I had this idea, but I quickly discounted it as the worst idea ever. Fortunately, you haven't screwed it up too badly yet.

Also Firsts.

I kind of like how it's Fluttershy that falls for the Dalek's act like how Rose did in that one episode... but the writing could use some work, particularly the prose. Try fleshing it out some more to suck the reader in.

Given my last comment, I'm ashamed to say that it your story isn't nearly as bad as I had imagined. Pinkie's dialogue made up for the plot.

daleks d a l e k s

Might I ask what era of the Daleks are you using?

Hmmm. Looks good. I'll follow this story. Nice. You seem to have quite a few correctional comments here, telling how you messed up rather than how good it is. It's good.

[wants to help]

>>726745726745

Time War era

>>728121728121

What have the Mane 6 ever done to you?

Unless of course this is some type of parody Fanfic of the Daleks....

>>727005727005

"Your suggested changes have been helpful to the Dalek's.  They will be implemented immediately"

Dalek Zek

I'm glad that jaked122 directed me to this

Man, I love this story. Loving and tolerating the crap out of the Dalek is exactly what was needed.

Also I like the men in black reference. Good going so far, don't let any part of the story demand too much attention at once.

daleks don't usally have emotions and wouldn't plead for help but when they do they do it like this.

>>727562727562

Thank you

>>727562727562

Me too

Pretty good story you got going here, interested to see where this is going!

NECESSARY CHANGES IN FORMAT HAVE BEEN MADE.  CONTINUE AS PLANNED.

Good chapter.  I wonder what will happen when the Dalek wakes up to find that his armour has been painted pink.

THIS STORY HAS MAINTAINED A SUPERIOR LEVEL OF QUALITY.

Another good chapter.  I had to laugh when I thought of Daleks in training school.  Now we know that Dalek Zek has got something to prove and will stop at nothing to achieve his goals.

I feel bad for Zek, just a try-hard divergent, not that I have a problem with divergents.

>>734461734461

...wasn't going to do it, but just for you...

LOL'ED

Some of the Dalek speech isn't very Dalek-y

But then again it may be part of the disguise

“Well what’s the problem then?” - "THEN WHAT IS THE PROBLEM" or at least get rid of the contraction

“Ah, I see.  ..." - Useless sentence baggage designed for inferior social constructs such as politeness, though again this may be part of disguise

I typed this out in a hurry before work so I'm probably just stupid

MY ATTENTION IS SUSTAINED, HUMAN SUPERSTITIOUS CONSTRUCT

Once again, another great chapter.

I was worried when you mentioned the elements of harmony, they have the capacity to destroy any plot that is working in a certain way, fortunately, you did not nuke your plot with them. (the generosity force field is a nice touch by the way)

DALEK ZEK DISPLAYS COMMENDABLE INGENUITY.  THESE PRIMITIVE LIFE FORMS DO NOT SUSPECT HIS TRUE INTENTIONS.  CONTINUE WITH YOUR PLAN.

Once again, good chapter.  Some may say that the Dalek is OOC, but he is trying to trick the ponies.  After all...

"Deceit is second nature to Daleks.  You haven't got an honest bone in your body.  You haven't got a... bone in your body."

And thank you for using my idea of painting Zek's armour.  Cannot wait to see his reaction.

I don't know if this has been mentioned, but unless Dalek Zek is a member of the cult of scaaro then he wouldn't have a name.

>>746247746247

Uhhhhhhhh i'm gonna have to think of something clever to explain the name.

the daleks don't have names and dalek mutants are grown from genetic material of radiated kaled flesh then shoved into a cramped polycarbonide casing given a unit number and rank and then deployed into battle to exterminate enslave and opress. but other than that it's great story, but the thought of a dalek sneaking around and eavesdropping made me laugh

THAT SON OF A B*TCH!! WHERE IS DA DOCTOR?!!!

"Actually we knew you were evil, so both were fakes!"

I was expecting Zek to say "Daleks have no concept of elegance" out loud.

Then Rarity could say "That is obvious."

Quite amusing, though I did notice spelling errors.

"His self" in the beginning should be "himself."

"Devros" should be "Davros."

"Armer" should be "armor."

"On Coming" should be "Oncoming."

Good job, cannot wait for more.

spelling is issue

>>795824795824

Thanks for the help with spelling.  I'm slightly dyslexic and this was written on an iPhone.

