If this story updates to slowly for your tastes, please check out "It Takes a Village" by determamfidd, that's what this story is a response to.

Edit: Here's the comic I found after I wrote my disclaimer, seems someone had the same idea as I did.

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The in-story Chapter Title says "I love it when a plan comes apart." Your Chapter titles reads "I love it when a plan falls apart." Also, P0nies had a good point. The cover art is misleading. And you go from what seems to be Spike to somepony else.

Aside from all that. It seems good.

seems interesting

like the idea, faved.

I had to reread it to understand it that well, thinking Spike was the character in the first paragraphs. Unless you were actually trying to make people think it was Spike, you should've mentioned it was a different character early on.

Interesting... Faved

>>695748695748 , >>695760695760 , >>695822695822 , >>695843695843

Fixed the title and added the prologue part, this next chapter will clear up the main character issues.

>>696160696160

That was my intention actually, as it builds suspense for Spike's situation, then curiousity about the mystery pony, and then back to Spike for a cliffhanger. It also shows how the chapter title fits, Elise's plan comes together while Spike's comes apart. Also, it's a fun A-team reference.

>>695847695847

I thank you for your optimism, unfortunately though, my story does not accrue wealth on its own

>>695948695948

Thank you for your support and enjoy the next chapter, please. I really want you to enjoy it.

>>696274696274

I wish I knew where all this interest was coming and going... thank you very much

To Everyone: If this story updates to slowly for your tastes, please check out "It Takes a Village" by determamfidd on fanfiction.net, that's what this story is a response to.

>>698553698553

This is awesome.

Im noticing some flashbacks on Dash, eh.

My dreams may come true....

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Rainbow_dealwithit.png

Epicness

Lol "A Breakfast of Champions" everyone knows that 'Wheaties' you're talking about. (Sorry couldn't resist)

>>699819699819

Very good, but can you find the other reference? If anyone does, I'll give them a surprise!

very very cool story

But is this Tom that Rarity mencioned, i really don't remember anypony name Tom

great work, seems that we have a great story in the making over here

>>700857700857

Tom was what Rarity named the boulder that Discord had her carrying around. Thanks, but considering how slowly the timline of the story will move, I doubt to many people will read it. Just Spike's birthday will take another 4-5 chapters. The next will be out by this Thursday at the latest though.

Also, what the heck's going on with your avatar?

>>702961702961

ahh well now i remember tom thanks for the info, i really didn't remember that the piece of rock that Rarity was carrying in that episode had a name, specially a human name

>>706007706007

Your welcome, and still I query, what is Lyra doing in your avatar?

>>707800707800  mmm i can explain you my picture in 2 ways:

1.- Is just Lyra sitting in Twilight's head, while she was reading a book about Star Swirl, the Bearded. just Lyra being Lyra.

2.- What??? Have you never hear of the Legend of Lyra???? Never? She has a mystery but powerfull power that allows her to sit in a very special way in everyplace she wants!

Just as great as RD's  Sonic Rainboom, Lyra's sitting-power is a mighty and very mistic ability that  only she has and it helped her to have tons of adventures  around Equestria, doing her job as member of the Backers team (you know from background ponies )

The chapter title and ALL the original names mean something. Search the lake name with pony.

Are you sure we should give them so many hints?

Of, course! There's no way they'll geuss what I'm going to do to you!

>>710939710939

On the first chapter, i Thought this was a SpikeXDash story. Just that... Um. How can I put it. He dosen't believe it....

Well that was a pleasant surprise.

Great chapter

good to see Zecora inside a fic

>>698249698249 It's cool. I didn't dislike it.

>>710976710976

His birthday isn't even over yet, I've still got about 10 hours to write out. Also, if you know how it is possible to see a rainbow across the entire atmosphere you win a special Rainbow Dash prize.

>>711110711110

Thank you, I was a little worried because when I looked this over for grammar and such, I realized I put at least 3-4 hints as to what was going to happen, but I couldn't bring myself to take any out.

