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DO WANT 
Now, I was afraid to read any of your stories due to my irrational fear of longer stories, but I'll stick with this one. There are several things I'd like to point out, but they're not too major: That’s a good approximation, I muttered to myself. You left out quotes. And, winterwort is, to my knowledge, in this context, neither someone's name, a place, title, or any other sort of proper noun, it's a simple noun, an herb. You don't go around calling pepper 'Pepper', do you?
I'm liking this so far, so please, go on. I bumped into you playing TF2 again several days ago, on an ending note.
Noticed something. Where are your paragraphs? Those aren't optional to my knowledge. Oh wait, everything is, writers can weave the English language into any shape that pleases them. I can tell this Ditsica-Derpy combo is going to be interesting. Well, that was the selling point of this story, right? It works.
Good job! The pairing works very well so far! I look forward to more! 
Hm... We need a discorded derpy pic... Wasn't that an old tumbler account? About discord giving derpy a high level of intelligence just so she could see how others treated her? And then she treated everyone else the way they had treated her? Could be wrong... Anyway! Keep up the good work!
>>726250 In professional formatting, in order to save paper, the paragraphs are scrunched up and indented and all that jazz to keep the word count per page at an optimal level. Since this is cyberspace and those economical limitations don't apply, I prefer to space my text out so that it's easier on the eyes.
Interesting. Perhaps my comprehension is failing me today, but I'm still slightly baffled as to how Ditsica came to the conclusion that Derpy should be her partner in crime. Perhaps as a scapegoat, should she need a conveniently identical-looking pony to point the hoof at? *evil laughter*
Either way, can't wait for moar!
>>727330 Twilight said the spell played on Discord is even stronger than before. It would take true hate to free him now, instead of a simple arguement. So she wants Derpy, cause she believes Derpy is a mindless idiot who she can get really really mad at, all the time, thus filling her with enough hate to release Discord.
Wow ... just wow. I am definately hooked on this story. I have sooo many questions ... who created Ditsica, for what reason was she created, why does she look nearly identical to Derpy, why does she only have a day to live, is she really evil or desperate, what happens to her if she succeeds, what's the purpose of releasing Discord, is Derpy really smarter than she appears .... I just can't wait to see how this story unfolds and what the answers to these questions will do. Great job! Definately deserves a thumbs up and a fave from me.
"The goal is to see if there is some bond greater than genetics that can make two ponies look nearly identical."
Given the manner in which ponies are, um, replicated for background use on the television series, this line seems wonderfully apt, even if Ditsica is making it up as she goes along.
This is the first fic that I've started with a chapter, and actually KEPT UP with it. Normally, I read the first chapter of a fic, and say "wow, you should remember this so you can read as each chapter comes out!" but always forget. This one, though...I NEED TO KNOW MORE! 
I love the style of reading and the generally easy flow of the story, and not to mention how funny this is 
, it's great that you seem to be having LOTS of funny with making Ditsica miserable but hey at least Derpy is having an adventure. Oh no I just noticed something--- a good amount of stories I have read here all involve Derpy... am I going insane or growing addicted to the Derp?!
This is odd. Usually when I favorite a story it never updates again. In this case, the opposite seems true. Very well done chapter, and I must congratulate you on being the only author to use first-person that manages to make it interesting. I also like your Derpy.
What the hell took you so long to get this chapter out? 
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I think because of the close proximity of Discord. He's able to just hand out idiot balls.
The ending = Cute 
the entire thing = I like
Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Spitfire_rape.pngAlright. Who's Spitfire raping this time?
Damn, that's seductive. XD
Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Spitfire.pngAnyway. Amazing chapter, glad this one came out much faster. Much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much much faster.
But yeah. Amazing chapter. Expect more amazing chapters like this... Not necessarily soon, considering you.
Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Spitfire_lazy.pngI have come to the conclusion that I have no idea how this story is going to end.
Can't wait to find out!
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