This story is a sequel to Pinkie Pie Tries To Get Twilight Sparkle To Eat A Quesadilla
Reading the prequel is highly recommended. This story gets very random based off the first story, and the author's note is at the bottom of the story... So I figured I'd help y'all out and say that right here, right now.
It all begins with Rainbow Dash thinking she is an alicorn, and a lot of things happen.
Crossover tag because of Lolly Poppins representating Mary Poppins. Sorta. Take it as you want. I just don't want to break the rules.
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This didn't need an editor.
What it needs is to be marked complete.
wait. .
Right there! Add some of these to the ends of the sentence: "
And more " on the last line.
And now that's all I could find.
7189529 Thanks! ^^
7189529 What do you mean, more "?
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It should be:
"Actually... Never mind. I'll just... I'll just keep it for myself. Besides, I don't think anyone will actually read this."
Unless this isn't spoken.
Same for this line.
"Um... It's a story where Rainbow and Pinkie are summoned to a thousand year sentence on a star. I'd say the moon, but that's not your cutiemark."
7193170 Fluttershy is the narrator, so there wouldn't be quotation marks.
7193199 Umm, even when she's explaining to Twilight what she's writing?
I think that needs quotations.
7193203 Yeah.
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That one needs quotations.
This one confuses me. You say it's just Fluttershy narrating, but it looks like she's still talking to Twilight here.
Narrator or not, all and any spoken lines need quotations.
7193216 Ok. I just don't want to confuse them... This takes place apart from the story. Like, the whole entire story... She wrote. But I'll put quotations.
Hence why Spike would hear the narrator. But ok, I added them ^^
7193236 Ah, thought you'd bring up Spike. Unlike Fluttershy, you made it known that Spike heard the voice, hence why I didn't care that you didn't use quotations. But when Twilight is talking to Fluttershy here, regardless if it's outside of the story, it's still a conversation.
7193246 Oh, ok. Thanks ^^
Ah, another "Character hears the Narrator"-Story xD They allways turn out hilarious
Also, you and Paradox, get a room as well
You kind of turned the comment section into an English-lesson ^^
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Glad you enjoyed!
7194666 I only wonder how Flutter came to the idea of writing about a drunken Dashie... did something back in Cloudsdale happen we don´t know about?
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Oh Dashie...
Btw, if you like this "Character hears Narrator"-style, you should give "Twilight hears the Narrator" a read
One of the first stories in that... errr.. subgenre(?) I have ever read, and it was really funny ^^
7194794 I actually read it before
7194845 Emogak´s Reading of it is quite nice ^^
7194990 Cool
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7269777 XD
Dashie is best princess.