I kind of hate Bon-Bon in this story... I mean what the hell happened since she hates them with so much passion? You just don't hate people, in this case ponies, without a reason. I wanna know

The premise has the potential to be pretty awesome. I'll be keeping an eye on this one.

>>729709729709

Sadly real life people hate eachother without reason as well, just look at the worlds homophobes.

Same basic premise I'm guessing. Stupidity and Ignorance leads them to hate things they don't understand.

>>729709729709 Ya know, it's funny. People say that love has no rhyme or reason to it, but then people also say 'you don't just hate people'. From an objective standpoint, what exactly is the difference? They're both emotions. If Love doesn't need a reason, neither does hate.

Not that I'm saying homophobia is cool, especially at this level, but meh.

Anywho, I've noticed you're maintaining the story in a present-tense, which is an interesting choice. I'm curious as to the name of the chapters as well.

This premise is interesting; I'm definitely going to keep reading.

My only complaints are that the chapters are a little on the short side, and that BonBon is being a total bitch (but that's the entire point, of course).

>>729709729709

Most hate is without reason, or is based on scapegoating. Most homophobes have never been harmed by a homo, same with racists and blacks or misogynists and women. Most of the time, the bigots never really even know a single member of the group they hate. It's what makes these things tragedies, for all parties.

I said that this looked like it might be interesting, and I wasn't disappointed. I'll be keeping an eye out for updates on this one. You've got yourself a fav (I'd use an emoticon here but the school's laptop is being a bitch)

>>729840729840

The chapter titles are words from the Bible:

Katadikazete is "Judge not lest ye be judged", Aiteite is "Ask and ye shall receive".

The next chapter will be titled Lipsesthe: "Ask and ye shall receive."

(Highlighting 'shall receive' took quite a bit of research to find out exactly what the 'deponent' tense was.

For the benefit of others: the deponent is a passive verb that takes the form of an active. Ancient Greek can go buck itself up a tree.)

I love the idea of this!

Please longer chapters, you've 'hook line and sinked' me as it were.

I've always hated the overt breaking of the fourth wall people for some reason do with Pinkie Pie. It's never very funny and it really detracts from the story.

>>730028730028

Here's a series of mundane explanations: Pinkie Pie's just bullshitting about the montage, she got in by walking in through the unlocked front door, she's a Ponyhammer 40k fan and she caught Lyra's accent. She acts like an idiot breaking the fourth wall so that no one will believe she can actually do things.

This is a really interesting idea which I fear won't get the attention it deserves. There's a couple of points that go against it, such as it being in first person, the fact it portrays Bon-Bon as a homophobe and the short chapters but if people could get past that and give it a try I bet this story would develop quite nicely. I'll definitely keep reading and I'm saying that after just one chapter. Lyra's thought patterns are the best thing so far, she's so blinded by love.

Interesting story, can't wait to see where it goes!

Another good, albeit short, chapter. They're like little bite size snippets of a grander story, which isn't necessarily a bad thing. I can see why you've labeled it with a comedy tag, though I don't know if it's for the same reason I'm thinking. Bon-Bon's ignorance is just perfect, completely unaware that Lyra is lusting over her each time she gets close. One thing I think is a bit odd, however, is that Lyra just doesn't seem that phased about pretending she hates filly foolers along with Bon-Bon, she either loves her that much that it isn't an issue for her or you're missing a good plot point for internal conflict in Lyra's mind. Still looking good though, on to chapter 3!

retracts her hand from my mouth <- hand?

That was shorter than I expected, you've really pulled me into this. A bit more length to each chapter and I'd be completely happy with this fic. Not much happened in this for me to talk about but I do agree with Municiple Engines. I read your reply to their comment but it still comes across as fourth wall breaking and is getting pretty old; she doesn't even do it in the show THAT much but people still insist on doing it.

And now I'll give you a thumbs up and a favourite. Looking forwards to more.

>>730081730081

Fixed. Thank you.

