing to Celestia other than the wise cracking immortal wizard?

    #17 · Chapter 4 · 40w, 1d ago · · ·
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    *Looks at title pic again after reading story

    *Sees Riku standing on Discord's back, Way To The Dawn in hand

    THERE ARE NO WORDS FOR THE AMAZINGNESS THAT THIS IS

    #18 · Chapter 4 · 40w, 23h ago · · ·
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    You know i can think of two character's i hope will appear in this story. The first one is Captain Jack Sparrow it would be interesting to see how the crafty pirate would try to profit from this situation some how. The second one is Invader Zim if there was ever a character to play the wild card it would be him. Once again great story looking forward to seeing who will come to equestria and what side each character will choose.

    #19 · Chapter 4 · 40w, 8h ago · · ·
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    Am I the only one confused as to who in the world Vincent is?

    #20 · Chapter 4 · 40w, 8h ago · · ·
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    >>1105220

    When you say confused, do you mean you don't know who he is (which I doubt because I haven't named him yet), or that no one else has named him yet? If it's the latter, it's probably because everyone is so stocked for the GODDAMN Batman.

    BTW, brownie points for recognizing him.

    #21 · Chapter 5 · 39w, 5d ago · · ·
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    “So, Gandalf the Gary, do you have any questions?”

    I am assuming this was not intentional.

    Otherwise, keep up the awesome crossoverness!

    #22 · Chapter 5 · 39w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Samurai Jack man your choices keep getting more awesome. How will Jack react to what's going on and a enemy that may be as if not not more dangerous than Aku? Any chance of the portal restoring Jack's youth and making him as young as he is in the show? He's going to need every edge he can get for what's to come. Will Discord start affecting other worlds than Equestria? Will anyone back on the crossover characters worlds find out what's going on like the gods from Kratos world for example? Will the Changelings play a part in this story? I realize this story is meant to be serious but any chance of adding some comedy here and there?

    #23 · Chapter 5 · 39w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Well, Gandalf still has Glamdring, but does he still wield Narya, the ring of fire? And I'd love to see him take a mentor role to the ponies and to smoke some pipeweed.

    Also, I think I know who Rainbow will get from the portal. And which pony will get the dark knight? Keep on making awesome happen man. Your doing it. You're making it happen.

    #24 · Chapter 5 · 39w, 5d ago · · ·
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    I've read halfway and now I'm going to guess at involved characters.

    Kratos.

    Link. Both revealed.

    Batman.

    That kid from kingdom hearts. (Sora?)

    Toothless. (Or a similar looking dragon)

    The last one looks like a jumble of rags but at a guess... A horseman of the apocalypse?

    Probably not but whatever.

    #25 · Chapter 4 · 39w, 5d ago · 2 · ·
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    Gandalf killed a Balrog.

    Your shit is fucked.

    ...

    Wait.

    What if Discord summons the Balrog Gandalf killed?

    Balls.

    #26 · Chapter 5 · 39w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Luna's tricycle...

    Discord better be pullin' out some real badasses 'cause he doesn't stand a chance!

    Link, a Super Mutant, Gandalf the Grey and Samauri Jack?!

    He's doomed.

    #27 · Chapter 5 · 39w, 5d ago · · ·
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    for some reason i thought applejack was going to pull out john marston :/

    #28 · Chapter 5 · 39w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1115167

    No doubt there are some strong heros walking into Equestria (figuratively) and there are plenty more coming in (literally), but the big bad near omnipotent Discord isn't exactly going to be sending in the Cream Puff Man to take them out (probably...)

    #29 · Chapter 5 · 39w, 5d ago · · ·
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    A tank (Fawkes), a wizard/healer (Gandalf), a paladin (link) and now a rogue (Jack)

    Dude, best party ever, now to the dungeons, how i don't fav this yet?

    #30 · Chapter 5 · 39w, 5d ago · 1 · ·
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    >>1115824

    Just wait for the beast master, berserker, thief, assassin, spell sword, archer, captain, and of course, the God Damn Batman

    Care to guess who's who?

    #31 · Chapter 5 · 39w, 5d ago · 1 · ·
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    >>1115902

    batman is a class itself

    #32 · Chapter 5 · 39w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1115296

    He better be whippin' out some mean ass vilians and antiheroes 'cause there are plenty who deserve the spot light.

    Can't wait to see what comes.

