Oh my god. That.Was.Amazing! Brilliant! Flawless execution, perfect pacing, not a single grammar/spelling mistake! I loved this story to TEARS! *ahem* That's one lucky human.

Concept/Originality - 5/5 Big Mac's

Spelling/Grammar - 5/5 Big Mac's

Execution/Pacing - 5/5 Big Mac's

Overall Rating - 5/5 Big Mac's

Seriously, that was beautiful. Now I want a sequel! NAO! Don't even care that it was PonyxHuman, it was beautifully carried out. Can I hug you? You *almost* brought me to tears when it ended. Don't feel bad, I barely even cried when I read My Little Dashie. This is the first story I've ever given a perfect score to. And by perfect score, I mean that the story could not have been executed better than what it is now.

Liked, Favorited, Watching. Fantastic!

Dat bug-queen ass. c:

That was awesome!

pretty well written story despite the seemly insane plot at first glace

“I infiltrated Canterlot and hid right under Celestia’s nose. I can get back into shape.”

Were it so easy.

Interesting story, and actually rather believable (unlike so many other "villain finds redemption" stories where the Heel-Face Turn is a rocket-powered Ollie 180). Thumbs up!

I have to say, this is a simply fantastic fic!

I am honestly amazed.

I have to congratulate you on this, for this passes all normal bounds of epic-ness, and you have won the internet several times over now.

Have 20 moustaches. You've earned them.

This better get a goddamn feature.

The sweet and charming tale of how Bug Queen's life was saved by bronies.

Also she gets fat.

>>863280863280

Goddamnit Pacce.

GODDAMNIT PACCE.

>>863090863090

That would be pretty cool~

>>863083863083

Oh, thank you! I think I'll make a ghillie suit out of these mustaches.

>>862623862623

It's not even a story about redemption! It's a story about how she adapts to survive!

>>862589862589

Making good stories out of bad ideas seems to be my super-power.

>>862577862577

Thanks!

>>862561862561

Aw yiss~

>>862177862177

Oh wow! Sooooo many Big Macs! I owe a lot of the cleanliness to the folks that helped me edit and iron it out. I have a lot of other projects I need to work on, but I might come back to this at some point. Thank you very much for reading, and I'm glad you enjoyed it so much!

>>863337863337

well to fair and to copy a great line i once heard

"i don't think theres ever any bad ideas just bad execution of ideas"

you certainly avoided the later

Damn, I'm very impressed. You captured the queen's personality, and did the whole 'fall in love even though I feed on it' in the best manner I've yet read. Bravo good author. Bravo.

12,000 words /is/ short.

Damn, Stonershy.  This was amazing.

What the....

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA

>>862177862177

This is the first "FIRST" post I've ever liked. Thank you.

And as for the fic... Queen Cheeselegs ;_;. I would so give her all my love. And you captured that, and it's not yet another HiE or magically transported crappy fic that's only good for hating, and she is herself, and the fact MLP is a cartoon in the human world did not make me retch. I love it ♥

Fat queen!!!

>>864303864303

Put that in your tabloids!

>>864292864292

I'm glad to hear my careful handling of the subjects has paid off. I wasn't trying to do something meme based, or super meta. I wanted to put Chrysalis in an environment where she is forced to operate outside of her comfort zone, only to find that she is admired for being a bitch. It was a lot of fun to write~

>>864151864151

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA

wait did you like it

>>864128864128

Good heavens!

>>863687863687

Thaaaanks :3c

>>863637863637

I thought four digits was short.

>>863444863444

Eeeee thank you! It was tricky to get it right, but I'm glad it paid off.

>>863443863443

There are definitely bad ideas :P

This.

Just this... just...

>>864353864353

Well okay then :3

>>863637863637

No, short is 2k words, when they tell you to write a technical article, which is not allowed to refer to about anything ("level: Introductory"), and then they actually expand acronyms like HTML. I mean seriously, the pay was great, I wrote about what I knew and liked, but trying to fit into the allotment was like Chrysalis trying to fit into her disguise. On the other hand, editors! They are ruthless, they will get you under the word limit, and they are the best thing that can happen to your writing.

