Most ponies don't understand how Vinyl Scratch and Octavia, two ponies who seem to each live in their own world, could become best friends. That's because most ponies don't know how much Vinyl has helped and shaped Octavia into the mare she is today. Every so often, Octavia will remember the hard times she had while in the Academy and remind herself just how much Vinyl has done for her.
Author's notes:
This story is sort of a spin-off from my story An Octave Higher. Reading An Octave Higher is recommended but not required.
I got the idea for this story after reading HowXu's comic and seeing how perfectly it fit with my other story, I decided to turn his comic into a fanfiction! I hope you enjoy it!
Credits:
Cover art and full inspiration from HowXu's comic "Why is she your friend?"
Proofread done by JohnPerry, Bronymaster and writer
Is anyone ever going to ship someone else with these two!?
Haven't had much time to read, but great work so far.
725943 Well I didn't ship them romantically :)
Wow! Nice job! I have read the comic before, and sure enough, it turned out good as I expected.
725969 Agreed, but Octavia and Scratch are always (friend)shipped with two ponies/people - each other or you/Gary Stu.
Hum... nice story, but you just wrote and expanded the comic. I was expecting something more, but meh.
Also, in the comic they're fillies when Octavia cries and Vinyl puts the bandage on her knee. Here, being teenagers, that scene seems a little odd... but even tough it's a good fic.
Also: 725943, I've seen a story that shipped Lyra with Vinyl. But I didn't like it.
'Cause, being honest, there are only three ships that everybody seems to like: Derpy-Dr. Whooves, Lyra-Bonbon and Octavia-Vinyl (romantic ship or friendshipping, it doesn't matter), so it's normal to see them everywhere.
And hell, they're great. This show's fandom is awesome, let's use it, right?
726099 Well, I couldn't really expand much more :P All my expansion is in my other Vinyl and Octy fic ^^
725978 Thank you!
726006 That's because they're perfect together ^^ No reason to change it :P
Beautiful. I loved it. Every moment of it. So ad'awable!
A story that involves these two without any form of lesbian action at all? I think this may be my favorite fanfic of all time!
It's pretty sad, too. You really made me like these two characters even more, despite the fact that they're some of my favorites from the whole show! OwO
726238 Why thank you!
726281 Thank you!
I never liked anything that goes beyond friendshipping anyway ^^
726281
726318 Anything lesbian-related makes me puke.
EDIT: By puke I mean puke disappointment for people not noticing how overrated that stuff actually is. Now nobody should be too confused. OwO
726433
Duuuuuuuuude...
I mean, can you ever read any fanfic? Because almost every romantic fic here is lesbian-realted. Or at least has one lesbian couple.
Ok, there are a lot that doesn't, but they are a minority. I didn't use to like those kind of fics, but now I'm afraid that I enjoy them. After all, gay people are people too. And my redundancy is redundant.
And, just for the sake of not being completely off-topic: As I said, I liked this story, but I think that you could have expanded it more. But, hell, if it's true that you have written another octavia/vinyl story, then I guess you couldn't do much more...
726455 I'm not saying gay people aren't people, I'm not homophobic at all. I just think that all those lesbian things are overrated and used waaaay too often; I understand if you misunderstood my earlier statement, and I'll apologize for that, but I'm the kind of person who goes against today's whole opinion about sexual orientation. If that insults you, then I think you're not familiar with people expressing what they feel is wrong with society. And what do you mean afraid you enjoy the hetero ones?
Don't get me wrong, I respect your opinion; however, I wish you'd respect mine, you'd be the first in a long time.
726734
Oh, sorry for the "I'm afraid" part, I edited the comment before posting it and now it's easy to misunderstand. I was saying that I didn't use to enjoy homosexual (that's what the "those fics" is talking about -non-native English speaker here, don't get Rambo on me for my grammar) fics, and now I don't care what genre the couple has. Of course I enjoy hetero fics.
About your opinion... well, I don't think the same, but of course I respect what you're saying. The thing is: I can respect it and try to discuss about it at the same time. And gay people are people blablablabla we think the same let's finish this conversation because there is nothing more to say.
