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It's been a few months since the events of "Past Sins." Twilight has settled into the routine of being a mother, and Nyx has happily settled into the routine of being a (well, MOSTLY) normal little filly. But now they're closing in on one of the favorite holidays of the fall season, Nightmare Night--- which Nyx  has never heard of and knows absolutely nothing about....

Nyx is from Past Sins by Pen Stroke"This story is an unofficial sequel/side-story to Past Sins by Pen Stroke"

First Published
8th Jun 2012
Last Modified
6th Dec 2012

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#1 · Chapter 1 · 97w, 1d ago · · ·

Well this should be interesting... I'm assuming you've got PenStroke's permission for Nyx?

Can't wait to see how Nyx and Luna interact with the Nightmare Night

#2 · Chapter 1 · 97w, 1d ago · · ·

Seems promising. Tracking.

#3 · Chapter 1 · 97w, 1d ago · · ·

It haz nyx?:rainbowhuh:

:pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp:

FOLLOW!!!:pinkiehappy::flutterrage::yay:

P.S: All who love nyx:

There is a fic called present sins. Don't read it for the love of all that is right an good in the world.

Just.Don't.

I needed a brain bleach after SKIMMING the first chapter.*shudder*:pinkiesick:

(no offense to the author)

#4 · Chapter 1 · 97w, 1d ago · · ·

>>715302

He has been informed,yes . I note that there are dozens of Nyx fanfics floating about, so it can be assumed that use in fanfics is accepted.

#5 · Chapter 1 · 97w, 12h ago · · ·

Yay, slice-of-life shenanigans with Nyx! :pinkiehappy:

Twilight being a mom, Nyx hanging out with the Cursaders, and generally getting to know "What happened afterwards?"

It's probably a little early to say much, but I like where this is going. :twilightsmile:

*fav*

Actually, I'm honestly confused how there are so few fics involving the character. :derpyderp2:

I kinda can count off the number of spin-off fics I've come across on a single hand. :derpyderp1:

Even here, on fimfiction, when I search for "Nyx", most of the results are entirely unrelated. :rainbowhuh:

#6 · Chapter 2 · 96w, 6d ago · · ·

Not bad.

It's a little mean, but I burst out laughing at the footnote at the end of the second chapter.

#7 · Chapter 2 · 96w, 6d ago · · ·

Twilight Sparkle finding a 'father-figure' date on Nightmare Night :twilightoops:.... this will be hilarious :rainbowlaugh:

#8 · Chapter 2 · 96w, 6d ago · · ·

Open the date with "oh yeah I have kids" Twilight.

Gets the guys every time.

#9 · Chapter 2 · 96w, 6d ago · · ·

A nice little piece, can't wait to see more.

#10 · Chapter 2 · 96w, 6d ago · 2 · ·

I can see it now. Twilight: "Oh, and I almost forgot, I have a filly who is the reincarnation of Nightmare Moon and took over Equestria in an almost Eternal Night last year :twilightblush:" She'll have them running for the altar so fast they'll be... running right past it and heading for the nearest ocean to swim across. Oi! Get your flank back over here! :twilightangry2: :pinkiehappy:

Why does it not surprise me that Rarity has a little black book :duck:?

And I loved that little extra bit :twilightsmile:

#11 · Chapter 3 · 96w, 4d ago · · ·

First off, poor Nyx :fluttershyouch:... let's hope the nightmares aren't symbollic of anything down the line, and lets hope that the real reason about Nightmare Night can stay a little secret a little longer till at least after it.

Second: D'aaaaaaw and Rumble/Nyx :rainbowkiss::twilightsheepish:

Third: Why oh why can I see bad things on the horizon with the guards, nightmare night, and mommy sparkle? Just getting that tingle in the back of my knee that means that something possibly bad is going to happen...

#12 · Chapter 2 · 96w, 4d ago · · ·

It's good.  A couple of items struck me as odd.

The changeling attack was before Nyx's time?  That would place all the events of Past Sins after season 2, which is not something I would have thought about doing.  Putting it after season 1 would seem natural, but then everything in season 2 has to take place in an alternate universe...