>>711318711318

Thank you very much. Would you believe me if I told you I only focused on the rhymes and that the matching meter was accidental? Also, she's actually pretty easy to write. You just give her your Author Vision(story omniscience), coax her into rhyme, have her do something unexpected and then withhold information through cryptic statements.

>>711365711365

Thanks, I was a little worried people might hate me for asking, but if I could find that person and have them read my story again, it would make me very happy

Also, I want a story with no dislikes, because that would be awesome

Thanks for the responses everyone, I would still love to read it if you guys have any guesses on Novus and Alida based on their names and coded conversations. I promise they will be important, at least minor-character important, like the Cutie Mark Crusaders. Also, go look up the song Flying Purple People Eater, because that was a fun punch line to set up, and it was totally MLP canon.

>>713539713539

That reply has absoloutly no sence. I just said I thought it was RainbowSpike.

RIIIIIIIP TO DA GIRL YA USED TO SEE

Sorry, love that song

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Rainbow_Dash.png

>>714702714702

his birthday isn't over = he still hasn't got Rainbow's Present yet

>>714982714982

Me = I Stupid = Shotgun = to = head :3

>>717039717039

LOL, also please at least try and guess about the atmosphere covering rainbow, it is something I've seen before, but I'm pretty sure no one has ever made mention of it in any place I can find, and I just checked google as much as possible, nothing comes close.

If this is a potential spike x rainbow dash then...

Image: http://files-cdn.formspring.me/photos/20120516/n4fb4336038b85.jpg

>>718408718408

Im like you.

I have dreamed of RainbowSpike

That is the offical Shipping name, of course.

I think I can guess it.

BTW Is this clop? Becausse that is how much I dream of this to happen :3

>>719393719393

I accept your love, it feeds my growth

>>720301720301

Sort of, I haven't decided whether I want to include the lemons/smut in this story or write them as companion fics with references in the story.

>>720484720484

Clop = Babys = Marrige =

666 VIEWS! WHAT SOURCERY IS THIS?

okay everyone, viewer input time, I've got the next 15ish chapters outlined in my head and such, but since Zecora was a spur of the moment thing, everytime I try to think of a gift from Zecora I keep ruining my future plans. Hopefully, since you guys don't know what's going on, you could come up with a gift idea that doesn't spoil my story, PLEASE?

this story

Image: http://media.comicvine.com/uploads/5/52044/2060390-i_like_it.jpg

>>726364726364

Thank you very much, if the planets are aligned correctly (c'mon Luna help me out here) then I'll have a new chapter up tonight or tommarrow

>>726375726375 thats not before tommarrow night

>>726381726381

>>726459726459

Image: http://images.cheezburger.com/completestore/2011/8/7/5d151244-5ba5-487c-958d-efdcfe9669a9.jpg

Image: http://img3.lln.crunchyroll.com/i/spire2/d138ef9cfe493641ef99dc4aa8aecd0c1223692635_full.jpg

Cool story so far

Love the story, and take as much time as you want!

nice cant wait for the next chapter

>>743051743051,>>743406743406,>>743515743515

Thank you, Thank you, and Thank you

Image: http://mylittlefacewhen.com/media/f/img/mlfw2637-121208_-_animated_applejack_cider_fluttershy_pinkie_pie_rainbow_dash_rarity_twilight_sparkle_welcome_to_the_herd.gif

great teaser chapter

>>744607744607

thanks, also check out my first comment from the prologue

This is going to be SO AWESOME!

Not sure if this sent you guys an update, I'll be checking my notices and such tomorrow after work, so let me know please.

Pinky just invented rock candy. wait till she finds out she can add food coloring or flavors to it.

Personally, I would have gone with a name like "The Wub Shack" but I guess "The Dragon's Lair" would make for a nice theme, if you could get the right decor...