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This has potential. I'll be keeping an eye on it

that song....

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but yeah, good story so far. I look forward to the next chapter

Stupid phone logged me out whilst writing the comment and I lost it. Oh well.

Another good chapter, good to see that we know have a reason as to why Bon-Bon's homophobic. Only thing you should watch out for is your occasional misuse of body part names. You had Bon Bon with her 'hand' on the door knob instead of her hoof.

Looks like I get first comment too, never had that before. (EDIT: or not... I always get beaten to it)

This Is going to be one wonderfully operated shitstorm. You sir, Now have a favorite

Hmm, Somehow I can just picture a Semi- Happy ending

Prediction: Lyra and Bon-Bon Get together, Bon-Bon Still Homophobic but she makes an exception with Lyra and Lyra Only.

Yep, The Shit is gonna hit the fan in this Fic Beautifully.

I bet Lyra enjoys that Bonbon has become so possessive of her.

Which is more insane:

The zealously obsessive paranoid bigot, or the mare crazy enough to fall in love with her?

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Ah my sweet silly bonbon. If you only knew....

I've Said it once and I'll say it again,

This Shitstorm will be Excellent Hmm yes, Quite

just relaxin on my bench watching bon-bon.

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Ahh a good old love story, that brought the crazy sauce. Loving every second of it. Keep it up.

FF

that tape is-

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she would know.   She filmed it......

fewmets

Dragon droppings, and you know the name for them. I am completely impressed. Also, this story is awesome.

Sweet Celestia, Bon-Bon is so deep in the closet that she's in Narnia!

I am looking forward to a totally gay sunshine day at the end of this. This is delightful!

I love this story... so... much...

Is it just me or does Lyra have a very severe submission fetish when being locked in by Bonbon sounds like a lovely idea to her?

This is Quite possibly the best shipping fic I have ever read, You sure know how to make a shitstorm beautiful.

“Average local wage reasonable, no union, high cronyism, nepotism; non-Pegasus socially isolated ponies tend to be unemployed except by government services. Blank-flanks particularly useful. Variable costs easily covered. Optimal profits high. Firm will succeed.”

MORDIN! GET OUT OF THE FIC!

>>743999743999

I am the very model of a Canterlotian businesspony,

I've information on labour and the firm and externalities,

I know all kinds of market and and I quote the stocks historical,

My diversified investments range from urban to agrarian,

I am the very model of a Canterlotian businesspony.

&c, &c

Excellent as always.

:pinkie gasp: Geeeeeeez, that's harsh for an ending...

You know those scenes where you've got the character, with a pleasant expression on their face, and then something happens, and their expression doesn't change right away, but the background suddenly cracks like a mirror? That's what I imagined just happening.

god damn the fucking cliff hangers AHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!! i going to go crazy till the next chapter come out!!!!! now i'm going to get Fluttershy to go crazy and kill you! just remember you did this, and that i put cliff hangers in my storys all of the time,

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Ooooh! I like where this is going!

More please! Like a hungry child, I want more!

Ah. Progress. Like a baby first few steps. Gotta learn to walk before you run. My point being, that I like how you're doing small steps for Bon Bon. Its realistic.

Keep it up.

First, I adore your vocabulary.

Second... I am just waiting impatiently for the next chapter. You... are a tease.

The way you write... it's just amazing.

>>744171744171

I'm Commander Shepard and this is my favorite Salarian in the Citadel.

>>746280746280 Damn you, I wanted to write something like that.

The Shitstorm has hit And it was Beautiful. Very good my friend

Very good indeed

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All being said and done, however, it’s likely that I’ll write an alternate ending in a separate story in the near future. For those for you who demand the Pinkie Pie prophecy be fulfilled.

The chapter titles were the real fun I had in composing these. For this story, I used relevant words from the Bible; in context, they are:

Katadikazete: Luke 6:37, καὶ μὴ καταδικάζετε καὶ οὐ: And you will not be judged.