Why does Pipsqueak still speak in british-isms?  I assumed he talked that way in Luna Eclipsed because he was role-playing his pirate costume.

Luna taking over Queen Nyx's abandoned castle is a clever idea.  Although, I imagine it would take a lot of work to shore the thing up, since it was constructed so hastily (and probably held together with spells) in the first place.

#13 · Chapter 3 · 96w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

Funny, I read the guards' lines in Grif and Simmons's voices.

#14 · Chapter 3 · 96w, 4d ago · · ·

I love red vs blue and the voices would really fit them

I give it 5 mustaches :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

#15 · Chapter 3 · 96w, 4d ago · · ·

>>739079

DUDE/DUDETTE; Seriously, they're NIGHTMARES they HAVE to be symbolic(no offense) if they were'nt they probably would'nt BE there.

Also I agree. D'AAAAAAAWWW!!!:heart::twilightsmile::yay:

P.S: my Pinkie sense is tingling!!!:pinkiegasp::twilightoops:

Run for your lives!!!:pinkiecrazy:

#16 · Chapter 3 · 96w, 3d ago · · ·

>>739291 now that you mention it, I had to go back and re-read it over again in their voices.  :rainbowlaugh:

#17 · Chapter 3 · 96w, 3d ago · · ·

Got a funny feeling one of those two Pegasi are gonna be with Twilight :trollestia:

#18 · Chapter 3 · 96w, 3d ago · · ·

The insane sides of the main six, are actually what I would date them for. Those guards don't know what they miss, hiding scared in a closet while your beloved seeks you to "bake" cupcakes "with" her :pinkiecrazy: . Fancy role plays :raritywink: , hours of pain and torture :twilightangry2: , always getting demands that you can't fulfill more, because you do them already on the maximum :flutterrage: . So romantic!!!

#19 · Chapter 3 · 96w, 3d ago · · ·

>>739127

He's from TROTTINGHAM.

#20 · Chapter 4 · 95w, 5d ago · · ·

Yes you have Royal Guard Ponies, yes you have. :rainbowlaugh:

keep up the good work sir!:moustache:

#21 · Chapter 4 · 95w, 5d ago · 6 · ·

"CUTIE MARK CRUSADER ANTI-AIRCRAFT ARTILLERY, YAY!"

Bwahahaha!:rainbowlaugh:

#22 · Chapter 4 · 95w, 5d ago · 1 · ·

Spike has accepted his role as Brother/son then? rather then uncle:moustache:

Also while Spike is a threat, they have the motherbear herself to answer to :twilightangry2:

do continue!

#23 · Chapter 4 · 95w, 5d ago · · ·

Perverth! :twistnerd:

:rainbowlaugh:

#24 · Chapter 4 · 95w, 5d ago · 1 · ·

Oh I'm going to love hearing how they explain their way out of this mess.

And remind me to be careful where I fly next time I visit Equestria... the Crusaders are practically a little army!

#25 · Chapter 4 · 95w, 5d ago · · ·

Okay, so not Grif and Simmons.

But Church and Tucker, definately.

#26 · Chapter 4 · 95w, 5d ago · · ·

sorry about the abbreviated chapter. Had a power outage here, in the middle of typing. The rest of the chapter is up now, though.

#27 · Chapter 4 · 95w, 5d ago · · ·

I wonder if Twilight actually know who the were and what they were up to, along with the other ms e six.  Because AJ didn't seam to surprise about a cloud with two Pegasus whaching the treehouse, but more concern for the apples,

#28 · Chapter 4 · 95w, 5d ago · · ·

>>768489

Ever have a bunch of 8 year olds babbling at you at once?

#29 · Chapter 4 · 95w, 5d ago · · ·

>>769036 :facehoof: let's just say yes I do, but in may case it was an oversea's village and I didn't understand the language.  Hence the origan of my name.

#30 · Chapter 4 · 95w, 5d ago · 1 · ·

Awesomely amazing apple artillery. All alliteration aside.