    #33 · Chapter 5 · 39w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1117645

    I've got a few in mind...

    #34 · Chapter 5 · 39w, 5d ago · 1 · 1 ·
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    >>1114315

    Can't answer all of those questions without seriously ruining the plot, but I can answer a few.

    There will be comedy, yes, and I've given a few small punches at it with Gandalf this chapter, in his usual witty way, but other characters will have their own comedic moments. It's ponies man, there has to be comedy. Jack actually has some next chapter, so let me know what you think of it.

    Jack's youth is going to be restored, and the reason behind that is going to be revealed in later chapters. Do you really think the studious Twilight is NOT going to investigate the Tartarus out of all these new warriors?

    Oh, and even though it wasn't a question, I'll answer one. How many more characters are there going to be? Well... a lot more, but in terms of characters that the Elements summon, as in the rest of the this "chapter"... eight. Yes, eight. Try and guess them all!:yay:

    >>1114495

    Be sure, the characters will be using all the powers available to them. You'll have to keep an eye out for who pulls out the big guy, but we'll see how right you are with Dash.

    #35 · Chapter 6 · 39w, 2d ago · · ·
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    eve doing years that I dont see an episode of Samurai Jack, I could hear him clearly through your words, very good job :yay:

    the pun on the meaning of Jack, where do you get this stuff? is genius :rainbowlaugh:

    final picture is much d'awwww

    #36 · Chapter 6 · 39w, 2d ago · · ·
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    :rainbowkiss:

    #37 · Chapter 5 · 39w, 2d ago · · ·
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    AMAZING + MOAR :flutterrage:

    For whatever reason when I first saw 'Jack' I thought Applejack was getting Jack Sparrow and I was like FUCK YEAH

    We need the Batman.

    EDIT: ^^I see everyone else in the comments agrees.

    #38 · Chapter 6 · 39w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Hiccup and Toothless are Fluttershy's hero spirit?!?! What a twist!:rainbowderp: I was sure Toothless would be Rainbow Dash's summon. But they do have a connection with Fluttershy that I am unable to ignore. So good job surprising me.

    #39 · Chapter 6 · 39w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Great chapter this story has become one of my top favorites. Will we see any of the Heroes old enemies or allies in this story? Take Jack's world for example The Scotsman would be a interesting to see and i can't stop picturing a certain enemy of Jacks meeting and having a  literal DJ battle with Vinyl Scratch.

    #40 · Chapter 6 · 39w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>1135648

    hmm... I wonder:trollestia:

    #41 · Chapter 6 · 39w, 2d ago · · ·
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    you are the Wizard

    you deserve :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

    #42 · Chapter 6 · 39w, 5h ago · · ·
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    This whole thing is genius.

    Rainbow gets Batman.

    Thats my guess.

    Who'll Rarity snag?

    And Celestia?

    #43 · Chapter 6 · 39w, 3h ago · · ·
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    >>1151724

    Glad it's genius, I did worry it would be too slow.

    Hmm... maybe.

    If you can guess Rarity, I'd be seriously impressed.

    If you want a hint though, she's a character from one of the fics I said gave me information in that blog yesterday.

    #44 · Chapter 6 · 38w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I, um, just wanted to say... :yay: YAY! One thousand total views! I don't know how everypony else thinks of this achievement but I love it when I see a writer I follow get this many views on one story. Nice. :ajsmug:

    #46 · Chapter 4 · 38w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1105250

    You actually mention a 'Vincent' twice in this chapter.

    The keyblade in the cover art intrigues me.  Will RD pull out Riku despite him being a mean ol' betrayer in the first game?

    Also great story:rainbowkiss:

    #47 · Chapter 6 · 38w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1178256

    I did? :facehoof: Gotta fix that, thank you.

    Why does everyone keep forgetting about Celestia and Luna? Rainbow Dash's choice isn't obvious, but... what does Dash really want out of a pony? Like AJ?

    #48 · Chapter 7 · 38w, 3d ago · · ·
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    you guys just read these death scenes fast enough to know who's who
    burn

    I think it's quite a pleasant reading

    #49 · Chapter 7 · 38w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Good chapter i can't help but wonder if it will only be heroes that side with the ponies or will some villains decide to help them for redemtion or for their own reasons. Are you looking for ideas for characters to use in this story?

    #50 · Chapter 7 · 38w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1178907

    For heroes, unfortunately no.