Aiteite: John 16:24: ἕως ἄρτι οὐκ ᾐτήσατε οὐδὲν ἐν τῷ ὀνόματί μου· αἰτεῖτε καὶ λήμψεσθε, ἵνα ἡ χαρὰ ὑμῶν ᾖ πεπληρωμένη: Hitherto have ye asked nothing in my name: ask, and ye shall receive, that your joy may be full.

Lipsesthe: John 16:24: ἕως ἄρτι οὐκ ᾐτήσατε οὐδὲν ἐν τῷ ὀνόματί μου· αἰτεῖτε καὶ λήμψεσθε, ἵνα ἡ χαρὰ ὑμῶν ᾖ πεπληρωμένη: Hitherto have ye asked nothing in my name: ask, and ye shall receive, that your joy may be full.

Plerosai: Matthew 5:17: Μὴ νομίσητε ὅτι ἦλθον καταλῦσαι τὸν νόμον ἢ τοὺς προφήτας· οὐκ ἦλθον καταλῦσαι ἀλλὰ πληρῶσαι: Think not that I am come to destroy the law, or the prophets: I have come not to destroy, but to fulfil.

Phylakes: Acts 12:6: ὅτε δὲ ἤμελλεν προαγαγεῖν αὐτὸν ὁ Ἡρῴδης, τῇ νυκτὶ ἐκείνῃ ἦν ὁ Πέτρος κοιμώμενος μεταξὺ δύο στρατιωτῶν δεδεμένος ἁλύσεσιν δυσίν, φύλακές τε πρὸ τῆς θύρας ἐτήρουν τὴν φυλακήν: And when Herod would have brought him forth, the same night Peter was sleeping between two soldiers, bound with two chains: and the keepers before the door kept the prison.

Esphalisanto: Matthew 27:66: οἱ δὲ πορευθέντες ἠσφαλίσαντο τὸν τάφον, σφραγίσαντες τὸν λίθον μετὰ τῆς κουστωδίας: So they went, and made sure the tomb, sealing the stone, and setting up a watch.

Eleutherosei: John 8:32: καὶ γνώσεσθε τὴν ἀλήθειαν, καὶ ἡ ἀλήθεια ἐλευθερώσει ὑμᾶς: And ye shall know the truth, and ye, the truth will set free.

Anastantes: Acts 23:9: ἐγένετο δὲ κραυγὴ μεγάλη, καὶ ἀναστάντες οἱ γραμματεῖς τοῦ μέρους τῶν Φαρισαίων διεμάχοντο λέγοντες· Οὐδὲν κακὸν εὑρίσκομεν ἐν τῷ ἀνθρώπῳ τούτῳ· εἰ δὲ πνεῦμα ἐλάλησεν αὐτῷ ἢ ἄγγελος, μὴ θεομαχῶμεν: And there was moreover a great clamour; and the scribes on the part of the Pharisees, having arisen, were striving, saying, 'No evil do we find in this man; and if a spirit spoke to him, or an angel, we may not fight against God.

The final sharing of words is translateable as 'I love you like a friend/and I wish you'd love me like a lover'.

I hope you've enjoyed this story as much as I've enjoyed writing it.

I would have loved for BonBon to return Lyra's feelings, but I guess that was a bit of an unrealistic expectation. Either way, the story was interesting and well written. Hope to see more awesome stories from you in the future.

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how could you end it like that

I don't like the ending. but I can respect it.

A wonderful and unique ending. Different from any other ship I have read, but no less enjoyable for it. Slightly refreshing. I hope you make a sequel.

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... THESE ARE MY CRIES OF SADNESS! THEY SOUND SIMALER TO MY CRIES OF ANGER!

AHGHGAGJAGHAFHAGHATGFOEARGAFDIJ!

That is how I feel at the end of this.

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Great story, by the way!