I here this is PonyxHuman, yet original. I'll see about that.

>>864381864381

You would not believe how fun it is toEditors just really like to go through a stack of papers and cross out tons of eliminate needless words.

I squealed like a little girl after reading this.

I... I think I *squeed* a couple times there.

Interesting take on changeling love-feeding.

I feel as though the romance was rather well done, though I am a big fan on the 'life story in a few pages" style fics.

That being said, made my night.

Nice to see a one-shot make the feature box for once, I don't like waiting weeks for fics to update.

/hypocrite

I love love loved it!~ One of the best fanfics I have ever read. It was so beautiful.... Give me a sec...   Ok I'm done, but srsly dude, that was awesome.

Damn, I just- Shit man.

Is there anything you can't write?

You know what? I'm issuing you a set of challenges, here and now.

Steve Irwin and Fluttershy meet after a Timey Wimey-Spacey Wacey explosion in Doctor Whooves lab.

Sweetie Belle meets Aretha Franklin

Reports of shark attacks in Ramity Island forces Police Chief Goaty to get help from two very different ponies. Harpoon, who wants to kill the shark stone dead, and Fluttershy, an animal expert called in to identify markings on a corpse.

A well deserved well done to you, Stonershy. Great story!

SEQUEL!

>>864358864358 I am quite surprised to say this, but I liked it. I liked it a lot. I was well written, original, and most importantly, didn't set off my Celestia damned proof-reader's mind. The last one, very hard to do. You have earned the Fluttershy of Approval.

Image: http://t2.gstatic.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcSEr4jKph4YmVKHa_7-92PcdH2lqJ5MKjmNq4GIO0JqOhsL7jEJt2juFcFyUA

Oh, andStonershy, veddy nice work indeed. I despise any thoughts of humanity in fics, but for something as well executed as this, I'll let it pass. Adorable artwork on the cover there, too.

>>864862864862 Sweetie Belle meets Aretha Franklin? Do you hear the angels lauding this idea? I sure do!

>>864973864973

Hell yeah!

Look at all these comments telling you that you're amazing. I sure wish someone would tell you that you're not. But then they'd be lying, because to find something wrong with this story is as scientifically impossible as licking your own forehead. I do like the revised ending, it flows a lot better than before.

There are no words to describe this.  There is only one single, solitary image.

Image: http://mylittlefacewhen.com/media/f/img/mlfw1174_S3rlk.gif

Good on ya, pardner.

Fantastic work good sir.

After 12 years in development, hopefully it was worth the weight.

ERMAHGERD.

I loved every minute of this. I want to draw Chrysalis working out now. Also, Chrysalis with a pony-tail. Also, Chrysalis with a food-baby. Also, Chrysalis making out with a human girl. Also, Chrysalis as a human, yelling at interns.

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/lolface_Queen_Chrysalis.png

An MLP-meets-human-world story that I didn't immediately hate? IS NOT POSSIBLE.

This premise had every chance to go horribly wrong. But this fic actually works! I enjoyed it thoroughly.

Well done indeed. It is almost too bad that there isnt a meme of Chrysalis on a tredmill.

Amazing story!

HOLY BALLS this is awesome.

I never really thought that human x bug pone would work (well, for me at least)... but goddamn this one is good.

140+likes and 0 dislikes!

I JINXED IT

HAHHAHHA (No i'm not the 1st disliker)

A grand job was done here. The Principality of Zeon approves.

"filet minion"

If that's an intentional pun, then you win everything.

Okay that was just beautiful. I loved the way it ended. Absolutely. Made me feel warm and fuzzy, y'know? Thank you, kind author, for bringing this wonderful piece of awesome to the community. I applaud you. Now where oh where did I put that watch button...?

Fucking beautiful!

and not a single dislike was given that day....

I wonder if chrysalis is ever going to find where Trixie went off to?

Image: http://scranton.mylittlefacewhen.com/media/f/img/mlfw473_hophappyhop.gif

This. Is. AWESOME!