#31 · Chapter 1 · 95w, 3d ago · · ·

This is a nice start to a story with Nyx. I like Nyx

I'm glad you explained what the numbers were for at the end.

#32 · Chapter 5 · 95w, 1d ago · · ·

Love this story :heart:

Twilight dating... not expected :twilightoops:

*Nyx is sooo cute


*Why do people think that Nyx is a Mary Sue?

Yog
#33 · Chapter 5 · 95w, 1d ago · · ·

Let me guess - Twilight's going to give everyone wings/(fake)horns and turn the girls into Alicorns for a night?

#34 · Chapter 5 · 95w, 1d ago · · ·

>>715349 Son, I am dissapoint

#35 · Chapter 3 · 95w, 1d ago · · ·

>>739291 I read it in Tucker and Chruch's voices

#36 · Chapter 5 · 95w, 1d ago · · ·

>>790229

spite and envy, basically. That and poor education. Certain people (WHINYBYATCHES) "got sick and tired" of Nyx being everywhere (for all of five minutes), and so proclaimed her a 'Mary Sue.'

These people need an education: 'Mary Sue' is not shorthand for "I hate this popular character."

#37 · Chapter 5 · 95w, 1d ago · · ·

Mary Sue or not Nyx is one of two OC fillies that I adore.

anyway for the story ... I got nothing to say other than the usual...

MOAR! :flutterrage:

#38 · Chapter 5 · 95w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

I am liking this so far, good to see more of Nyx in a story.

I still can't understand why people hate Nyx, she is Nightmare Moon reborn for god sake. That alone makes her awesome for me.

#39 · Chapter 5 · 95w, 1d ago · · ·

Oh sweet Celestia, I can see this not ending well with Rarity's matchmaking plans.

#40 · Chapter 5 · 95w, 16h ago · · ·

I have my fair share of issues with adult Nyx (owing to her sheer unrelenting passivity), but filly Nyx is adorable.

#41 · Chapter 5 · 95w, 5h ago · 2 · ·

I've been listening to the Inkspots this entire chapter. It seemed appropriate.

#42 · Chapter 5 · 94w, 5d ago · · ·

...after five chapters, I can savely confirm my previous statement of "I like where this is going". :pinkiehappy:

Nice to see you picking up details from the original story, like the bit with Rainbow Dash leading to an argument with Fluttershy.

By all means, do carry on! :pinkiehappy:

#43 · Chapter 5 · 94w, 4d ago · · ·

Dolan wantz moar pls.

#44 · Chapter 5 · 94w, 2d ago · · ·

Well I certainly enjoyed it!:pinkiehappy: I wasn't expecting Twilight to start dating though! :twilightoops: However, I've enjoyed it. I enjoyed the scene with the two watchers getting applies in da face! And of course I've really enjoyed the relationship between Nyx and Twi. I've found their relationship to be very "d'waa" Keep up the good work! :yay:

#45 · Chapter 2 · 94w, 21h ago · · ·

>>739127 It's hard maintaining your British accent unless you are British.

#46 · Chapter 1 · 93w, 5d ago · · ·

This is sooo great! LOVE PipXDinky!!:pinkiehappy::heart:

#47 · Chapter 5 · 93w, 5d ago · · ·

I didn't know fluttershy a button for that. Oh well, note to self: Don't push it. :flutterrage:

Great story though! Can't wait to see the costumes!:twilightsmile:

#48 · Chapter 5 · 93w, 3d ago · · ·

Just started this yesterday and got caught up to the current chapter. Please tell me the next one is almost finished.

#49 · Chapter 6 · 92w, 6d ago · 6 · ·

Okay.... so now we've got a roaming band of ponies out to kill Nyx... Why am I getting this image of a giant lavender butterfly unicorn divebombing these robed individuals whilst she's in Rapidash mode? :twilightoops:

#50 · Chapter 6 · 92w, 6d ago · · ·

Shit will go down, and it will be glorious.

This can only end well.

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