While seeing them together would be nice, honestly, the way you did it is probably the best way to end it.  Its great that Bon-Bon got over her homophobia (and paranoia) and that she and Lyra are still great friends.  The fact that after all that Bon-Bon is still heterosexual is the best ending (and despite all the terrible stories) just because someone of a different orientation falls for you means you automatically change your own preferences.

That was amazing.

This was well done, and the ending works on many levels. We got our tolerance, if not embracing, and we got our love, agape, if not eros. And we've got the bittersweet misery of perpetually unrequited love whilst staying forever with the object of that love. Kind of a soft hell, really. Hell with pillows. That is being stuck forever with the object of unrequited love. Hell with pillows. It's a really good story, really clever, and a powerful ending, really. I just don't like it.

My problem is that it is too realistic. Unrequited love is... one of the damnable problems with the inferior, broken, entropic mess that is our real-life universe. It's Another Of God's Mistakes. It sucks ass, just like growing old, the construction of the human knee, and the Unimaginable Horror Of Incurable Suffering. It's too real-world!

Which is why I am waiting for a proper, fantasy ending, a nice soft, comfortable alternate happily-ever-after ending that fits a magical universe run by two truly benevolent goddesses. Instead of a cold, meaningless, mechanical universe of existential horror and... unrequited love.

Or worse, a universe run by a psychopathic, jealous god who deliberately created the possibility of all those awful, bad things. Wow, that would be beyond sick, wouldn't it? Damn. Monster god. All the theodicy in the world can't cover for that crap.

So bring on the happy fantasy ending to warm my sad little life. Please.

>>751526751526

You make a compelling argument for me to write a 'good' ending.

Allow me to present my concordance with your appeal.

I originally conceived of this chapter's title as 'Mia Sarx' (from Mark 10:8: καὶ ἔσονται οἱ δύο εἰς σάρκα μίαν, ὥστε οὐκέτι εἰσὶν δύο ἀλλὰ μία σάρξ: And the two shall be for one, so that they will no longer be two, but one flesh). 'Allocatastrophe' is a quick-and-dirty coinage: different-ending. The final exchange is now translateable as "I love you like a friend/and I wish you'd love me like a lover/but I do."

If anyone who knows Ancient Greek's around, I'd appreciate any corrections of grammar.

Excellent Story, even if the canon ending is as bittersweet as a whole chapter of 'Background Pony'. Not that that's a bad thing, but it leaves people horribly depressed...

Still, this story deserves a lot more likes in my opinion. It's certainly different and well thought out. And the alternate ending makes up for my sadness.

4.5/5

Thank you so much for this! You are a very intelligent writer, and you have written a fine work, and both endings have their value.

But I have to say, in my heart, this ending leaves me with a smile within, and gladdens me, and sweetens my dreams. That is always a gift, that which brings joy, and you have done just that, and for that I thank you.

I will be most definitely be watching your work in the future.

>>751620751620

While this is the ending everyone wants, you gave the fans what they wanted. You never do that. It was realist, it was bittersweet and it was heartfelt. The old ending was perfect in it's imperfection, thats what made it good. I'm not saying this ending was bad, it was good and very well written but it was what they wanted.

You sold out, now while this isn't as bad because this is a fandom, you still sold out. I'm not judging because this is your story and you wrote it but still sold out.

Was there a better way you could of gone with both ending, yes. You could of had, the 'I don't know how I feel' speech. Sweet while still being realistic. But still it was good, both were. I just feel you sold out. But still this is yours and this comment is simply my opinion.

>>751681751681

Personally, I originally intended that there be two endings; one named 'Dyo Sarka' and and one named 'Mia Sarx'. As it is, Chatoyance's comment only got me off my lazy arse.

That being said, I respect your opinion. It is a much better story as a bittersweet tale; the allocatastrophe isn't meant to be taken seriously in any sense. It's written purely as feel-good drivel, drivel which I compiled in like thirty minutes. As much as I like to think that I have artistic integrity, I still owe fans this bit of drivel, because I'm not a goddamned dominatrix and they're not bloody masochists. It is important to assess the reasons that exist for writing.