LOL

Dun Dun Dunnnn!  Good job, Zek!  The only way to ensure victory is to make sure the rules suit you.

I can't wait till when the elements of harmony don't care about the Daleks.

>>797415797415

I'm not sure what you mean

Pageing the Doctor. Pageing the Doctor. The Doctor to the E Wing please Dalaks on the loose. (Five Minutes of pageing later) Where in the F@CKING HELL IS THE DOCTOR?!

>>797480797480

shhhhhhhh your right, but i have to EXTERMINATE your comment to avoid spoilers.  EXTERMINATE!

spoiler: Next chapter.

Fluttershy is DYING to meet Zek.

Oh shit

and thats what a sucker is for

Please note that this will not be a clop fic, because that would be gross and this is a kids story.   Also I don't think this kind of pairing has been done before.

And nopony suspects a thing.

WHERE IS THE DOCTOR?!?!

>>805312805312

will be explained (hopefully) tomorrow.

keep going. man its good

The doctor will destroy the daleks

Awesome dey awesomeness.

> “Um… I think I know something will shock her said Fluttershy.”

Whoops, better move that ending quote

> “She’s gone mad!” Yelled Applejack Pinkie Pie finds the bottle and drinks of it, and then pours the rest on his head.

Sigh. Let's see... Period after Applejack. Aaaaand either Pinkie is referred to as a he, or you need to say whose head the bottle was poured on.

This chapter made me giggle

Drums. Drums everywhere

Tap tap tap tap.  Tap tap tap tap.

>>811884811884

Thank you, I missed those.

Oh the poor dalek. Nothing in the known universe can explain pinkie pie.

>>812416812416

make it stop! http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3YnQdBD2y64

-Pinkie Pie

Pro.Y

>>814288814288

I'm not sure what that means.

>>814789814789 Watch DW modern series 3 and you will

>>815672815672

for some reason i can't read what you put down on this comment.  However your profile picture scares me.

Zek's sensors indicated that this pony was adorable...  I mean sensors indicated that this pony was weak and defenseless.  

Ha! I knew that adorable was equivalent to being weak!

jk... Either way, I'm glad that you've managed to continue the story.

Fluttershy and Dalek shipping? Another great accomplishment.

As far as I am concerned, Pinkie Pie is now River Song

>>816705816705 I figured she's the Master. Cuz the drums and the title of the chapter.

Ah, Spongebob.  One of the greatest cartoons ever made.  I heartily approve of this reference.

I was worried for a second when you ripped out parts of spongebob, but I see that you've put them to good use; well having a Dalek sing is a decent reason... Anyway, good job on the chapter, I'm looking forward to more.

“F is for friends who do stuff together

U is for you and me

N is for anywhere and anytime at all

Down here in the land of ponies.”

Image: 216.JPEG

As usual, good chapter.  Hilarious to see Derpy giving a Dalek an inspiring speech, even if it did kinda backfire.

And now we'll never know how Daleks eat.

I AM A DIVERGENT AND I WILL SUCCEED!

I love you ghosty.

> "...HAVE TO SHOW THEM!  Suddenly Derpy was giving...

Missing a quotation mark

IT ALMOST BRINGS ME GREAT JOY TO FIND THESE MISTAKES

LIKE A SCAVENGER HUNT

Also good chapter

>>833158833158

I love you too... no homo

Guys I need some questions for Zek and Pinkie Pie to answer next chapter.  

Here is a question.

How ponies can a Dalek EXTERMINATE!?

Well that explains her absurd amount of knowledge that most would take for granted. Behold The Jester!!! That would be a perfect time lord name for her.

>>840176840176

It's a known Time Lord.  For hints look at chapter 10 and all the songs.  (besides the fun song) although the jester is a good name. I'll have to save that one.

>>840194840194 You sly dog you. But seriously, making him pinkie pie, it's like making The Professor rainbow dash, applejack, or big mac. It just don't seem right.

i watched every dalek episode except one enemy of the daleks because it lost in Time and space

>>840669840669

i haven't seen all the dalek episodes, but i have I've seen all 1-4 doctor episodes that where not lost.  And i've seen all of 8-11.  Still have't seen 5-7 though.  

In this universe the order of the doctors goes like this.   8th doctor>????>Doctor Whooves>9th>David Tennant>Matt Smith

Is Pinkie Pie The M#####?

