Oh. My. Gosh.

This is amazing.

I honestly will be very surprised if this isn't featured...

potencial. that all i gona say.

I take it you were inspired by Pyroshy?

Very nice. I can't wait to see where you are going.

Thumbs up and Favorited

>>710236710236 Who?

>>710240710240

http://askpyroshy.tumblr.com/

Discontinued tumblr. The premise is nearly identical, except there's no fantasy about Equestria.

>>710246710246 Ah, okay. I don't frequent tumblr, so that's why I didn't know.

I love this premise! That being said, there were a few things I need to point out.

You missed a couple of spaces, for example : Twilight had to be real!There was no way that she wasn't real!

another thing, it struck me as odd that the nurse would also be the doctor's daughter, but I suppose it isn't impossible. But the biggest issue I have was the last line. what kind of father would call their child screwball, even as a nickname? Other than that, I'm tracking this.

>>710250710250

It's all good. Pretty cool tumblr, even though it was cancelled. You ought to read through it if you liked this.

>>710262710262 Screwball is an insane background pony... I it figured that out a few seconds ago, so yeah.

This is a very good story, reminds me of this.

>>710298710298 I knew she was a BP, but in order for the story to make sense (celeste using ppl from her actual life to create the ponies) Dr Discord would have at least given his daughter the nickname of 'screwball' which to me is a little harsh for a parent to call their child.

Wow...

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Featured much?

>>710312710312 Maybe because his daughter always hung out with the asylum patients?

22 spots from featuredom... This. Will. Be. Featured... Probably.

can't wait for the real chapters!

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this...... is....... gooooood...... MOAR!

WOW...Thanks Everypony!

Now to answer some questions:

@Rainy Afternoon- I haven't heard of Pyroshy before (I don't have a tumblr) but I'll definitely check them out. Thanks!

@Bronius Maximus- Thanks for pointing out the space issue I'll go back and fix it. About the nurse being his daughter: Yeah I can understand and kinda agree with you on how it's odd that the nurse is his daughter but I wanted to bring the BP Screwball in and I don't think they would allow him to bring his daughter to work unless she was in the medical field herself. If you look up the song "Daddy Discord" it is a song between a female pony named Screwball and Discord where she talks about her cutie mark and her name and how she misses her father Discord when he is frozen in a statue (just listen to it. It explain it better than I do.) I figured it could be used a a nickname that would sound odd enough that it would make people wonder but yeah it does sound kinda harsh.

Thanks again everypony! And thank you most of all for your constructive criticism! The second chapter is actually already submitted but the moderators just have to approve it. :)

>>710358710358 have to warn you, the actual chapter may not be much bigger than the prologue but we'll see what happens. :)

The story updated as I clicked on the story o_0

Anyway, liking the story :D

Chapta Two= Epic.

Came a bit early, though... Warning here. Don't rush updates. You may end up speeding up the pacing, and ruin the flow. Make sure to keep the quality.

>>710489710489 ok and thanks. I just had trouble sleeping last night after writing the Prologue so I wrote the first chapter. Second chapter...hasn't been started yet so I'll be working on that.

>>710519710519 If chapter one is the prologue, name it prologue... Yeah. Makes a bit of confusion, otherwise, of you refer to it as the Prologue.

>>710533710533 I think the number might be confusing. Prologue name is going to be changed to chapter 1 name and Waking will be chapter 2 and chapter 3 has not been started yet. I'm trying to think of a name for the Dr. and I want to figure out which direction the chapter should go in. Hopefully that will be less confusing.

>>710558710558 don't use you fancy matematick anyhow!

My dad used to call me Screwball, and I know he meant it in a good way. So I don't believe it's a bad nickname.

Sincerely,

        Someone who used to hide in the fridge and eat all the grapes dressed as a kitty.

>>710612710612 lol Ee-Yup

>>710641710641 ....wow...you had an awesome childhood... lol

SEVEN SPOTS TILL FEATURED! COME ON!

Reminds me of a similar episode of Buffy, though in that one Buffy switched between the 2 realities, choosing to die in the "normal" world. I wonder how this will play out.

Dr. Sid Cord

Dr. Rodd Isc

Dr. Ric Odds

Dr. Cid Dors

Dr. Cris Dod

Dr.  Sircodd

Dr. Docis (Hey the Dr in doctor can actualy be part of the anagram... whoa... )

Dr. Codis

Dr. Ocsid (Look at that, Discord in reverse)

Dr. Cosid

Dr. Doisc

Dr. Driscod

I hope that this helps you with a name and possibly, if you choose to go there, a plot device for Celestia to make some connection, real or self-pervieved.

im really liking thios tory, cant wait for teh next chapter

>>710707710707 Thanks for the ideas. I'm reminded of Count Olaf from "A Series of Unfortunate Events" I see a few in there that definitely help.