    For villains, god yes!

    #51 · Chapter 7 · 38w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1178963

    I got a idea for two characters you could use as wild cards in this story Jack Sparrow and Invader Zim. Also for villain's you could use in this story how about Klarion from Young Justice, Davy Jones from Pirates of the Caribbean, Clockwerk and Neyla from Sly Cooper, Deidara from Naruto, Fawful from Mario, Azula from Avatar, Cyclonis and Dark Ace from Strom Hawks, Dark Dragon from American Dragon Jake long, Shendu and the Monkey King from Jackie Chan Adventures, Chase, Wuya, Hannibal Roy Bean from Xiaolin Showdown, Vlad from Danny Phantom,  Mandarin from Super Robot Monkey Team, Shen and Tai Lung from Kung Fu Panda, Syndrome from the Incredibles, Mr. Bun Bun and Jack O Lantern from Grim Adventures of Billy and Mandy, Professor Pericles from Scooby Doo Mystery Incorporated, Quickstrike and Waspinator from Beast Wars, and finally Demyx and Xigbar from Kingdom Hearts. That's all the ideas i have for now for characters you could use in the story please let me know what you think.

    Also for the record i'm not asking you to put all these characters in the story this is just a list villains that i think would be interesting to see in the story even if they just appear one time before their defeated for good but i do hope you decide to add Zim and Jack Sparrow in the story. If you do decide to add Zim don't forget to include Gir.

    #52 · Chapter 7 · 38w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>1178963

    I'm actually hoping that you would use V from V for Vendetta as one of Discord's choices. He's certainly chaotic enough and seeing Canterlot's buildings get destroyed with the 1812 overture in the background would be delicious. So tell me do you like music, Wizard of Words.

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=C8fI-dGWT74&feature=fvst

    #53 · Chapter 7 · 38w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Hmm... Perhaps David Xanatos from Gargoyles among the villains? Granted, he'd be liable to betray Discord, but that would just make things more interesting.

    #54 · Chapter 7 · 38w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>1180877

    >implying Discord would set himself up to be betrayed, or would be dumb enough to leave himself vulnerable/would even care if it betrayed him.

    >mfw

    #55 · Chapter 7 · 38w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>1182270

    That's why it's got so much potential to be interesting. Of course Xanatos would betray Discord, so Discord would likely take that into account and summon him anyways just for the fun of having someone to make ridiculously convoluted plots against. Plus, he'd be equally likely to cause trouble for the Mane Six, thereby making things even more confusing (i.e. entertaining for Discord).

    #56 · Chapter 7 · 38w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Well....This has been the single greatest story I have read on this website... ever. There's more on the way right?:pinkiecrazy: Right!???:raritydespair:

    Aru
    #57 · Chapter 7 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Ok imma watched in comments magical sentence "Kratos in Equestria". Holy fucking crap, i'm going to read the crap out of this story naow!

    #58 · Chapter 1 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Why wasn't this featured?  This story is awesome so far better than that 'rainbow dash and the ultimate showdown of ultimate destiny'

    #59 · Chapter 1 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    This is awesome looking.

    #60 · Chapter 7 · 38w, 12h ago · · ·
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    >>1182270>>1182899

    Honestly, the kind of villains I need are the powerful ones, like Sephiroth, Aku, Darth Vader.... I might be spoiling something....

    >>1183455

    Nope, I came this far just to end it.:trollestia:

    >>1187626

    Because I don't have a catchy title, cool cover art, a short description, enough watchers, but most importantly, LUCK!

    >>1189205

    I only hope it's also awesome reading.

    #62 · Chapter 7 · 38w, 2h ago · · ·
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    >>1135648

    I want the Sam-Moo-Rhai to show up... He was quite possibly the funniest character I saw. Next to the Scotsman, of course. :ajsmug:

    #63 · Chapter 7 · 38w, 9m ago · · ·
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    Posting before reading.

    Somehow after readig the comments and sruff I am reminded of the 80s or 90s(Dunno which one) Spiderman episode where he got sent by Madam Web to a different planet where she and other guy summoned most of known villains to be on the side of evil on the planet, time skipped and then had Spiderman make his own team of Heroes! Iron Man and Spiderman for the win!

    Edit: It was Spiderman The Animated Series from 1990s

    And now quote from X-man episode.

    "Power of Lightning, Strike again!"

