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An Unimpressive
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An Unimpressive
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Oh, it's you.
I remember reading a blog entry of yours, saying that you were planning to write something like this. I was expecting it to be a straight-up author filibuster about the rickety nature of the Spike/Rarity ship, but this surprised me, in more ways than one.
For one, this isn't an author filibuster, which is great. Ship-sinking filibusters tend to suck hard. This, on the other hand, is actually quite good, and more than a little heartrending. You kept the characters in character, you gave Rarity an extremely sympathetic portrayal (something that I think is rare in stories like this), and you played the angle of her letting him down gently very well. That hug at the end, Spike's tearful, mournful resignation - I knew there was a reason I was watching you, and there it is. You're damn good at this. Well done.
Now, shall I post my seventy page essay rebutting your claims now, or later?
Sadly, that would be the truth, I presume. I will always remain a Sparity fan, however!
Neat piece of work there, mate! Keep 'em coming!
Friendship is Forever Alone.
Poor, poor Spike.
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Pretty Much.
Isn't Rarity jumping the gun here a bit? Not to be morbid, but she'll be dead before he hits puberty naturally. He's mentally mature, not physically.
It's still not entirely healthy for him to fawn over her constantly. Fostering illusions is not very kind. The relationship as friends has much more potential than lady and knight.
Err... wat?
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OH N-
Oh, it's you.
694110
Thanks for the praise, and I await the essay I'll tl;dr.
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And then I realized what my cover image should have been if I could draw.
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True, but his growth spurt in episode #whicheverofthewaytoogoddamnedmanyRarityones means that this could become an issue again.
That's my flimsy rationale, at least.
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I think so too.
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694349 ....... WHAT???
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Exactly.
Well I'm to much of a Sparity fan to like it but at least its a good read. A mix of funny and disappointing/sad.
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Thanks.
694395 .... ERROR. ERROR. ERROR. ERROR. ERROR. ERROR. ERROR. ERROR. ERROR. ERROR. ERROR. ERROR.
SYSTEM LOGIC HAS BEEN OVERLOADED. COMMENCING BRAIN MELT.
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Excellent.
Time to call the President and engage in a cryptic phone call just before the credits. Samuel L. Jackson optional.
That was an excellent read. You kept them both totally in character, addressed his meeting of other dragons and his "confession" and made me emotionally attached to both Rarity and Spike's point of view. I have only one thing to say to you, Shrek 2.
Please continue this as a full length story if you can, for inspiration go to fanfiction dot net and look up "It takes a village". It's a great story about Spike getting older, and includes his realizations about his relationship with Rarity.
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Me leaving things open-ended is sort of my style, and I don't really have enough interest in the pairing to write an epic about them. Still, I'll consider it.
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Works for me, the story still works great as a one shot. Along those lines, I recommend Rarity's Diary by paleowriter on fanfiction.net to you, for your reading pleasure.
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I actually harbor an intense dislike for Rarity, so just based off the title, I'll pass on that.
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404 not found.
Oh, well I am very impressed by the way you wrote her character then, without making her seem like a greedy, self absorbed, high class snob like most do when they write her. As for the story, it's basically her contemplating what happened during "The Secret to my Excess" and her fellings for Spike, I would say it's nuetral towards her being put in a good or bad light though. It's quite similar to your story, but it's more of her thoughts rather than an actual converstion with Spike.
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Luckily, I'm not the sort of person who thinks people/characters I dislike are without redeeming qualities, so I guess my opinions didn't tint my writing too much. Good to know.
Your welcome
That title.
Mario reference?
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Ya think?
694617 Erm.... is that sarcasm or the real deal?
Spike, welcome to the friend zone. It's not so bad. There is cookies and punch by the door.
*On the high seas of Fic*
Looks like the Vindictive is loading a ship sinking torpedo. Hmm...
Well thought out... Easily explained... Plenty of emotion...
Look's like he's letting this ship go down gently.
Good on ya, lad. *puffs some smoke from his pipe*
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The real deal.
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I be sailin' to the next target, I do.
That was entirely enjoyable, though I believe that claiming Best Pony™ Rarity would spend minutes fluffing a cushion might just be stretching my suspension of disbelief a bit
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You need to make that blog post complaining about your EqD rejection now.
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Yes, and clearly I need to join the group too.
Sad Spike? No
Take my thumbs up anyway.