I've read that everyone seems a bit put-off by the doctor calling his daughter "Screwball"

however, I know for a fact that parents with adorkable children tend to give weird nicknames to them.

I, for one, have been called Dork Knobbum (faux latin for Door Knob), That Whiteboard Eraser (whenever I cut my hair really short), and even by my little sister's name by my own parents many times.

As such, I don't think it too wierd for the nickname Screwball to show up.

>> TypewriterError

There we go, you got the reference

Have some 'staches, on the house

*gasp*

His daughter is Sarah Crueble.

S. Crueble

Scrueble sounds fuzzily like Screwball

It's a conspiracy...

>>710887710887 Perfect!

Need any other subtle or convenient plot devices or story seasonings?

I enjoy this kind of thing, so just ask for anything and Im on it

>>710907710907 ok. I'll PM you when I need some help then :)

Sweetness, it makes my heart warm when I realize that my influence is spreading through people everywhere

my wish was granted sooner than I expected

"no letter came that day"....poor Celeste(if that's her real name)

If you're not going with anagrams or plays on words, I think Discord would have a french-sounding name.

Dr. Belfonte

Dr. Bellemont

Dr. Beltram

Dr. Delancey (u c wat i did thar?)

Dr. Leblanc

Dr. Delacorde

Dr. Delaconte

Dr. Delacreux

I'd think that he'd have a cordial and benevolent-sounding name with an either negative or ironic undertone. The phrase "de l'accord" means "from the harmony". "de la conte" means "from the story".

And I can't help but imagine his first name would either be Henry, John, or Kevin.

Oh, yeah, and a great story. I love it.

>>711021711021 I like your suggestions too. I did base the Dr.'s description off of John De Lancie so his first name is definitely John. Thanks for your help!

Wow this is a amazing  story  

come on, come on, come on,come on!

FEATURE ALREADY!

Love this story, and since there is no need to comment the errors, I'll PM them.

Firstly, this is a marvelous story and as eveyone said already, you will probably get this up in the featured box soon enough. The idea is so original (at least to me) and honestly, really drove me into the same mood as most great stories do. Only a matter of time before you're a famous author before many others!

Actually, there is a name closer to Celestia than Celeste.

Celestie. Which has the potential insanity bonus because if an insane person wrote the 'e' the wrong way, it'd look like an 'a'.

It'd also bring confusion. My mother's name is Celestie and if I mention Celestia in conversation, she'll often look up, because it sounds like her name, just with an 'uh' sound tacked on.

>>711039711039

Dr. John Ocsid.

If reduced to just his last name and title, it becomes Dr. Ocsid.

Flip it backwards.

disco . rD

As Celestia is an insane person, she might've read his name wrong and wound up getting Discord.

>>711396711396 Ok. I think I have the name thanks though!

I hope screwball is  a nick name, I am looking forward to some psychological mind bending, and logical explanations later on, but right now, that is a suspenseful beginning, and it is attractive to my perspective.

Oh she is very confused, someone call the doctor.

>>711670711670 Unfortunately I did not make this a crossover or else The Dr. would be happily called upon! :)

I'm confused.  Is he Discord or what?  I guess I'll need to read on...

Screwball......fuck

my idea is that Discord got out again and is playing mind game on Celestia.

i'm not sure what to think... this could be all a trick by none other than Discord! or this could be a startling revelation for 'behind the scenes' My little pony. i am so confused! LOVE the story by the way.

I believe Equestria and this alternate universe are on a collision course in the multiverse and are slowly merging, causing the two spiritually same characters to merge in memories and bodies. Maybe it wont stop with Celeste and the doctor will be infused with discord and will lay waste to the world. Maybe the story will end in an epic race to save the two universes before they collide. Maybe I should stop rambling and let the author tell their own story.

Oh, darn. I missed an 'I liked this story before it was featured' chance. Oh well. Like and fave for you, can't wait to see where this goes.

>>712661712661

That sounds like something that would happen in Doctor Who, Mate.

This looks like that other one on EQD with Rainbow Dash... But it's dead.

Anyway, added to my reading list.

This... this is... SO AWESOME!

From the way discord told screwball to check in with her supervisor I'd say this seems real.

By the way, you use weird ellipsis. It kinda ruins the flow for me, but if that's how you wanna do em...

Listening to the Portal 2 menu song and reading this fic.... It fits so perfectly!