I write to make people enjoy reading. Some people get their jollies being happy, and some people get their jollies following a cohesive, well-written plot. I'm not going to judge either. It is not my place. So I write, and I write not only for myself but for them. I prefer the original ending, of course, but I'm not going to judge someone who just wants a fuzzy feeling in his or her chest.

Think of it as a fanfic of a fanfic, really. I don't consider the allocatastrophe to be a legitimate continuation of the story.

Monopsonies are so much fun.

That wasn't bad. Everyone seems to have already said what I wanted to say. I do fall into the camp which says the old ending is better.

The main reason I liked the old ending was because It was different. When you read these kind of stories they almost all end the exact same way. THis was the first attempt I ever saw that ended differently. So good job with that.

>>752251752251

To clarify: I'd prefer it not to be thought of as the 'old' ending as much as it is the 'real' ending. The allocatastrophe is meant solely to be a meaningless clump of mushy words.

Yes, Both endings had a very different feel, I for one prefer anastantes. And the way you approached the feelings side of shipping instead of the physical.

You sir Are a genius

... The thing about this is I actually prefer Anastantes, mainly because it is realistic. It's sad, yes. I try to stay away from sad. But it's a kind of happy sad. Besides, you can't have the words "Behind those eyes I saw a world break apart" and then in the alternate ending have her be okay with it one paragraph later.

That's not to say I don't like this chapter. I still like it, just not as much as Anastantes.

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bon-bon, srsly?

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my reaction to the tape.

>>752705752705

I hate it, personally. It's only for if you 'dislike' the proper ending for some reason.

>>754286754286 Well, I always loved happy endings, no matter how cheesy.

Talking about cheese, I just ate manicotti. It has cheese. And it's good. For some reason I am really hyper right now. I have no idea why.

Yay good fic was good!

The "real/sad" ending is my favorite one even though I usually love sappy stuff, just fits the story better.

Even then the original "sad" ending really isn't sad, they stayed as friends and maybe BonBon might move away from her homophobic tedencies.

Sequel with Bon Bons reactions to Lyra getting her first marefriend! (tries in vain to put ideas in Amit's head)

>>729709729709

Most homophobes turn out to be closeted gays.

This is ripe for lulz.

I'll finish this later.

*smiles* My compliments Amit.

Applause is all I can give.

"On the other hoof, so was Buckhoof, and I still play his symphonies."

This has got to be a reference to some human composer, but I can't figure out which one.  Bruckner, maybe?

Hmmm... This was a decent read for sure. It wasn't without its pretentious moments, but i think we're allowed a little self indulgence from time to time. Especially with a hilariously sappily in love Lyra.

I think the original ending was best, but you know that. You only made it for somepony else. Of course, lets not kid ourselves, the original is a "bad" ending. I know how painful it is to be in love with another man, to work out with him... To spend enough time with him to admire him for the beautiful flamboyant personality he is. And know that he is in fact very much heterosexual. I'd give him compliments now and then and he'd react akwardly. It's pretty tragic, and i could never be friends with him. As horrible as it is, it;s a soberign fact of life the gay community has to face. We are a minority, and no matter how much love we have for somepony, they are very likely to be completely unobtainable.

...I'm starting to think lyra would love bon bon even if she was dipped in glue and then dunked in garbage

Loving the story so far btw

I wish I knew what all the funny words meant.

>>775696775696

Beethoven, but it can be anyone else; I haven't a clue about composers and their insanity.

>>775760775760

The comment I've made on Anastantes explains most of the funny words.

Not sure who's crazier

Bonbon for being increasingly more insane by the hour

Lyra for going along with all this

Pinkie....for being pinkie

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Good ending I liked the 1st one more though but still good story

I loved your Anastantes ending bro. Better than the "Feel Good" one fo sure.