726099 And TwiDash, AppleDash, Flutterdash, RariShy, and basically everything else that involves Rainbow or Fluttershy.
Another heartmelter
It really does help to have read An Octave Higher but it could also work as a stand alone story.
I may have to go read An Octave Higher again O.o Great story nonetheless. I've been liking Vinyl/Tavi more recently
727598 Yeap! I was hoping for that!
728422 I know that feel. I didn't think much about Vinyl & Octy until I started writing them. Now I can't get enough of them! :D
728893
Octyscratch is best ship.
Nice job once again! Bronymaster summed it up pretty well.
D'aaaaw. Romantic or not, these two are the best.
738458 Thank you!
747226 You know it! :D
Just as fantastic as it's counterpart. Its nice to see a fic that is just Vinyl and Octavia and not romantic. If this is the quality in which to write I suppose I will pain myself by watching you. le sigh
750955 Oh, you shouldn't trouble yourself with watching me
Thank you again, I'm glad you enjoyed it :)
As soon as i started to read it, i realized it was a longer narrated version of that one comic that can almost always bring me to tears. Your version did the EXACT same thing. Especially that part under the blanket.
Great story. Was an amazing read :D
755552 Thank you!
Hey there,
I just read your story and wanted to share my thoughts on it:
It wasn't very good :)
Now, don't get me wrong, I am not writing this to bash on you, but you did mention in your profile that
your goal was improvement, and in my opinion no one can improve without honest feedback (or at least
his/hers progress would be greatly hindered). I did like your fiction, it was by no means terrible, but it
didn't really do much for me as a reader either. So let's get into it.
First:
Let me tell you what's wrong with your story in 2 minutes: http://www.mtvu.com/video/?vid=689002
This is literally a 2 minute clip with the creators of South Park, Trey Parker and Matt Stones where
they explain that every beat, every part of your story should be connected to the following one
either with a "Therefore" or with a "But" - never with a "And then". "If the words "and then" belong
between [your story's points], you fucked up". You want every part of your story to be connected
to the next one with either a logical result (a therefore) or a conflict (a but).
I know your story was based on a comic, however if you simply play the comic scene for scene you
are not writing a story, you are writing... an aid for sight impaired people I guess.
Second:
Theme and ending. Friendshipping is a good theme, but its execution felt kind of meh. Because
all you had were "and then" there was no overreaching narrative throughout the piece, and the
theming was mostly lost. Your ending is a special offender to that. Why did you feel the need to
have a jump to present, then to past, then back to present? What did that framing do for your last
scene? A whole lot of not very much :) Changing storytelling perspective should always be done
cautiously, and with purpose. It also should frame the whole narrative - you can't have a change of
perspective at only one point of the story(in your case, the end) because that feels disjointed, and
throws the reader out of the world we've come accustomed to while reading the piece. You could've
explained that the whole thing was Octavia remembering the past at the end of the piece, and skipped
the jump between present and past altogether, and it'd have a more flowing way to end the story.
It would've also been a better place to explore Octavia's feelings, and you could've even had her
share those directly with Vinyl. (eg, she could for example just randomly hug Vinyl as she woke up,
in much the same way Vinyl hugged her at the graduation).
With your overarching theme being friendshipping, it just felt half-hearted when the last scene
was them not talking directly to each other.
So those are my quick thoughts, I may have come out sounding harsh, but really, I'm just trying to help.
Hope you find something useful in there, and good luck in your future stories!
871330 Thank you for taking the time to leave such a detailed comment. I will definitely take note of both points when I write in the future. I really treasure every drop of constructive criticism I get. :) So thank you again ^^ Hope my other stories fair better
That was utterly adorable, sir.
It was very well structured and had a lot of feeling in it. I wanted to cry by the end
And just the cover image made me go "D'AWWWWW!!"
pretty good, AND I DID NOT CRY! the only of your stories i've read yet that didn't make me cry! the picture nearly did! but the story didn't!