Congrats on being featured on Equestria Daily, probably the only reason I found this story. I was under the impression that this would be about Rarity getting reeeeeally stressed out and tearing into Spike (in a way, I was kind of hoping for it; call me morbid), but nevertheless, I really enjoyed it. The weird bastard in me enjoyed Spike's heartbreak at the end, though. He thinks he's finally moving forward...when he hasn't moved at all.
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I'll admit, it was tempting to write that kind of story.
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Only with the roles swapped, I think.
Ah well, I have a story for this ship in mind myself, maybe I'll do it instead?
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Give it a go.
Personally, I can't stand Rarity, so having someone who doesn't wish for her to be shoved into the background every time she appears in the show write a story about her will probably create better results.
Sigh. Whenever I read a sad fic, I just end up feeling happy once it's over. Heck, I felt like it was a happy ending when My Little Dashie ended, for goodness' sake. I guess I'm just optimistic like that. Not that this story was bad, mind you. I loved it. Good job.
Very well-written story, V. All literary aspects are on par and it deconstructs a pretty significant subject in the fandom. Thing is, I just don't agree with it. Certain things seen in the show may suggest otherwise, but there is no solid rule yet stating that Spike will outgrow or outlive the ponies, and the species difference is meaningless. Every time Rarity pointed it out in this story I just rolled my eyes. Species means nothing if they're equally intelligent. Love means everything.
On Rarity, you did a fantastic job nailing her character, but not Spike's. He's more mature than his years suggest, and you pretty much ignored his dry, sarcastic attitude and wry sense of humor. He has demonstrated a cartoonish infatuation from time to time, but he's not this constantly lovestruck around Rarity.
What this boils down to in my opinion: Great story, message falls flat. Now I'm gonna go read a Twilight & Spike shipfic. With clop.
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The species difference is meaningless?
Uh, yeah. Okay.
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712159
I have to agree with Swashbucklist on all points. (Except for the clop; I'm not in the mood today.)
Species does not matter. The reason zoophilia is taboo in our society is that - as far as we can tell - there are no animals on this planet that match our intelligence and decision-making abilities. Hence a romantic/sexual relationship could never be truly mutual. But in Equestria, different species are on the same intellectual level. The reason for our taboo does not exist.
Spike/Rarity is nothing like, say, a horny girl and her dog. It's more like Sarek and Amanda. (Please google if that doesn't ring any bells for you.)
712340
You're taking this story too literally.
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Your story has Rarity rejecting Spike as a romantic interest because of their species difference. I think that's a lousy reason. S'all.
I'm... not sure what that means.
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Vimby - If you can explain why the species gap in this situation has any reason to dictate the affection Spike or any other filly may have for each other, I'm all ears.
Softy - I'm not entirely sure Vimbert's reasoning had anything to do with zoophilia. He probably just thinks it's wrong from a moral or biological standpoint.
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Once again, this is being taken too literally. Consider what Spike represents.
Nice concept and well-written in general, but the execution has some iffy points.
> Uncomfortable Stare Spike is turned up to 11. The only scene in the series where I remember Spike acting like this is that "dragon pincushion" one from "Green Isn't Your Color", and that was clearly playing it for laughs.
> The point where Spike ignores a direct request from Rarity to leave broke my suspension of disbelief. Since when has he ignored and imposed on Rarity like that? What would his motivation even be? "I just want to stare more, I don't give a f*** what Rarity wants." Then, profit? Does not follow.
> Rarity's conclusion regarding the possibility of other dragons like Spike completely ignores the highly unusual circumstances of Spike's upbringing. Also, way to trample all over the whole "Spike is one of us" point from "Dragon Quest". More like, "You're one of us, darling, but don't get any funny ideas." in this case. Nice.
> This is just a personal conclusion, but the only thing that the series has ever said about the growth of dragons is that they grow as their hoard grows. If that's the case, then it follows that a dragon's growth is HEAVILY influenced by his/her environment, perhaps even moreso than age. Telling Spike to back off of ponies with this in mind is pretty darn cruel, in my opinion.
> Also, if the series pulls something like this after the awesome of "Secret of My Excess", I rage quit.
Excellent story! By the way, what exactly is an author filibuster? I kinda get what it means knowing what a filibuster is, but I feel there's some context I'm missing here.
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http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/AuthorFilibuster
Basically, it's me admitting this fic is kind of garbage.
713733 Ah, I see. Thank you!
713048 And Spike represents ... the ignorance of youth? An immature infatuation? A child developing a crush on an adult? If that's what you're saying, it's limited to this fanfic, because canon Spike is better than that (not to mention closer to the mane six's ages than every anti-Sparity brony seems to think).