Not a single bucking dislike on this story.

And that is how it should be.

Oh, Stonershy :)

What a wonderful lil' redemption story. Thank you!

I liked it, and I don't usually like to mix human and ponies

and I do want some sporting chrysalis fan art!!

That was very nice. At first I thought it was going to be a little silly, but as it went on, I really can see you put a lot of thought into the story, and overall its very well done.

>>865713865713

You here to, huh?

(p.s. read the other stories by this author as well, they caused me to stay in this site!)

You know, I usually gag at the thought of a meet the fans story. If this is how good they are I have been cheating myself out of something really good. since I'm done with this ill check your page for more of your stories. mmmm yummmy yummy well-put-together stories. *feels his belly bulge with new found fullness*

186 likes? 0 dislikes? THE INTERNET HAS SPOKEN!

Damnit, you have a serious fat fetishism going on there.

As for the story, I applaud you. It was a dangerous territory you were stepping on, but managed to get through it without falling into a chasm.

I mean honestly, how many good HumanxPony stories are out there? Not counting the clop, though, that's always awesome. And then the concept of a villain/ess doing something not-evil and even redeeming him-/herself, which is nearly a safe sign for a bad story, but even that was well executed.

I really like how your Chrysalis turned out, not being a pathetic fool, stranded and helpless in a foreign society, but rather a master of adaption, quickly adjusting to her new circumstances. There were a few slip-ups, of course, for the sake of comedy and getting on with the plot, otherwise this story would have had a very slow pace and would have been a boring read.

As for the length, I'm not certain if this can be considered a "shortfic", some other authors would have slit this up in several chapters. But then again, it's "short" in your terms, considering your other stories...

I am wondering though why the hell she isn't really attempting to get back to Equestria or find the rest of her army, wouldn't that have been the most logical first course of action? Or did she just forget about the rest of her giant swarm?

Other than that, liked, favorited, hoping for a sequel and maybe a prequel. Just think of it, a detailed description of Chrysalis' first few days would be excellent stuff for good comedy.

I wouldn't mind a steamy clop scene with ChysalisxArtist, too, there is to few FemHumanxPony out there.

Also, prepare your anus, should this get up on EQD, if it isn't already.

Clicked for the picture, upvoted for the adorable ending. I'm still a sucker for "happily ever after".

this.

was.

AMAZING!!!!

Huh, feels good to see my art being used for stuff. buehehehe.

Is it wrong that I found Chrysalis' webcam sessions to be highly erotic? The plot development wasn't bad either. Bow chicka wow wow!

Holy crap, that was one of the best fics I have ever read. Ever. It was just perfect in every way.

Amazing work Stonershy. Now I remember why you were the first person I ever liked on this website.

Now to reply to all these comments. I'm gonna try not to miss any of them.

>>866149866149>>865737865737>>865645865645>>865375865375>>865225865225>>865131865131>>864879864879>>864738864738>>865580865580

To all you "this was awesome" folks, thank you so very much for all the pictures and congratulations and what have you!

>>866101866101>>865675865675>>865566865566>>865752865752

Combo broken!

>>866214866214

Oh god this was yours? It was too perfect to pass up. Thanks for drawing it!

>>866129866129

I usually don't like happy endings for the sake of happy endings, but it actually worked out this time.

>>866104866104

Shh don't tell anyone. And honestly, transformation has a lot more time in the spotlight than my love of squishy things. Like seemingly everything I do, though, I planted a landmine and tap-danced on it to turn it into a rose bush. I think it's how the idea is delivered that is most important, because yeah, this is a really silly premise for a story. I also don't see this as a redemption story. She's not doing anything to make amends for what she did in Equestria, she's just adapting and surviving. As for why she gives up, she has a 9-5 job and she has no idea how going back to Equestria would even work. She decides to focus on meeting her own needs instead. Or something. So many comments.

>>864887864887

Maaaaybe I could do a sequel or a prequel. Maybe. I have other projects to work on still.