Oh thank you Pinkie and Zek. You are kind, but may I request? A little spree to see who is the best?

Grammer Nazi's do not approve

>>845158845158

I fixed some of it.  This chapter is old so it was not well edited.

Do you think that the grammar detracted from the story?

>>845518845518 *Shrug*

Zek's sensors indicated that this pony was adorable...  I mean sensors indicated that this pony was weak and defenseless. SOMEONE is in LOVE.

”I need ginger cider!” Pinkie says again she struggles to a kitchen shelf, sweeping off stuff while she searches for ginger cider.

“She’s gone mad!” Yelled Applejack Pinkie Pie finds the bottle and drinks of it, and then pours the rest on his head.


”I'm an expert in poisons, Pinkie.” Says Twilight. “There's no cure! It's fatal!”  Pinkie Pie spits out the rest of the drink.

“That’s what you think!  Protein! I need protein!” Shouts Pinkie Pie.  She leans on the worktop, panting in agony, while Twilight, Rainbow dash, Fluttershy, Rarity, and Applejack search the kitchen supplies.

“Walnuts?” asks Applejack

“Yes!”  Shouts Pinkie.  She hands her a jar of walnuts and she gobbles it down. Mouth full, he can only gesture to Rainbow Dash, shaking her hand up and down.

“I can't understand you! How many words?”  Says Rainbow Dash

Pinkie Pie holds up one hoof.

“One! One word!”  Says Rainbow Dash.  Pinkie keeps shaking his hand while Rainbow Dash guessing what he means.


”Shake, milk shake, milk? Milk? No, not milk? Hm, shake shake shake... Cocktail shaker! What do you want, a Harvey Wingbanger?” Pinkie finally manages to swallow the walnuts.

“Harvey Wingbanger?”  Asks Pinkie Pie

“Well, I don't know!” Says Rainbow Dash.

“How is Harvey Wingbanger one word?”  Mocks Pinkie

“What do you need, Pinkie?” asks Rarity

”Salt, I was miming salt! Salt! I need something salty!

”What about this?” says Rarity.  She shows her a brown bag.


”What is it?” Asks Pinkie Pie.

“Salt!” Rainbow.

“That's too salty!” Says Pinkie.

“Oh, that's too salty!”  Applejack hands Pinkie Pie a jar.

“What about this?” asks Applejack.

She opens the jar and gobbles the contents.

“What's that?”  Asks Rainbow Dash.

”Hay fries!”  Says Applejack Pinkie Pie gestures again.

“What is it? What else? It's a song? Mammy? Um, I don't know, Canterlot Races?”  Guessed Dash.

“Canterlot Races?” Questions Pinkie.

“All right then, sonic rainboom!”

“It's a shock! Look! Shock! I need a shock!”

Everypony looks at each other trying to think of something that would shock Pinkie Pie.  Lot of blank faces

“Um… I think I know something will shock her said Fluttershy.”  She grabs Pinkie Pie and whispers into her ear. She lets her go, and the Pinkies shoots out a cloud of grey smoke from her ears. Pinkie Pie starts laughing hysterically.

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>>846332846332

what am i going to do with all this mustaches?  I can only wear one at a time!

oh yeah you will be exterminated

>>843351843351

YOUR REQUEST SHALL BE GRANTED.

The DALEK INVASION OF EQUESTRIA 1001 AD

>>849631849631 Thank you. And my good sir? LET THE SHOW BEGIN!!!

~evil laugh~

Good bye Ponyville!

Oh god not even celestia can stand up to the dalek army and the elements are crushed

>>849631849631 HOSTILE ELEMENTS WILL BE DELETED

>>852403852403 are you a cyberman/cyberpony?  If so you will be EXTERMINATED...

-Zek

so the time has come

>>857278857278 Oh please, we all know he'll betray his Dalek knowledge when the invasion starts.

>>857396857396no way his loyality for the daleks

>>857430857430>>857396857396

Has anypony broken Caan's code yet?

>>857640857640ah i think yes

I think it is a clone of the other dalek zek or is this before he was killed

>>857729857729

Is this a question or a statement?

I'm hoping that the mane six redeems their seventh member and Dalek Zek becomes the element of DALEK... That element doesn't seem like it would be in the elements of harmony, does it?