    "Um, Power of Webshooters, get really sticky!"

    Aru
    #64 · Chapter 7 · 37w, 6d ago · · ·
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    I would like to see a little fail from Discord. What kind of? Well.... summoning Al Simmons(when he was "killed" by Cain, when he betrayed him and suck from Spawn all power to rule 9th circle of hell, or maybe when he sacrificed himself to heal his friend Terry from cancer?) who, I think is not going to cooperate with someone so similar to Malebolgia.

    But maybe I go read rest of the story, who know what else is there than Link and Kratos ^^

    Edit: Or pulling Logan(Wolverine) after his death after... dunno several hundred years of his life(summoned by ponies ofc). He would be pissed after this. After all he was tired of his life.

    Edit2: End....i read all chapters. I think that Rainbow should pull from portal... Peter Parker maybe? He's loyal, he's fast...

    #65 · Chapter 7 · 37w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1198545

    Well... let's just say that some of the crazies Discord tries to pull out aren't always as evil as he thinks them to be.

    Aru
    #66 · Chapter 7 · 37w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1200048 Well I'm still waiting for Kratos fury when he finally find out that he is nothing more like sentient ball to play with for Discord. Most likely even real evil being summoned by Discord can become his enemy. One way or another Equestria is pretty much bucked even if good guys are going to use their power.  Now I am really curious what Rainbow is going to pull because Rarity summoned quite badass woman from what i saw on youtube. Dash have so many loyal characters to "choose". Logan, Parker, Guts from Berserk, I would put bet for Al Simmons if not he's chaotic state and being basically a demon now.... I would like to see Discord summoning this fella, oh yeah. Like I said before, Spawn is going to be not really cooperative with someone like Discord... neither with Celestia (if you read comics this is not suprising. Spawn was been victim for both forces of chaos and "justice".)

    Edit: Ah and I must say. Really nice story. Epicness is going to be shooting from my monitor screen. Fav and like of course.

    #67 · Chapter 2 · 37w, 6d ago · · ·
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    O.K. I don't know if this is intentional or not but in this sentence, “Done! So what do you think? I’d say you look rather dazzling myself.” It may not have been the first time Applejack had to agree with Rarity, but should could count the occasions like apples in a basket. I don't think should could should be that way. :applejackconfused: Also if your wondering why this comment is so late it's 'cause I have writers block at the moment so I decided to reread the chapters. I do realize I'm not any sort of authority in grammar, but I'm not sure on this one. Let me know if that's wrong or not.

    *Edit: “My apologies Applejack, I must have used the wrong word,” Rarity spoke with a bitten lip. The apple farmer smiled in victory, in what she took as submission form the unicorn." I don't know here either, but I'm pretty sure you meant 'from' not 'form'. Like it would run "in what she took as a submission from the unicorn." Again though I'm not completely sure.

    #68 · Chapter 7 · 37w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1201249

    No, you're right, I just missed that.:twilightblush:

    #69 · Chapter 7 · 37w, 6d ago · · ·
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    I have a feeling that the moment Kratos finds out for real that Discord has been yanking his chain and manipulating him for his own purposes....it will be the worst personal decision of Discord's lengthy life. There is no more brutal or certain way to bring about your own grisly death than to betray Kratos's allegiance.

    >>1178963

    Villains, you say? Chaotic, as well as powerful... something ingrained in pop culture, yet cosmically fearsome and so chaotic to mortal minds that it can cause mass nightmares simply by being conscious...

    ...Cthulu.

    On a side note, I can't wait to see who Rainbow pulls out...I'm anticipating anything from Rambo (action-packed, but will throw himself into the fire to save those he's allied with) to Commander Shepard (whose entire three-game plot arc revolves around the loyalty he has to foster in his teammates) to Indiana Jones (because 20% cooler), but whoever it is, it's sure to be awesome. :rainbowlaugh:

    #70 · Chapter 7 · 37w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1201286 No biggy and if it helps make the story better I'll try and spot any other small, irrelevant errors. Though I doubt I'll come across many more. :ajsmug:

    #71 · Chapter 7 · 37w, 6d ago · 1 · ·
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    Also... HOLY FFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU... :pinkiegasp: the view counter went up over 500 more views in literally less than six days. Nice.:pinkiehappy:

    #72 · Chapter 2 · 37w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Well here is all the grammar and spelling error I spotted. Which considering the length of this tale, isn't very much. You and your editor did a good job if a chapter 24000+ words only has these few errors. Nice. :ajsmug:

    "The ret of the ponies followed close behind, with Luna only a pony’s length away from her sister." *rest

    Twilight, however, spoke quickly as a though crossed her mind. *thought

    “Discord is talented in his means to twist and corrupt, but it would take more time than he has to possible overpower the shielding we have built. *possibly

    His claw and claw beat against one another in way that spoke of nothing but pride. O.K. I'm a little confused on this one. Did you mean claw and paw or was he clacking two of his claws together in a mimicry fashion. I don't know, you'll need to tell me.