>>866034866034

It's all about delivery. Also, thanks! Hope you like my other stuff too!

>>865975865975

Flattery~

>>865923865923

It's a very silly story! I just managed to present it well enough for it to be enjoyable. Thanks, too!

>>865893865893

I had to try it at least once. Also yes for Chrysalis on a treadmill!

>>865857865857

No problem~ I don't really see it as a redemption story, but everyone keeps saying that, so maybe I'm wrong!

Also, I bumped into Sleepless at some point. I immediately asked if he had seen you, and he gave me the most confused look. It was great.

>>865713865713

I don't think Trixie ended up in the human world.

>>865608865608

Dawww~ Thanks!

>>865594865594

Of course it was intentional!

It wasn't intentional. Please explain it.

>>865409865409

Thanks duder~ Yeah, it's risky territory, but by some miracle, people like it!

>>865353865353

We can make this happen! Also thanks!

>>865324865324

It seems like every story I've written is something that should not work, but through careful delivery, it does. I'm glad you enjoyed it~

>>865315865315

I also want all of those things.

>>865289865289

God, yeah, this did take a long time to put out, didn't it? Gotta work on my production time.

>>865124865124

I'm trying real hard not to let any of this praise go to my head. I'm glad you like the changes I made to the ending, though. I spent a while trying to figure out how much freaking out was enough.

>>864973864973

I didn't draw it! Some other guy did. But, yeah, this was a really dangerous subject to tackle. I'm glad it paid off!

>>864938864938

I proofread several times over before I submit something. Having people to help edit helps a lot too! Thank you for reading :3

>>864862864862

Wait, wait I still have Blood and Annywhere and More to Love to work on! Challenges postponed! But seriously, it's all in the delivery.

>>864608864608

It was my pleasure~ I don't remember where the idea came from, maybe MLPG, but I knew I had an idea to try right then and there. Glad you enjoyed it!

>>864598864598>>864556864556

Daww :3c

I THINK THAT'S EVERYONE?!

>>864862864862

what do you mean Sweetie Bell meets Aretha Franklin?

Sweetie Bell is Aretha Franklin

Well any story that elicits an emotional response that large is instantly successful regardless of content, but that was just beautiful. Well done and keep it up.

5/5 moustaches

Sweet Jesus, those feeding and chubby parts :megusta:

I fucking love this story, it hit all the right spots on the "fucking amazing fanfic" chart. There is nothing I can say except good show, old boy. Jolly good show. And that chubby Chrysalis need moar belly rubs. <3

Where's the human tag?

> filet minion

Even though this  seems like an erroneous spelling of filet mignon, the implications are too hilarious. Please, leave it in.

*Groundskeeper Willie is not fooled!*  Bah!  Changeling propaganda!  I know their lies ta well, laddies and lasses!   "We're not so bad!  We just need a little love!"  And when ye trust em, that be when they git ya!  They suck all yer love out and leave ye a cold, hate-filled human resources director!  *terrified gasp from crowd*  

Don't say I dinna warn ye!

>>866411866411  Ye want ter jump 'er thorax, dun ye, lad?  

What a cute story ^^ The progression was quite logical and likeable, and Chrisalis was delightful throughout ^^ The gimmick of love via interwebs was a bit stretched, but who cares, the results were awesome :D

A delicious fic all in all Thanks for sharing it with us.

That being cancelled part was very sad!!!!!!

Amazing story, well done etc.

Here:

Image: http://thesecularity.com/download/file.php?id=7457

This was a great story! Someone ought to make a blog like that for real now, haha. Liked/Faved!

>>862177862177 I agree, that is the best "first" post ever.

It's .. beautiful. Just perfect.

Believeable human\pony - check

Believeable 'good' antagonist - check

BELIEVEABLE EVERYTHING - CHECK

CHRYSALIS ON BRONYCON - CHECK DOUBLE CHECK

>>866705866705

Of course. Who wouldn't want to feel that super rubable, squishable plump tummy? <3

God I've read this fic twice now. Ideas for Chrys fics are buzzing around my head like a hu gry swarm of Changelings. Thanks a lot, Stonershy :V

Pretty.