>>750242750242

I'm pretty much gonna make a theme of Pinkie "discovering" new foods

>>754143754143

Well, I didn't want it to be really cliche with something like wubz, dubstep, etc. in the name (The Love Shack lol), and remember that it was pretty much Spike's birthday present, so of course it's going to be dragon based, plus I think it sounds like a really cool club name if anything I don't think Spikes DJ name was very good, but he won't really be using it much, so it doesn't seem worth it

Dragon's Liar, that's a really good name, it could be used even IRL

And i didn't know that in Equestria the alcohol exists ,  i though that the only kind of drink that looks like somehting with it, was cider, (you know looks like beer )

Good chapter again.

PS: I really have to try one of that drinks someday

>>755235755235

Thanks, I thought Spike had a great idea with that name

Well, alchohol may not be mentioned in the show, but the tech to make it definitely would exist, especially with all the technological advancements they show Twilight having in the Pinkie sense testing scene and her "moniter everything" freak out during the time travel episode, along with Flim and Flam's train-car cider-maker, it's really unlcear just how far along Equestria is technology wise, I feel confident with anything short of the Internet really (I'd have to get back to you on phones though, maybe Princess Celestia just prefers baby dragons suffering to a monthly bill and being accessible for her subjects to call?)

P.S. Did fimfiction send you an update after I added to CH4?

you sick monster

you killed tom

>>759336759336

There's still some left of him at the bottom of the cliff, we can put him back together I swear!

Maybe I'll even have Spike venture down there for seconds?

>>755734755734

eeeenope, it didn't only i got was the private message, and i don't know why it didn't sent me that

>>759828759828

Thanks for letting me know how the alert system works! I'm glad I sent those messages to my commenters so they could read the update asap. When I post the next chapter, I'll have to put an AN telling people to go back and reread it if they haven't already.

know what im doing tonight mixing drinks

>>770139770139

I wasn't too sure about posting pictures in my story because I had come across a storyearlier today that was pretty much an authors note and then a comic from DevArt, and it seemed very out of place on a fiction site. The comic was awesome though, too bad I can't remember the name of the fic...but I do still have the comic.

Don't you love cliffhangers? I know I do.

I LOVE CLIFFHANGERS, REALLY and my favorite pic is the fourth from the top (left to right) good story btw, visiting space was a rich scene so far, enjoyed it

Trollestia uses Cliffhangers It's very effective

Good chapter my friend you deserve a moustache

Great job and I love the 'Drinks' you came up with.

>>779505779505 The 'Send It To The Moon' is a regular show reference right?

Also SPPPPPPPPPPAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAACCCCCCCCCCCCE!

>>780096780096

YAY, someone who can enjoy suspenseful moments and not complain about it!

I also think that is one of the top five I have ever seen, because it continues the shows running gag of "we should have just asked the Princess" (like Spike did in this chapter) and Fluttershy's face as Philomena(?) bursts into flames is hilarious.

>>780675780675

Thank you very much, I shall enjoy my moustache greatly.

P.S. I love it when people use Pokemon for sentence structure, it usually makes everything twice as fun.

>>781399781399

Thank you, but I just got the picture from google.

Yes, yes it is. Just google image Trollestia + Moon (Moon is optional really)

I'm 100% sure I'll have this story finished before Valve releases Portal 3. That's taking into account that the last four chapters only covered about 14 hours of Spike's life, and I plan on trying for this level of detail (when I said plenty of detail in my summary, I meant it) for the next 20-50 years of his life.

>>783340783340

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I don't know who came up with that cocktail list at the end, but everyone knows that an Applejack consists of 1 part applejack and a glass.

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>>791285791285 It took at least an hour to find this. By "find this" I meant stop scrolling and clicking pictures of ponies and get back to posting this comment.

Image: http://th04.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/i/2012/086/4/a/what_do_ponies_drink____applejack_by_4suit-d4sb173.png

Why are all the picures I find so huge?