    How did you get outa gain anyways? *out again

    His face gleamed with pride as he catch was slowly drawn to the surface, covered in the same black intangible mist as the portal itself. *as his

    Their concern lay with the thing he had produced form it. *from

    If she asked it plainly, would she bet taken to the world, or would she get a riddle about it? *be

    Their gazes froze when the met his eyes. *they

    He twisted and twirled the blades in his hands before hunching over and sending the to the tile ground. *them

    Again these are the ones I spotted and I hope this helps. Reading slowly and taking time to enjoy a tale helps notice little things. Even if it is for the second time. :twilightsheepish:

    #73 · Chapter 7 · 37w, 4d ago · · ·
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    You want ideas for a villain? May I suggest either The Master from Dr. Who or perhaps Sephiroth, those would both be nice nasty villains... and The Master would be great for Gandalf/Twilight or such to square off against. Also, nice story... quite a few spelling and grammar errors, though... try to find a prereader, perhaps?

    #74 · Chapter 3 · 37w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Link turned his head only slightly to see a canary pegasus standing far away from him, but with both of her pink eyes locked on his. Their vision was shared for only a moment before she ducked behind the dark alicorn, hiding herself from his view.

    *Blue or a variant of blue, not pink. Her mane is pink.

    O.K. I noticed a few grammar and spelling errors, but this one bothered me the most because of the fact that you merely messed up a detail versus a grammar mistake. You don't make detail mistakes. Sorry for calling you out on it. If you would like I could go back and spot out the grammar and spelling errors I noticed. That's if you feel it necessary of course.

    #75 · Chapter 7 · 37w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>1222187

    Actually, yes I would really appreciate that!:pinkiehappy:

    #76 · Chapter 7 · 36w, 6d ago · 1 · ·
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    Shit.

    Crossovers. Crossovers EVERYWHERE!

    #77 · Chapter 7 · 36w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1240733

    Is that what these are called? Dang, I must have forgotten. :trixieshiftright:

    #78 · Chapter 7 · 36w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1240771

    MOAR!

    Like, say, Percy Jackson or something.

    Don't do Artemis Fowl.

    I'm doing Artemis Fowl... soon.

    Aru
    #79 · Chapter 8 · 36w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Good choice with Sonic I must say. Fast, loyal... yeah, good choice.

    Ah... and I would be happy to see in this story someone from anime/manga world too. Screw Spawn he is overpowered in my opinion. "Better" for Discord to pull out Gats from "Berserk". Gats always can die while using berserk armor. In this state he is nothing more than animal so such soul would be good for Discord to pull out from his portal. Perfect choice for one of guys who almost immediately are going to try to kill Discord or at least leave him and go in they own way.

    #80 · Chapter 8 · 36w, 3d ago · · ·
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    When do we get Riku?

    But you probably aren't going to answer that question...

    Is Riku on the good side?

    Do we even get to see Riku at all?

    #81 · Chapter 8 · 36w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1258406

    Trying to spoil as little as I can.

    Yes, Riku is in this. Yes, Riku is on the good side. No, you don't get to know when.:unsuresweetie:

    >>1258354

    Agreed that Spawn will not appear (For the Good guys), but I do have a mange character already (Teresa, this chapter), but there is another anime/manga character set to appear. I'm sure you'll know him when you see him.

    #82 · Chapter 8 · 36w, 3d ago · · ·
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    if you're thinking about another anime character you could use kenpachi from bleach because he's the textbook definition of chaos... or batshit crazy. oh by the way i gift thee a :moustache:

    #83 · Chapter 8 · 36w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Great chapter Sonic huh good choice i can see him and Dash becoming racing rivals. For villains if your going to have Riku appear why not have Vanitas brought back because not only is he a evil Keyblader he's the source of the Unversed if he's brought back they come back too so the heroes will have even more problems to deal with.