Incredible. That is all I really have to say.

I find this song appropriate.

I normally skip anything tagged with human, but this, this is something else. I know I'm in for a ride of awesomeness.

The fear.

The pain.

The confusion.

It makes for good story!

Spike agrees

>>711889711889 okay... well I still want to know how she will cope with all of this.

>>710230710230 It got featured, don't you worry.

She is...watching me...

moarmoarmoarmoarmoarmoarmoarmoar!

DIS IDEA MAKE ME WANNA READ THE HELL OUT OF THIS FIC

why do i feel bad for enjoying an all powerful alicorn's spiral to insanity?

nevermind, my questioned answered itself.

I can actually see this happening to some one in real life. Celestia's gonna have a hard time adjusting to the human world. Congradulations on the feature.

Will Celeste have a sister like Luna?

What kind of douche names his daughter Screwball? Or is it just a nickname?

Yay i got to be your 100th like! Cant wait for part 3 pal!

>>710842710842 Unless you want to make it obvious for everypony here (who doesn't read the comments) you oughtn't use a straight anagram.  Add a title to it, like "Lord Discord" or "King Discord" or "Medic Discord" before you mix it up.  I've read several stories where I figured out the identity of a character before the author intended because of that gaffe.

I just realized something. This is an "EIH" story "EQUESTRIA IN HUMAN" story. The first I have ever read! Maybe you started a new genera.

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Are these shades of "Normal Again" I see before me?  No bad thing at all, but I am preparing myself for for some hefty wallops in the emotional bread-box.

Pummel away!

FEATURED SPOT NUMBER THREE! YEAH! CONGRATS!

>>714981714981

Love the pick.

>>711889711889

Then don't bring in doctor whooves or the Dr, but rather a funny guy with a brown trench coat who only answers to being called the Dr. Make his name David if you really want to troll

There whent my happy mood for the day out the window, but what did I expect when it stand SAD all over the text?!?

AND NOT A SINGLE RED THUMB WAS GIVEN THAT DAY

Fun fun FUN FUN

Please, sir, may I have some more?

>>713199713199 Yeah, someone else pointed the ellipses out to me. For school I was required to have a space in between them so I set Word to automatically do that. I'm going to watch and make sure they're right after each other now.

Wow...just everypony wow. I must have missed it when I got featured but I am just floored by all ya'lls responses. I'm so glad you're all looking forward to the next part. It will come early next week (probably Monday or Even Sunday) and I'm looking forward to hearing your reactions to it. Bronies are awesome (and I consider females to be included in that word.)

Party on!

Well, this story's certainly an interesting concept, and your execution is beautiful! I'm really looking forward to reading the next chapter. Keep up the outstanding work!

DO WANT. methinks imma watch this... REALLY watch it... oh, and i gotta say this one, just by looking at the title...

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>>710230710230

It's featured! Congratulations!

Looks good so far, I'll be tracking this.

One thing, the last paragraph kinda seems like it gives up the story. No human names their kid screwball, that's a pony name.

This hases given me a serus brain buck.... and I like it

Very interesting concept I like it. I had a similar idea, but it involved a man that would keep waking up in Equestria and a mental hospital.

I really want to know if this is the real world or her imagination.

>>714828714828

Gasp! The new-ness astounds me! (really, no sarcasm!)

Oh this is so awesome, I thought there can't be a new perspective of story creating but you just made one!

Continue very soon!

Interesting idea. Please continue.

featured.

but I'm hesitant to enter... personal issues, nothing to do with anything else.

I'll put it in my read later list for when I'm feeling a little more... stable.

I haven't given a read, but the premise presented by the synopsis sounds oddly familiar. In fact, I'm almost certain that there was such a fic with a similar premise featured on Equestria Daily, only instead of Princess Celestia in the nuthatch, it was Rainbow Dash.

I'll have to give this a look when I get the time for anything more than skimming.

This is really creepy...

As for Dr. Discord and Nurse Screwball... Is Celeste/Celestia hearing what she wants to hear? Or is something far more sinister going on?

Hmmm. I'm thinking this: Either discord sent her to sleep and is trying to make her go crazy, or sent her to a different world, and is trying to make her forget Equestria, and not come back to rule, though she still has the magic to. Oh god, I hope I'm not correct. If I am, please forgive me....

>>716286716286 Or Celly is a human in an insane asylum, creating a world inside of her mind to cope with her mental incapacity...

>>716321716321 oh yeah, that too, but still, with the letter smelling like ash, and the evidence from Celly's world, I think there's more to it than that.

... I'm not sure if I want to read this or not... It's very... creepy...