>>793616793616 Because, everything awesome has to be 20% bigger than everything else. Awesome story so far btw.

>>795382795382

Thanks, how would you feel if I decided to turn this into a sad, short story?

DAMN YOU CLIFFHANGERS!!!!!!!!!

>>798604798604

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>>798405798405 If you turned this into a sad short story, then i would be sad.

Though I'm pretty sure you wont turn this into a sad short story.

>>798799798799

>>798987798987

Later this day might make you a little sad.

But right now I'm going to close my eyes for 6 hours straight! How awesome is that!

>>817929817929 Thats pretty awesome, considering i really should be doing the same but never really sleep at night anyway. Just another night with some good stories.

In the future:

So spike what was your favorite birthday?

oh, just when I turned into a living meteor and saved a life, LIKE A BOSS!

>>695018695018

When's the new chapter ?

>>955334955334

That is a very good question. I pretty much have it planned out, I just have to stop being lazy and turn my outline into a full chapter with details and dialogue. I'm pretty sure you guys don't want to read the 200 word summary I have as a placeholder right now.

when rairty fell it took 46 seconds from clouds dale to the ground

assuming her terminal velocity is 55ms-1 this would mean

that cloudsdale at an altitude 2530 or 8300 ft

a=21(0)

1/m=sin(a/2)

m=1/0.1822...

=5.487( Hypersonic flight)

If M=5.487 assuming that ground air pressure is the same as in our world her volatility would be

5.487*= 1866ms-1

(Aprox 4174 mph)

dash pulled out of the dive at Aprox 20 meters from the ground

(now for the easy part)

centripetal acceleration= v squared/ r

= 1866 squared/ 20

= 174019ms -2 (17739 G)

assuming the average weight of the ponies is 50 kg the result of this whilst carrying 4 ponies thought the sharp dive and pull out,would lead to Rainbows dash wings supporting a massive force of (174019*250) /2 (rainbow dash+ 4 ponies)

would =21752375N (Equivalent to 2217 metric tons which = 32 250 000 kilograms which amazingly means that rainbow dash was carrying 645000 times her own weight

>>11406791140679

mine was defeat a star trek villain give star wars ending

>>12268271226827

Whoah, just saw some of your comments on the other fics I've been reading, like Those Blue Wings, and now your here commenting on this POC?

I need to find a Twilight Sparkle troll picture with her and the squirrel and a caption saying "Does it look like I talk to Squirrels? Not since Powerpuff girls."

Any news on an update?

>>12767771276777

Trying to pick how to introduce the hospital (obviously after that kind of fall). Should I have Spike slowly waking up to the Mane 6 talking around him? Him and Rainbow Dash wake up before they're allowed visitors, talk about what happened, then the rest come in? Skip the 'it's all my fault' 'no it's not' as a summary and move on to what they do while recovering? So many choices, and such riches a plenty. If I had the time (and if it wouldn't be ridiculous), I would try and write every one of those possibilities and post them as separate chapters to be voted on. But then the quality would probably suffer too.

I still have to fix the silliness in the previous chapters as well. Spike shouldn't have had Celestia move the sun back like that (think of what Luna would say). Pinkie Pie should have helped Rarity make the breakfast. I should probably put Fluttershy and Applejack in that scene too, add them in the telling of Tom's demise, then take out Sweetie Belle maybe. Twilight needs some shield spell (that RPG stats thing was dumb in hindsight) and teleportation fixes (silly season 3 song making me look dumb). Lastly, I might expand on Vinyl's scene. I definitely need to add a jealous Bon Bon being led onto the dance floor by Lyra after Pinkie Pie announces her Crystal Candy (which might just be renamed rock candy for simplicity and humbleness).

Eeyup, lots to do and little motivation to do it when there's so much pony on the internet to go read and look at.

>>12770871277087

I can understand that last bit. Argggggg, it ruins productivity.

Lunar maxx mib3 called it!

update? please

One little more, please.