Fucking.

Amazing.

Good on you, Stonershy.

What happens when Chrysalis' lover dies? Does she go back to starving? OH GOD THE MORBIDITY.

Fantastic!

Instant spot on my user page wall of awesome one-shots.

*reads a bit* Wait, what? this is good.

*keeps reading* okay neat...

*finishes* no more words. just smiles. no overly bland explanation, no nothing but good ending.

>>866273866273

... But... You didn't even SEE the webcam?!

And... But...

Truely, this fic was so well done, The emotions, the drama, the suspense! All were perfect and all were inspirational.

Surprisingly feel hungry right now

Image: http://t3.gstatic.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcTxcOMHYAGKq9ga_yzzh5TQL7Q_P_h04tSMaHGYYN6BpOyrvBYT

>>867010867010  SHE'LL SUCK YER BLOOD OUT CUZ SHE'S ALSO A VAMPIRE!!  

Overused .Gif, correct context:

Image: http://thesecularity.com/download/file.php?id=7457

Glorious beyond all comprehension, it was incredibly heartwarming. I feel so happy now.

Interesting.  I don't regret reading the fic.

Pudgy Chrysalis.  Nice.  

Also, I totally imagined the artist was Madmax.  No real reason.

(And now so will everyone else.)

>>865409865409 Gaz...youre alive?

AND A BRONY?!?

This was far more fantastic than I was prepared for. There needs to be a Chrysalis smiley.

Oh wait, I found one:

>>866354866354

You try not to let the comments go to your head, but then they do and you make a dumb story you regret forever.

I hope I don't sound like some random 'wow, this is awesome!' guy. The problem is that this is all I have to say about the story since I'm one of those people who can read anything and doesn't judge based on content matter and this story has nothing wrong with it. The nitty gritty details are what make a story, not the material in them, and all your stories, fetish or otherwise, are incredible to read because they are far more story than fetish stuff, but still cater to the fetishists.

Off topic. My basic point is that it's easy to tell that either;

A: You are naturally gifted.

B: You've had a ton of practice and are dedicated to your writing.

C: You edited the crud out of all your work.

D: All of the above.

And as a guy who'd been writing for seven years or so and trying to get better, you just seem amazing and unaproachable almost. I don't want to sound like some random guy saying you're awesome, but damn it, you're awesome.

As a side note;

Now you have more comments.

I nearly drooled at the shower scene.

>>867826867826

Last I checked I am still walking tall, yeah. I am a very lazy writer.

And seeing as I write silly fanfiction, I think that qualifies for brony.

awesome story   that ending was really cute

You really should make more  of this. I Love it! (They need to make a Chrysalis emoticon)

>>866354866354 How on earth can you have enough time to read and reply all of these comments....

>>866354866354

Dammit, you were at Bronycon too and I didn't get to see you either?!?

(it is SOOO funny thinking about all the superstar favorite-box celeb writerponies trying desperately to find and meet MY obscure apple-bedecked butt. Guys, NOPONY but you celebs has ever heard of me, settle down!)

I'll be easy to find from here on out. I'm becoming OFFICIAL mixing board herder and PA whisperer, so to speak, so I'll be twiddlin' knobs at the mixing desk a whole bunch!

And I'm sorry to run so late on the new 'Rarity' chapter but it would go faster if I wasn't reading WHOLE STONERSHY STORIES instead of writing ;) at any rate the extra delay and confusion is letting me refine ideas into a really heavy pivotal chapter. Unless you write another story in which case I'll just have to read that, won't I?

>>864329864329

Image: http://24.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m6rep6Opc91rwk8kvo1_500.png

>>867815867815

I hate you.

>>867826867826

I'm pretty sure he just got booted into our world by some bored deity and has finished his stint as a human game piece.

Background guy whistling while sweeping the floor with a glowing broom.

This was one of the few VERY good stories. And the best one including chrysalis i've read so far

Congratulations for this work

was pretty freaking awesome