Katadikazete
I'm sitting on the bench, looking at all the ponies playing in the park. Smiling, laughing. Movement, everywhere. I fiddle with my lyre a bit, imagining little appendages plucking through the strings as I play gently. Practice, nothing conscious, as I survey the ongoings.
I see a sight that makes me pause. Pinkie Pie and Rainbow Dash, two of the Elements of Harmony—harmonising.
“You're the best marefriend ever,” the pink-maned Earth pony says, her voice carrying over to me as they walk alongside each other, as she nuzzles her neck.
The cyan pegasus looks away, and the red against her cheek intensifies. “Not here, Pinkie,” she says, but she doesn't make a move to push her away. “Everyone can hear us.” I try to conceal my look by closing my eyes slightly so that I can only barely see them, but I don't seem to have alerted them to my gaze.
“Ugh.”
That voice. Bon-Bon.
“Oh, hey, Lyra. Didn't see you there.”
That beatific voice. I open my eyes up and turn to look at her, see the pink streak running through that beautiful indigo mane. “Bon-Bon! Aren't you supposed to be tending to the shop?”
“I took a day off.” She looks over to the two, sitting down alongside me. She's nice enough to avoid mentioning my idiosyncrasies—in favour of highlighting others'. I like to think that she does it out of love; there is, however, a large problem with that theory.
“Look at those two filly-foolers, walking around in public like that.” She turns her muzzle up in disgust. “To think that they're two of the Elements of Harmony. Isn't it just gross? I don't know how Celestia stands it. And in front of the foals!” She highlights the various foals about the place with her hoof, none of which are really paying much attention to the couple.
Quod erat demonstrandum. I smile nervously, as I always do whenever the topic is brought up. “Uh, yeah! Yeah. Bunch of filly-foolers.” I try to match her vitriol, keeping my voice down. No one else seems to be noticing the two mares as they go about; Pinkie Pie is hopping around Rainbow Dash, saying some inane thing or another.
“Come on, Lyra,” she says, tugging me from my seating position and pulling me along with her forehoof wrapped around mine—the contact is exquisite—as we go off back towards the town. “They're spoiling my day off.” I don't resist; her fur rubs gently on mine, and I shudder as I smell her conveniently close mane.
I suppose it's silly, really, to pine for her; we've been staying with each other for years, now, but I still cannot stop and think for myself about her rationally for more than a few seconds before I'm overcome by the thought of that soft fur, that angelic voice—
“Thank Celestia we're not like that, huh, Lyra?”
—that angelic voice, her wonderful, kind personality—
“I mean, if I were like that, I'd totally just kill myself.”
—Celestia damn it, I love her nonetheless for reasons I could never possibly explain. So I nod absentmindedly, soaking in her scent. She speaks again.
“I knew you'd agree with me. You're like, the best friend ever. Everyone else in this town acts like there's nothing wrong with it. Like it's normal or something. Ugh.”
She smells particularly good today.
Like sweets.
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I love the idea of this!
Please longer chapters, you've 'hook line and sinked' me as it were.
This is a really interesting idea which I fear won't get the attention it deserves. There's a couple of points that go against it, such as it being in first person, the fact it portrays Bon-Bon as a homophobe and the short chapters but if people could get past that and give it a try I bet this story would develop quite nicely. I'll definitely keep reading and I'm saying that after just one chapter. Lyra's thought patterns are the best thing so far, she's so blinded by love.
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This has potential. I'll be keeping an eye on it
This Is going to be one wonderfully operated shitstorm. You sir, Now have a favorite
Ooooh! I like where this is going!
Was going to read, but then PinkieDash.
777270 What's wrong with PinkieDash?
Well executed first person present tense?
Color me surprised.
777475 not sure about MyEternalReward, but I don't like it because they are extreme: either very alike in some areas and completely different (or incompatible) in others. For instance, they both love fun (specifically pranking), but in the cannon show Pinkie's randomness and nonstop talking gets on her nerves.
I perfer TwiDash, I have reasons but I honestly think it is my subconsious trying to have me with RD because I am like Twilight, but without the organizational skills.
Here's a little something for reading my overly long random comment: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=njos57IJf-0
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Mainly it's the fact that it's one of the most common ships ever, and that I just don't care for RD. Also, the pairing just doesn't make sense. I understand that Pinkie and RD did pranks in one episode, but they're always made out to be the best of friends and are ALWAYS together in fanfics, which is pretty rash. And since RD has been shipped with every character on the show before and is everyone's "soulmate", I just don't understand why PinkieDash is so common.
779069 To each their own, I guess.
It's funny, but this could almost have stood on it's own! I'm glad it didn't, though. I definitely want to see where it leads. But did you write this originally intending it to be a single piece?
Wow Bon Bon, lay off the haterade
now i have ta see how this all plays out 
"all the people playing in "
PEOPLE? LOLWUT
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>According to the "naturalist" epistemological tradition, from Descartes through Locke and Hume, the term may designate any human (or non-human) agent which: (1) possesses continuous consciousness over time; and (2) who is therefore capable of framing representations about the world, formulating plans and acting on them.
730691 ditto
Damn! This will be a great story, I know it. A bunch of other people think so, lol.
The very first line says 'looking at all the people'. If this is intentional, then I apologize for the disturbance, but I do believe that you meant 'ponies'.
"I'm sitting on the bench alongside Bon-Bon, looking at all the people playing in the park. "
Mistake in continuity. Also, ponies, not people! BIggest! Mistake! EVAR!
XD
Seriously though, mistake in continuity. Later on, Bon-Bon appears like she wasn't there before.
777270 Yeah that was my exact response.
I'm neutral/slightly towards PinkieDash, as well as TwiDash. Heck, Rainbow Dash ships in general.
The only pairings that I support 100% are Trixie/Blueblood (yeah, I know it's crack-tastic), Rarity/Applejack, and Vinyl/Octavia.
And maybe pansexual Braeburn. I really should start reading Aaaaaarientation.
While was this concept never explored? Its time for AWESOMENESS!!
Have two Trixies while you're at it:
Lyra, Y U NO see Bonbon's prejudice?
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Lyra's sitting on a park bench, eyeing fillies with neutral intent.
Well, this is something that I must see through. Why don't people like first person? I LOVE it...
Also, 917384 This.
This'll end well, I'm sure.
Or not.
Hell with it, I don't really care how it ends up, I want to see how it gets there.
Also, dat first person present tense.
Religiously, I don't believe in personally being homosexual, but my family and I have plenty of good friends who are gay. I get that it's two of the same gender, but aside from that they are still normal people (or ponies) and the relationship isn't that much different from a heterosexual relationship. I just cannot STAND homophobes sometimes...
https://tjpones.tumblr.com/image/160647117642
This immediately came to mind
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HAHAHAHAHHAHAHHAHAHHHHAAH oh my God that's fucking hilarious.