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    I love my brother. I know lesser mares would've quit by now. When he boarded that train to the changeling territory, he was still Macintosh. When he came back he was still the same, but... different.
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    Veteran on Veterans day.

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    Watch movie, write ponies.

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  • 11w, 4d
    Previews of my next updates!

    Why haven't I written anything, you ask? But I have! I updated a story followed by a whopping 73 people!

    *sigh*

    And I have added to some fic updates, such as Mac Unhitched and Regression, and even a little bit of pony bar time!

    But, real life work is taking all my time.

    I'm sorry guys, I really am.

    It seems like I've just got so much going on right now. Like I went from 0-60 in under a few days time.

    I'm not quitting, or anything like that, but, I figure I'd let you know the progress on some of the things I've been working on.

    Hell, I'll even include a preview or two!

    As the Songbird Sings:

    The Monster From the Forest

    "Call for backup immediately! Get the entire division down here, now!" Sargent Shield said, rushing out the door, brandishing his spear as it hung in his magic. Once he rounded the corner of Fluttershy's cottage, he recognized the mare they were looking for.

    "Miss Fluttershy! Get away from that thing!"

    The Songbird stepped forward, causing the earth beneath their hooves to tremble. He balled his fists, revealing the razor sharp blades on his gloves.

    "Mr. Bird, please don't hurt them!" Fluttershy cried

    Sorry songbird fans, That's all you get! (because that's all there is :''(

    Macintosh Unhitched:

    Mac was up before the sun the next day. If the madame wanted this stallion dead, he supposed he had no choice. He had wrestled with the moral dilemma of killing a pony not connected with his mission.

    Ah suppose this is just another stop on the way... he thought, dressing himself in the dingy room given to him by his new employer. A shuffling sound distracted him. A newspaper slid beneath the door with a note tied around it, a last known location of his target. He took the paper, removing the note and stowing it in the pocket of his duster. He tossed the paper on the bed, but took a second glance once he caught the headline.

    ARMY OF THE SUN SWELLS RANKS! POWERS TAKE SIDES! WAR IMMINENT!

    Mac's jaw hung slack as he scanned through the opening paragraphs.

    The kidnapping of a vital part of the equestrian national defense six months ago has finally warranted a swift and just response from the crown. The army of the sun's ranks continue to grow as recruits flock to punish those who would commit crimes against the kingdom.

    The lawless territory newspapers usually had a pro-equestria slant, but Mac couldn't doubt the truth in black and white. He knew at the outset of his mission that it would only be a matter of time before word of Rainbow's disappearance became public knowledge. Once that happened, he knew the Princesses would have to do something.

    He would have never guessed that something was rebuild the Equestrian army. Further down the page, a picture of his wife and son stared back at him. His time was running out. Mac knew an invasion would only complicate things.

    "Another ponies' blood on your hooves."

    Mac cut his eyes to the old victorian chair in the corner. The light from the lantern didn't quite reach, though there was no need for it. He knew who was sitting there.

    "He knew what was coming. I gave him the choice."

    A bright red point of light rose, and then rested on the chairs arm as a cloud of smoke veiled the shadowy figure. "You sure didn't hesitate, did you?"

    Mac hated when he showed up. "You know what happens when you hesitate."

    A scoff echoed from the corner. "Yeah, I do. So, have you thought about what I said?"

    Mac's face twisted into a snarl. "Ah ain't a murderer."

    "You don't think so?" The figure leaned out of the shadows. "You know what murderers do, don't you?" Mac stared back at his dark companion, a reflection of himself. "They kill. You've killed." His dark passenger sat back, taking another drag of his cigarette. "Connect the dots."

    Please don't read in to how a hooved creature could hold a cigarette without fingers. I sure didn't.

    Regression:

    Princeps Autem Solis

    The full moon is due tonight. It is identical to countless nights before, only this time, there is a tension I've not felt in many hundreds of years. Something is wrong. A storm has been brewing on the horizon, and I fear my sister knows of it as well. What's truly worrying, is that she refuses to acknowledge it. The impeding worry covers her like the heaviest cloak, and yet, she pretends everything is fine. She may ignore it, but I believe I know what is coming.

    The blades are coming. Another case has been reported in Manehattan. The EIA has been exceptional at concealing the cases from the general public, but they're mounting. They can't be hidden forever.

    Celestia refuses to renew the covenant. We renewed it once before. Discord, Celestia and myself all gathered in the Hallowed Ground. It cost us dearly. Epona can be a cruel deity. She demands so much from us to keep our children safe, to allow them the same gifts that we have enjoyed.

    I'm afraid my sister's tolerance for the renewal has disappeared. I cannot lay blame upon her. It is truly a dreadful process, to be renewed. For the kingdom, it is good. Wonderous, no doubt. The lethargic are granted energy, the sad are given joy, and the angry are given peace. But for us, there is naught but misery. A torment beyond comparison, beyond the mere words of any language awaits us for every bargain struck with Epona. Our life, the lives of all creatures on this planet flow from her, and through her. It is only through her grace that we live, and it is only fitting, that through her grace, we should recede.