    #84 · Chapter 8 · 36w, 3d ago · · ·
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    .......... I saw that coming! Loved this! it was worth the wait!

    #85 · Chapter 8 · 36w, 3d ago · · ·
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    but what about celestia luna pulled link out what about celestia

    #86 · Chapter 8 · 36w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1258662

    Someone may or may not have given Riku away in a previous comment.  Though if you think about it, it's pretty easy to guess, unless Wizard changes it on us just to spite me.

    >>1259434

    Vanitas would be too easy, along with any other canon characters of the good guys.  Think it would be kind of stale if Ganon, Sauron, and Dr. Robotnik showed up, you can get that from any other story.  But what if Sonic had to go head to head with say....Sephiroth, or Fawkes going muscle to muscle with Bowser.

    Is it weird I don't want to reread this, in case I see errors I missed?  :twilightblush:  

    #87 · Chapter 8 · 36w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1259285

    But he's good. If anything he would be Chaotic - Good. Also kinda overpowered.

    #88 · Chapter 8 · 36w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1260032

    I wouldn't say good.  All he cares about if finding stronger and stronger people to fight.  Chaos could easily persuade him to start killing ponies.

    #89 · Chapter 8 · 36w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1259989

    Not really weird, I do that all the time, but Riku was kind of spoiled in comment two, also, he's on the cover...

    #90 · Chapter 8 · 36w, 3d ago · · ·
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    What I don't quite get is why no one explains that while man and men is shorthand uses for our species, the technical term is human. Just a small niggling that I don't quite get, otherwise I absolutely love this story. I kind of hope, though, that someone from the Gaang will show up, like Aang, or Sokka, possibly Katara, or Toph. Seriously, if Toph is in this story in anyway, I will love you forever, but you don't have to of course.

    #91 · Chapter 8 · 36w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I just finished watching all the episodes of Fairy Tail that have been released and Makarov Dreyar suits Celestia perfectly. Powerful,Leader,and both have a good heart. Although Makarov isn't dead.

    Edit: Or Mavis

    #93 · Chapter 8 · 36w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1260181 Yeah, but he would quickly figure out the single most powerful one of all would be Discord on his own. It would be hard for him to stay on the bad side for long, unless Discord made himself appear weak that is. :trixieshiftright:

    #94 · Chapter 8 · 36w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>1258662

    Thank you thank you thank you!

    Hope from the mouth of the author himself.

    #95 · Chapter 8 · 36w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Ah Sonic, that classic team up will never get old!

    Now as for Villians

    How about Nnoitra Gilga from Bleach? He is a chaotic bastard who would love to crush and kill anyone in his way. He would make a fine combatant for Teresa due to his skills and it would be interesting seeing his past when it comes to women fighting him (he has had some deep issues with that).

    >>1260181

    Kenpachi despite his hunger for battle isn't really the type that Discord would go for I believe. Sure he loves battle but he wouldn't kill just for the hell of it, he either goes for strong people (which means he would go for Discrod the moment he is summoned) or someone who would attack himand even then if the person is unable to fight anymore, then he stops (just look at what happened to Nnoitra, he only killed him because Nnoitra would not stop).

    #96 · Chapter 8 · 36w, 2d ago · · ·
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    can anyone else imagine what would happen if Jasper Batt Jr. and Travis Touchdown were somehow mixed up in this

    #97 · Chapter 8 · 36w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Do you think that if Sonic were exposed to Luna's magic, he'd become a Werehog like in Sonic Unleashed ?

    #98 · Chapter 8 · 34w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I feel Celestia should pull a disbeliever out.  Someone so deeply rooted in 'reality', that the concept of an afterlife, portals, or talking ponies is well, unnatural.

    #99 · Chapter 8 · 34w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1332568

    A good idea, but someone like that comes up later... oops

    Actually, think of what Celestia is to the ponies, more than just being powerful and benevolent. Now look at all the warriors currently gathered in the hall. Wait trait is missing? What trait can Celestia fill?

    >>1196458

    I've been staring at this for hours, and I still can't tell if it's a troll or not...

    #100 · Chapter 9 · 33w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Be happy guys, I finally introduced one of the most wanted characters... Just two more parts to this chapter... then we FINALLY begin next one :ajbemused:

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