>>751620751620

The original ending just makes less sense. I mean, Bon-Bon is clearly displaying all the common characteristics of a closeted gay desperate to repress their sexuality.

Anyone else feel like punching Bob-Bon?

I usually don't even aknowledge that many of these shippings are lesbian. It doesn't bother me at all and sometimes it's really cute. I love how Lyra isn't really saddened and that they're still great friends.

>>751681751681

Calling the author a sell-out... sounds like you're one of those hipsters who believe fans should be forced to not gain the level of enjoyment they were expecting and that the author is quite capable to provide. You're being quite rude here, and might want to re-think that.

And you have nothing to complain about anyway... there's two endings, if you don't like one... only read the other. Your complaints are completely unnecessary and aren't constructive in any way to helping the author, just attempting to sound degrading.

This is wonderfully romantic without the dirty clop. This short chapter is a great way to put a smile on someone's face.

>>776154776154

Ouï-dire besides, not all homophobes are homosexual. Homophobia is an attitude, not any indicator of sexuality. Her 'homophobia' is a generalisation of blame, an attempt to scapegoat, an outright fear of abandonment because of her heterosexuality - in the liberal fascism of Equestrian society, there is simply no impetus for that sort of repression.

Maybe if this story was about Applejack.

>>776346776346

I'm a hipstre? What in the world is a hipster? Any way, I find your comment degrading. I did like the ending, it was just fan service. Blatant fan service, now theres nothing wrong with that, I was just saying what it was. I've always believed that a story should be what you want not what the fans want. Now the author did say there was two endings, that they had planned. I didn't know this, I commented before they explained this. Thus how was I to know.

Now constructive criticism comes in many forms, and I believe that my comment was, at least, some what constructive.

And I was just pointing something I thought I saw, no need to take it personally.

Remember we're supposed to respect others opinions wether we like them or not.

Fillyfooler, out.  

Lovin' the story so far, though I'm not a big fan of Pinkies crazy fourth wall breaking all the time.

I'm with Twilight on her viewpoint, but I won't get political here.  Also, her tail tied to her mane, is that to show what I think it shows?  And if I'm not mistaken, did what she say in french translate to something like: In four house I want to read and write Celestia her letter/  Is that right?  If so, it should be veux, not peux.  That's not even a real word (I think).  I could be wrong though.

I feel like I've just been trolled. At the same time, this was a pretty satisfying ending. It was also a pretty realistic ending, what with people in real life being homosexual only about 20% (keep in mind this is a study from 200-freaking-6 and only accounted for homosexual feelings)

Great fic, can't wait to see what you do next. Kinda want to see a continuation of this (though please don't cop out at us and have Bon Bon turn out to be in the closet. Then this epilogue would've been for nothing)

Five out of five.

>>776509776509

>dans quatre heure, moi je peux lire, la jument céleste pourra avoir sa lettre

>...in four hours I can read. The celestial mare will be able to have her letter.

Peux is the present first-person of pouvoir; I use the disjunctive for emphasis.

Given that it's a snowclone of an actual French song, (la Jument de Michao, which admittedly does have a problem with the construction c'est dans) I really doubt that it has an error; nonetheless, I've mended the construction to seem a little less awkward:

>je m'en lirai

Thank you for bringing that to my attention.

>>743999743999  I'm glad I'm not the only person who thought that.

>>776427776427

Patronizing and hypocritical, too. I'm saying, regardless of what you thought you were doing or intention, that your words -easily- come across as being quite rude and insulting. Respecting someone's opinion does not mean suffering those who would do wrong by their words. All you had to do was recognize that the unnecessary insults in your post were not called for. An apology would be nice, I'm sure no author likes to hear "You're a sell-out." without good reason. The ONLY reason you supplied was your -personal preference- which is not a good reason in the least bit.

So bon-bon loves lyra, but is too bigoted to accept that fact... and lyra just kind of goes "d'awwww..."