Long time reader, newbie writer. Hoping you all like my work. Icon art is by the awesomely amazing Foxenawolf over on FA.
Set in Goldfur's Cogsverse
Noah Bluecrest is a young Griffon set on discovering his family past to prove that his family were once noble. He soon discovers that there is more to the world as he comes into possession of a special medallion, that plunges him into a war that the rest of the world never knew about. A war where he is all that stands between the world and utter darkness.
Takes place after A Different Perspective
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So far so good!
Looking forward to seeing where you go with this. It's nice to see a gryphon (griffon?) with a non-predatory bird as a base.
Aside from a few odd paragraph breaks, I've I few suggestions:
your mother and I were
minutes passed
flash of purple
One thing that keeps bugging me.
You can't parry a hammer, and you can't parry with a hammer. It's physically impossible.
Other than that, this was pretty good.
6680606 Thanks Much.
Also I fixed those little errors. Thanks or pointing them out ^_^
6681056 maybe...if it was a really long hammer...
Either way thank you for liking my first story ^_^
6681212 No, seriously. There's simply too much weight on the front to parry, you can only block, deflect and smash.
But your very welcome.
Glad to see the next chapter of a so far promising story. Bit confused with the magic medallion arms set and how he just went with it but then again he and his friends were in danger. Looking forward to the next chapter and the meeting with what seems to be an early Herd of Path.
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Thanks very Much ^_^ I really appreciate you enjoying my first Foray into MLP fic writing
And within a few moments, I saw a minor error that I missed. They're like Pokémon - gotta catch 'em all!
Looking forward to proofreading the next chapter (and getting to read it before anyone else!)
7397633 LOL. That is very true, you do don't you.
What is the minor error? I correct it
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There is a comma missing after Opal in the very last line.
7398535 There we go
Cool chapter but Noah will probably be out of it for a while after that night.
7422512 No doubt about it LOL and, Thanks very much.
Nice use of the Jedi Mind Trick.
I'm'hafta put that up on the TVTropes page.
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Thanks very much.
Well, that certainly saved Free the need to ask what would've been some embarrassing questions. ♪♫
Just remember, you've got a fantastic and very well established AU to work in. That's a hell of a lot of responsibility, but this is a very good start. Looking forward to how fucked up the antagonists are finally going to end up!
8025513 Thanks very much for the compliment. Goldfur is a good friend and he'll often give me pointers on how certain things should be done. But I'll just say Noah and Co. won't be staying with House Path for much longer.
8025434 LOL
Do you think you could link to A Different Perspective?
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Sure thing.
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/246414/a-different-perspective
There ya go.
2 years....
It's a wonder I can remember any of this story. Still, I'm going to need a reread to recall all the goings on again.
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Again I am very sorry it took so long.
But if I may ask, what do you think of this new chapter?
Is this story dead? I really hope not, it's got so much potential! You didnt abandon it did you?
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No it's not dead. It's just taking longer then expected to get the next chapter (which I assure you is in progress) out. But fear not, I have not abandoned it.
I'm very sorry that I made you think it's been abandoned. And also thank you very much for liking it
Fair winds and sharpen your talons, Noah. You're going to need both.
You should also have an emergency phone handy to call on House Path when you'll need them!
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Heh. I'll have to let you know... after I rereread.
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Okay, finished the second rereading.
Hmmm.... with that suicidal griffon, It either looks like a new interested party is trying to get Noah's medallion or just that "Hunter" is patently incompetent in their group.
My money's on they're in the same gang--but it would be far more interesting if Hunter's employer was competing with another dangerous group for collecting those medallions. Three-way conflicts are always far more entertaining.