    A Pony Walks Into A Bar...

    Trixie

    Another time, a unicorn in a cape and wizard hat wandered in. She held her head high as she entered, the hat dragging across the doorframe. With a swish of her magic, her clothes hung themselves on the hatrack.

    All I've got. Still thinking of a story for Trixie.

    That's not all of it, but there's a sample of some of what I've been up to. Fans of the various stories, what did you think?

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For a long time, I thought I was an oddity. One dragon living with a bunch of ponies, in a whole kingdom of ponies, no less. I was emasculated, a shadow of what I thought I was supposed to be. What I expected of myself, and what I thought was expected of me, drove me to follow the great dragon migration. I thought it would wake up my inner dragon, and finally allow me to realize what I'm meant to be in this world. But it didn't. All it showed me was that other members of my species only care about size, strength and brute force. I left there, glad that I had such good friends, but still just as lost as ever on the inside. That is, until she showed up.  

A crossover-ish type story involving a certain black lady dragon from a video game series.

A MLP Legend of Spyro crossover, though no knowledge of the games is needed to read the fic.

First Published
27th Jun 2012
Last Modified
2nd Apr 2013
#1 · 125w, 4d ago · · · Prologue ·

This is gonna be so damn epic. Is there some romance between Spike and Cynder down the road?

CBE
#2 · 125w, 4d ago · · · Prologue ·

Cynder was always my favorite.

#3 · 125w, 4d ago · · · Prologue ·

Epic but I misread the title lol.

"Dragon Tales" oh boy....

#4 · 125w, 4d ago · · · Prologue ·

Before reading:

After reading: :rainbowlaugh:

Awesome fic is awesome.

#5 · 125w, 4d ago · · · Prologue ·

Sounds fantastic, will read when I get home.

#6 · 125w, 4d ago · · · Prologue ·

I will be reading this! Later :moustache:

#7 · 125w, 4d ago · · · Prologue ·

earned your self a fav gj keep up the awsome work

#8 · 125w, 4d ago · · · Prologue ·

>>821763 Why does the rolling spider say nope? :rainbowhuh:

#9 · 125w, 4d ago · · · Prologue ·

>>821917 My reaction was 'Oh god no roll away' but then it got better.

#10 · 125w, 4d ago · · · Prologue ·

Very nice start. I assume that the other purple dragon mentioned is Spyro? The only thing I know about the games is the name.

#11 · 125w, 4d ago · · · Prologue ·

Language is a bit strong at the end (I wondered what the Teen rating was for!); but it's sort of true of the other dragons in MLP!

#12 · 125w, 4d ago · · · Prologue ·

>>821740 Mehhhhhhbeh. But Spike is still young, so if there was any, It'd be of the schoolyard variety.

>>822090 Yes, that'd be him. He's not in this, though.

#13 · 125w, 4d ago · · · Prologue ·

>>822914 So nothing more than some flirting or a crush?

#14 · 125w, 4d ago · · · Prologue ·

So wait, this isn't related to a certain PBS kids program that shares the same title?

...

Okay.

*Adds to read later.*

#15 · 125w, 4d ago · · · Prologue ·

This im going to read!! Cant wait for the next chapter!! :pinkiehappy:

#16 · 125w, 3d ago · · · Prologue ·

well he sure as well isn't THAT purple dragon... but i smell foreshadowing... XD

#17 · 125w, 3d ago · · · Prologue ·

I sense spike breathing elements in the future, all he needs is crystals. thats how spyro got it right? im  a little rusty on my spyro lore. haven't played it in a while

Hmm seems like Rarity does have something for Spike. I smell a love triangle. :pinkiehappy:

#19 · 125w, 3d ago · · · Prologue ·

>>823857 nor have I. I used to love those games

Oh Rarity... :facehoof:

I'm guessing that the purple fire is something else from her game backstory. Why would it be suspicious if Spike's usual green fire isn't?

Oh I already love the story already, you're doing a wonderful job.

Can't wait for more :pinkiehappy:

this keeps getting better and better! cmon chapter 3!!! lol

has cynder been crossing universes?

>>825916 indeed she has, my fellow southern gentleman.

rarity shall go forth and find spike out of sheer willpower and jealousy.

#26 · 125w, 3d ago · · · Prologue ·

What a coincidence. I busted out my PS2 and started playing my old games, Spyro among them.

  -Delta-

Does convexity actually burn things?

This is certainly interesting, just hope it isn't Spike X Cynder. To much of a diehard Spyder fan for that XD

But it's your choice.

Please update when you can.

definantly  reading this.

"Apple Jack Is the Fastest Mare I Know. And I'm Not Talking About Running"

:applejackconfused::applejackunsure: What the Was all That About Rainbow Dash????

:rainbowlaugh: Here Strikes Trolling Dash!

Good read, keep it up

I knew I tracked this for a reason!

    -Delta-

Damn, when Cyder actually said the name Spyro I nostalgia'd all over

myself. I haven't played any of the new games but the original Spyro

was one of the earliest game I remember playing and not being afraid to die.

