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Twilight embarks on a journey to Skyrim, feeling unnaturally drawn to the foriegn province. She expects only snow-covered ruins, but more awaits her there than she would have ever imagined.

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Very good so far, only one issue.

"The binding was very old, very worn leather with tiny holes and other small damages." Leather is made out of animal hide, including horse hide. Having a book bound with leather would be like having a book bound with human flesh. You might want to change the material, or at least have Twilight disturbed by the book.

... Zebra isn't a proper noun and shouldn't be capitalized every time you use it. Just sayin'

1104684 I never thought of that as an issue. I like to think they have an understanding with other animals regarding materials, like tigers donate their pelt to fashion kinda like we donate our organs.....ok well saying/typing it aloud makes it seem kinda gross. Let's just not think about what leather is and move on. :P

Brilliant! Is Doh Va Kin going to make an appearance? :twilightsheepish:

"The poem also spoke of a land of rock and snow."

If you just showed us the fragment, and the rest of the poem was lost, how is this possible?

well fuck me a slight chance of khajiit in equestria lol i think i fav this since skyrim is awsome and this fic is good i give you a manstache:moustache:

:pinkiegasp: Well holy shit, a TES/MLP crossover that ISN'T a TES-ponified?! Sign me up! :pinkiehappy:

Liking what you have so far too, excellently written.

This shouldn't come as too much of a surprise, so....encrypted-tbn2.google.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcQDkaoo0eyNet-8HT71DYRas7qOtVxADY31FhJkyKeSCQSbG8GX5Q

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I doubt Twilight, or any pony in general, would be disturbed by leather. There's no precedent for one; plus there's a lot of things pony's have that are best made with leather. Like the thing :eeyup: wears around his neck. (The name of which escapes me)

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Actually, that "thing" Big Macintosh wears around his neck is a yoke. They're made to attach to a plow and are best made out of wood.

Twilight gets lost, uses Canterlot voice spell to call out.
Alduin comes out is is like, sup?
Twi is all like, hey i'm lost. wat do?
Alduin: its k, wanna rule the world with me?
Twi: k

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You show us the fragment of the poem:

High upon The Throat of the World,

With blazing breath and wings unfurled,

The voice of destruction rings,

The voice of salvation sings,

Of dragon's soul, scales of coal,

The World Eater soars on death's wings.

Then you write that the rest of the poem was lost over time. How can it also mention a land of rock and snow if it isn't mentioned in that fragment?

1108626 AH! Ok. I see. I changed the fragment. Originally there was a phrase in the fragment, but I re-wrote it. BLAH bit mistake. Sorry about that!! *shuffles off to fix*

Twilight cannot escape the call to skyrim. but nice chapter can't wait till the adventure truely begins :twilightsmile:

Interesting, but it seems like Twilight is going to be very slow at getting on with it. :twilightsheepish:

thats what makes it realistic

Just remember one thing Twilight:
Stay away from Riften!

A word of advice: Don't kill any chickens. It really pisses them off. But by all means, murder the Emperor. They could care less about that.

Twi, you should know that the tombs in Skyrim is full of undead. Be careful when going there.

goodbye ma godbye pa and goodbye girlfriendss breast....wait nevermind awsome story skyrim is awsome keep writing

Wait, Twilight is going to an epic adventure and not even Dash is trying to tag along? Please, tell me they are planning... something! Like that time when Spike left.

I have a sneaking suspicion that Twilight is going to wind up being Dragonborn....

Great chapter!!:pinkiehappy: Looking forward to the next one.:twilightsmile:

Finally... I thought this one would never update! :pinkiegasp: :twilightsmile:

Finally read all the chapters. Have to say, this is getting very interesting. Spotted a few mistakes here and there, but it is very well written. Good job!

At first, I thought Dirge was actually Shadowmere.

1875868 HA! That's awesome! I didn't actually think of that. :rainbowlaugh:

1876415 Black coat, probably even his mane and tail coloured black, tall, has an almost Clydesdale body, and red eyes.
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Hard to think it a coincidence due to it being a Skyrim crossover.

1876463 I'm familiar with Shadowmere. I somehow lost him when I played Skyrim :( But honestly wasn't thinking of him at all when designing Dinge. Black with red eyes was just what came into my head when he appeared in the story. Maybe I'll incorporate a Shadowmere reference now. Thanks for noticing it!

There are a couple of spots where you reference "arms." You might want to check up on that.

1876978 I think people understand that when I say "arms" I mean the front legs. I'll try not to use it though, I agree it sounds a little strange. Thanks!

I like the story and thanks for the cover art!

Imagine is Twilight and Dovahkiin had a foal... Hmm...

*Mind explodes from sheer overkill*

I really like this story, so don't take this too harshly. But one thing stuck out to me that I can't get out of my head.

Skyrim doesn't have a south shore.

2373312 Maybe in this universe Tamriel is like Hawaii: a collection of islands?


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You have to remember she can't get to Skyrim directly. She is going to land in the south and travel in the mountains.

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I am PONY DRAGON BORN!

*snickers*
hahahahahahahaaaaaaa. fuck you and the horse your parent slept with

oh it updated to bad its kinda outdated and everyone stopped caring about sky ah fuck it who am i kidding keep writing its awsome and skyrim is awsome too and it would be awsome they landed in solstenhim and traveled from the east instead

2373312 In order to fit Equestria and Tamriel into one universe I messed with the geography. I might make a map at some point.

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