Thanks for the update man it made my night.

I've been waiting for a long time for a Spyro crossover! Totally gotta read this now. :D

>spyro

OH

GOD

NO.

I was thinking this was somehow a crossover with the old kids show Dragon Tales...That for some reason I would like to see...but alas, tis a Spyro crossover...and because I have never played the games I have no interest...but now I really want an actual Dragon Tales crossover...So I will thank you for sparking that bit of interest...

>>904832 Yeah, literally EVERYONE commenting on EQD thinks it is a crossover with the old TV show.

Not bad. Your style is decent but you've got some pretty basic punctuation problems.

For your dialogue, when using a speech verb that's attatched to it you're supposed to use a comma, not a period. Stranger still is that you don't capitalize the speech verb, which is correct, but still use the period. Use this for more info: http://www.writing-world.com/fiction/dialogue.shtml

Next, commas should not preceed "and" unless it's an Oxford comma. This rule is relaxed in dialogue, mind you, but it shouldn't be present in exposition. This rule is due to "and" being a connector designed to replace a comma entirely. The same applies to "but" or any other coordinating conjunction (hereon referred to as a "connector" for simplicity's sake).

You may notice I've put a comma before a couple of my "buts" here, but that's because they're seperating an additional thought. Examine this sentence for why this exception exists:

>This rule is relaxed in dialogue, mind you, but it shouldn't be present in exposition.

As you can see, there's a comma before my "but". However, this is due to the "mind you" not being a necessary part of the sentence. If I were to remove it, I'd be left with:

>This rule is relaxed in dialogue but it shouldn't be present in exposition.

The sentence retains its topic and isn't impacted in any meaningful way by removing "mind you". That addition was only for flavour. Granted, I could write it as:

>This rule is relaxed in dialogue but, mind you, it shouldn't be present in exposition.

and technically achieve the same effect while avoiding the comma-before-a-connector issue, except it loses natural flow in the exchange. This is an example of where not following the rules to the letter is better. Remember: If you know how the rule works, you're allowed to break it as long as it improves the story in some way.

Apologies if that was unduly confusing.

>>904975 Firstly, I recognize your name from Ponychan, so I know you aren't just some guy spouting nonsense. Also, I haven't had any clarification for the longest time over the comma/period in ending dialogue thing, and simply wasn't sure how to phrase what I wanted to ask in any threads. The link is greatly appreciated. Grammar was arguably my worst literary subject in school, so I suspect I'll be behind a bit of a learning curve in comparison to other authors submitting their work to EqD (which is what I'm sure has brought you here).

Secondly, I want to thank you for taking the time to point these things out to help me improve as a writer, which is something I'm always striving to do. I enjoy praise as much as the next reckless egocentric hedonist, mind you, :twilightsheepish: but constructive criticism is something I rarely get, and I try to convey my gratitude to those who take the time.

So thanks again!

>>904863 I said it there as well...but now I'm thinking of a bunch of old TV shows...The Nostalgia is palpable...so again...I thank you anyways...

Oh god I remember that show. Thanks PBS, for all the torturous moments that show put me through.

Hold on, didn't all the color get sucked out of the land in one episode of Dragon Tales, and an episode of MLP? *GASP*

The title led me to believe that this was a crossover with the PBS cartoon Dragon Tales.

I am disappoint.

interesting... I shall watch this...

>>905033

My pleasure. The story is interesting and I think I might give it a watch. I'll hold off on that "Like" key until I see where you're going with this; I felt a twinge of weakness with your villain, especially in regards to how you introduced him (IE a giant infodump that reveals everything about him in a paragraph of mind-numbing tedium instead of letting his actions and words speak for him as the story progresses). It's like you decided developing in a similar way to Cynder was too much work, threw your hands into the air and said "Fuck it, have ALL the exposition!" If it's not too late, I'd suggest stripping that down and working his monetary-based allegiances into the plot more organically.

Yes, constructive criticism is in short supply on most websites. We at /fic/ pride ourselves (or at least, I do) on being soulles reviewing demons that poke you with pitchforks composed of grammar and mechanic rules.

It's an easy fix, it just takes a little memorization. Drop by /fic/ at some point with this (better now than before it gets Too Big To Edit) and you 'ought to be able to find a reviewer to help you with it.

JUST MAKE SURE TO READ THE STICKY FIRST.

Otherwise, I might have to eviscerate you ^_^.

>>905281 You're correct, the offending exposition has been expelled. I'll gradually introduce his reasons in later chapters, leaving him a bit of mystery for anyone still to be brought over from the EqD post.

>>905310

Most agreeable.

And again, drop by /fic/, that way you can get some help catching those sorts of scenes before posting. "Ten minutes of reading the rules could save you fifty hours or more of wasted effort."

/lame reference

#49 · 123w, 2d ago · · · Prologue ·

>>821757 hahaha that's what I thought too XD  Someone should make that crossover.  I remember that show being pretty good.  For PBS.

I'm not really a big Spyro fan, but this is actually pretty good.

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